Hello, everyone. I've contained all my fanfictions into one topic...

NOTE: The Final Cases has been permanently discontinued. I do not like the way it's going, and will most likely redo it. However, you can enjoy my new fic (which has 11 chapters now):

(WARNING! EVERYTHING GONE WRIGHT CONTAINS MAJOR, MAJOR TnT SPOILERS!!!

Below is the banner for the fic, and IT HAS MAJOR TnT SPOILERS. THIS IS THE LAST WARNING.)


























(Special thanks to Elriel for the banner! :D)

It is called Phoenix Wright: Everything Gone Wright. I'm only going to be posting links to the chapters for that, as I do not wish to go back and re-format everything for forum use. If you want links to the latest chapters, simply follow this link to see EVERY chapter thus far:

(NOTE: RIGHT NOW I AM REVAMPING EACH CHAPTER SO THE FANFIC LOOKS BETTER. READ THE AUTHOR'S NOTE ON THE FIRST CHAPTER.)

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Sounds good so far. I love this pairing! I look forward to more.

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Here comes Chapter 2!

(Just to let everyone know, I'm done with up to Chapter 5... But I'm stll sticking with one a day.)

This is my personal favorite chapter so far because of what happens in the middle of it all.



Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Final Cases

Case 1: Turnabout Vigilante

Chapter 2: Investigation


- May 12, 1:30 PM
Supermarket, Entrance -

They entered the Supermarket, but couldn't go in because of security. "Sorry... we can't let people who aren't directly with the Police Department in," was all they could say.

They began to walk out, before Phoenix heard a familiar voice. "Hey, pal! What are you doing here!?"

Phoenix turned around and saw the familiar face of Detective Dick Gumshoe. "Oh, Detective Gumshoe. We were just--"

"Don't 'we were just' to me, pal. You're going to come in and get clues and everything... and you're not even defending the suspect!" he said, wearing his usual angry face. "You can't come in here if you're gonna do that!"

"But... I don't want to blindly accept this..." he handed the letter he got in the mail to Gumshoe, "...before I can assure myself there is some doubt that this Pete Jay did not commit the murder."

Gumshoe read it over. "... Pal, is this blackmail?"

Phoenix facepalmed. "...Uh, it didn't have a real consequence to it, I'd call it more of a taunt letter. 'If you really are Phoenix Wright... show me in court!' But it does make it seem a bit odd..."

"Well, pal, I'll let you in this once. I do owe you for Maggey's case four months ago. And, this time, I'll even give you answers to anything you ask me. That's all I can do."

"Thank you, Detective!" said Maya happily, and Gumshoe led them in.

...

The place was packed with police officers. "... I thought the murder occured in one aisle! The police are EVERYWHERE!" said Maya. "

"Well, of course, pal! The security cameras caught more than one shot of them... apparently they went over a few places before having their duel in the pasta aisle there..."

"Wait... duel?" said Phoenix.

"Yeah. Apparently the victim was hit hard over the head with something. He fell and bled to death. We tested the blood near him... and it was his."

"What tipped you guys off? Did the workers come in this morning and then call you?" asked Phoenix.

Gumshoe chuckled. "Nope. We arrived around 3 AM. The Emergency Buzzer sounded from the store, but it's silent inside of the store. We heard it and came as fast as we could."

'Gah... this situation is getting worse and worse as I hear more... Can I really acquit this guy? It really seems like he did it!' Thought Phoenix.

Gumshoe led them over to the pasta aisle. They saw the body tape, and the mass amount of red around it, and in it. "... I'm getting sick just looking at it," said Iris, and she hid herself behind Phoenix.

"I'm not even touching that," said Maya.

Gumshoe then led them to the next aisle. "Here's the odd thing. We found this lockpick right on the ground here... it's designed to unlock any door of any kind, as long as it's used correctly. Not exactly idiot-proof, but it's easy enough to use."

Phoenix picked it up. "Hm... mind if we take it for now?"

"Go ahead, pal. It might be good evidence." Phoenix then put it in his pocket.

"Listen, pal," continued Gumshoe. "I'm starting to think that this case isn't as open-and-close as everybody thinks. The cameras saw two people, but we never saw the lockpick until now. Even with night-vision, we can't tell who the people were. Of course, if only two people were seen..."

"Then it's able to be concluded that only two people entered. Supposedly," said Phoenix. "But there are those who know where the cameras are, where they point and rotate, if applicable, and how to get past them." He remembered two years ago how Jake Marshall injured Mike Meekins in the Police Department Security Room, and esacped without being seen. Ron DeLite was also able to get out of the CEO's room of KB Security without being seen by any of the cameras, due to him being a Security Captain.

"That's why I want you to look at this," said Gumshoe as he handed Phoenix a tape. "This is what one of the cameras recorded. It contains the duel that they had. See if you can identify what this is, and if there's anything strange in it. I'm counting on you... I may not know the people in this case, but I do hate condemning the wrong people..."

Phoenix took the tape. "Thanks, Gumshoe. We're going to go back to the office and look at this, and then talk to the defendant."

"Take care, pal."


- May 12, 2:15 PM
Wright & Co. Law Offices -


Phoenix, Iris and Maya came inside and closed the door behind them. Phoenix inserted the tape into the VCR/DVD player that he had, but didn't push play. Maya had cleared her throat; a clear sign she needed to say something, so in courtesy Phoenix did not push play, and instead turned around to face her. "What is it, Maya?"

"Well... I kind of forgot that I need to go to Hazakura Temple." she responded.

"What for?"

"That Ultra Course thing. I promised Sister Bikini I'd come take it today. It'll only take until tomorrow morning. You can handle it on your own until then, can't you?"

"He won't be handling it alone," said Iris with determination. "I will help him in any way I can."

Maya smiled and nodded. "Sister Iris, I can count on you, this much I know." She then whispered in Iris' ear. 'He wants to talk to you anyway... good luck.' And with that, she left.

Phoenix sat down in a chair, and Iris sat down beside him. He sighed. Iris looked over at him. "Are you okay, Feenie?"

"Yeah... I just haven't had a case in three months. This entire thing reminds me of the case against Damon Gant two years ago..."

"... But that's not what you're thinking about, is it?" said Iris, hiding her half-pink cheeks.

"... Iris, I want to talk to you." Phoenix looked serious. "This is something I've been meaning to talk to you about ever since three months ago."

"You mean... during the trial?" She looked confused for a moment.

"Yes... you told me what had happened six years ago at the end of it all... and now I want to talk to you. Every time I've tried..."

"...Pearl came in and slapped you." said Iris, stifling a giggle. "Yes, of course."

"Well... you already know my thoughts on it. How I knew it was you and not her, somehow, even though I didn't know you 'existed'..."

"... You didn't know I 'existed'?"

"Sorry, let me reprhase. I didn't know Dahlia Hawthorne had a twin sister at the time."

"Don't feel bad, Feenie. Not a lot of people knew."

"... But now... after all is said and done... the past burns me."

"I-I'm sorry, Feenie. I know I betrayed you and made you think I was Dahlia..." But then Phoenix put a finger on her lips.

"Don't. You didn't betray me." He stood up and walked around. "You just did what you had to do... and eventually wanted to do."

She stood up. "I wanted to stay with you! I really did! But then Dahlia tried to kill you and..." she found her eyes full of tears. "I was afraid that she had succeeded, even slightly, before I returned to Hazakura Temple."

Phoenix turned around and faced her. "But when I came to see you, you did look surprised... is that why?"

"Feenie... it had been six years between the two times I called you by that nickname. I didn't want to tell you, I was afraid--"

"I know."

Phoenix walked up to her. Iris found her face flushing bright red. She then went on. "I... I loved you! I had never felt this way about anyone else before... I was in pain. You thought I was Dahlia Hawthorne... and I didn't have the heart to tell you who I really was. Feenie, I was scared... I was scared you wouldn't accept me, that you loved who you thought was Dahlia Hawthorne, not I... I... wanted to be by your side all the time, I felt that you would protect me from anything. That's why I stood by your side. I felt stronger just being with you. We ate alone, we spent time together alone, and we... were in love... weren't we?"

Phoenix looked her straight in the eyes. "Iris... I loved you too. Even though I thought you were Dahlia Hawthorne... I saw you.... as you were. You were pure, you were innocent, you were cute, and I... I loved you."

"Feenie... do you love me now?"

"..." Phoenix flashed back to his past. Did he still love Iris...? This was an almost obvious answer. Of course he did. He just never thought he would be able to say it... until now. "...Yes, I still love you, Iris."

Iris tried her best not to dissolve into tears. She then ran and threw herself on him, resting her head on his shoulders, finally letting go of her restraint and crying. "I... I love you... even now... Oh, Feenie..." She sobbed into his shoulder.

He knew he didn't need to say any more, and she knew she didn't either. They had confessed to each other, and now maybe, just maybe, they can rekindle their love for each other... over time. There was no need to rush things; after all, they had a job to do. Iris let go of Phoenix and stepped back. She wiped the rest of her tears away, and smiled. "Don't we have something we need to do?"

"Oh yeah. Let's watch that surveillance tape and see what we can find." Phoenix cut on the tape. Immediately Iris shielded herself as a bright green color filled the screen. Phoenix watched as it flickered and showed two long lines illuminated - the camera had night vision enabled and could see objects that obscured any further vision. Soon, one figure was walking down the aisle. It stopped as another appeared, and both seemed to be facing each other. Before long, one of them stumbled backwards and crashed into the aisle, and fell onto the floor.

'....Wait. I thought I saw something,' Phoenix thought. He rewinded it a bit and looked a bit closer.

He was right; a very small green line was shown at the bottom of the tape right before the victim (or was it the victim?) stumbled and fell. And something small had flew across the screen from that line to the silhouette.

"Feenie... did you see what I saw...?"

"Oh yes, I did. We need to hurry."

They made haste to the detention center; They had to discuss this matter with the defendant.


- May 12, 3:50 PM
Detention Center -


Phoenix and Iris burst into the Center, knowing full well they had limited time before visitation hours were over. "We're here to see Pete Jay!" Phoenix said to the receptionist.

"Very well. Please proceed to Visitation Room #3."

They walked in and sat down. On the other side of the room sat a man. His yellow hair looked unkempt, his green shirt frazzled, and his overall demeanor seemed pretty shaken. He wore a serious face, however, and said, "Why have you come?"

"I'm Phoenix Wright. Ace Attorney," said Phoenix. Pete tilted his head.

"Defense attorney, eh...? You came to defend me?"

Phoenix nodded. "Well, alright then. Have you found anything out so far?"

"We believe we saw something odd with the tape we were given. But, I want to ask you. Did you notice anything odd at the scene of the crime? What happened?"

Pete looked at them. "I saw a silhouette entering the supermarket from the back door. He seemed to be breaking in; It was about 1 AM. I don't know why, but I felt compelled to follow this person and find out what was going on. Eventually, I got in, but he was nowhere to be seen. I walked around, and eventually found him in one of the aisles."

"And then...?"

"We stared each other down. He asked why I had followed him, and I said that I didn't want to let him steal anything. As he was about to get something, I heard a small noise and he fell back, hit a bottle of pasta, and fell onto the floor. The pasta bottle fell and crashed on the ground beside him."

"Wait... wait a second. You're telling me that all that blood we found...?" said Phoenix.

"It's not all blood. Some of it's pasta."

Phoenix facepalmed. That ruled out the possibility of the victim, Jaden, dying due to loss of blood. This made the case much harder to think about; how did the victim die!?

"Well, I expect you'll have your work cut out for you, but you are Phoenix Wright, aren't you? I'm sure you'll figure it out."

Visitation time was now over. Phoenix and Iris made their way to the scene of the crime one more time.

They were determined to find at least one more clue.


- May 12, 4:10 PM
SuperMarket Entrance -


Detective Gumshoe was waiting. "Well, pal? What did you find out?"

"I'm not entirely sure yet, but there seem to be a major contradiction or two in that video you gave me..." Phoenix responded.

"Oh. Hm. Well, I guess you'll show it in court, right?"

"Of course."

"Gonna look for a few more clues, pal?"

Phoenix nodded, and he let them inside. Phoenix looked around, determined to figure out the cause of this murder. "The problem is, this murder doesn't seem like it'll call for any witnesses."

"That's right, pal. They intend to call the defendant and force the truth out of him. Whether it's good or not. The Prosecutor for this case is Franziska von Karma."

'Franziska von Karma...' Phoenix knew very well that Franziska wanted to finally settle their score from the two court cases they fought each other over, as she had been upping her win record in another country. "Well, I guess it's... hey, what's that?" Phoenix noticed a bit of sparkling that eminated from under a stand. He bent down, and reached under it...

...and found a strange metal device. It had a suction cup on it, as well as a gauge and needle. "Hmm... what is this...?" said Phoenix. He showed it to Gumshoe, who exploded into action.

"That's a safe breaker, pal!" Gumshoe roared out.

"A safe breaker!?" Phoenix repeated.

"Yeah! Those things where you stick them on safes and while you turn the dial on the safe, this device tells you how close you are to the actual combination! Where'd you find that!?"

"...Right here, under this stand..."

Phoenix looked over and saw the safe that held the store's money. He also saw that not only were three cameras carefully trained on its spot, but there seemed to be a device on the ceiling above it... "Gumshoe, what is that on the ceiling?"

"A very well-designed detector, pal," was his response. "It detects movement, sound, and heat. It was designed to set off an alarm if anyone tried to get into the safe in any way after the alarm was set. But it never went off."

"But couldn't've the victim or suspect...!?"

"Well, there's one thing. The entire electrical system was said to malfunction for around five minutes last night. The cameras, the sensor, and the lights were all off. Not even the executives knew why. They're still looking into it."

Iris looked around. "The thing we saw in the camera video... the lockpick and the device... and the strange falling of the victim... it's almost as if this was all plotted out."

"I wouldn't say so, pal. But some of it does look a bit doctored... you have to find out the truth tomorrow!"


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Phoenix knew what was coming next.

He had to defend his client in court. With only a few pieces of evidence. As always.

But who IS this person? And what happened back there?

Only in court could he really prove this to everyone... He led Iris to his apartment, and they slept. But Phoenix couldn't sleep at first, and found himself sitting up thinking. Iris sat up and walked over to him, and sat down beside him. "Feenie? What's wrong?"

"Oh... Iris. It's nothing. It's just, I'm so used to this, but I'm still afraid that I'm barking up the wrong tree when I'm defending this person?"

"Don't feel that way," said Iris as she put her hand on his shoulder. "You know what you're doing. You've turned into such a respectable man over the years, Feenie... and I know that you know what to do. I'll be there beside you in court... even if I can't help much, I promise I'll do whatever I can."

"Thanks... Iris. We need to get some sleep though."

Iris nodded, and they both went back to sleep...

-END OF CHAPTER-

Author's Note: I just now figured out I could have made that confession scene a lot better... but I was playing the song "Reminiscience ~ True Pain" from PW:JFA while writing it, and I was already shedding a few tears over how the scene was playing in my head. (If you all must know, I have a weakness for scenes like that D:) But if anyone wants an extended scene of that, I just might write it for all you PxI fans out there. (It can be an EX Chapter XD)

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Last edited by Xero Wright on Wed Nov 21, 2007 10:16 pm, edited 3 times in total.

It seems we have a lot of very talented writers on this site.

You have proven yourself worthy to fall into that category as well.

I can't wait to read the next chapter! A wonderful start to a (hopefully) wonderful fanfic. I'll be watching this one...

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Heeeere's Chapter 3! The exciting Court Session for the first case!!

Let's-a go!



Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Final Cases

Case 1: Turnabout Vigilante

Chapter 3: Court


- May 13, 9:38 AM
Defense Lobby 7 -

"So, you think you figured it out?" asked Pete.

Phoenix nodded. "It seems almost obvious what had happened, and it's the only explanation. I'll present the evidence in court and prove what happened."

"...Mr. Wright. Be sure you know what you're talking about when the time comes," said Pete seriously. "I know you know this already, but this case is supposed to go very quickly... and it looks like it'll only be one day."

"Heh... I've survived worse cases," Phoenix responded. "Well, it's time to go."


- May 13, 10:00 AM
District Courthouse 4 -

The audience bickered for a second before the judge slammed his gavel down. "Court is now in session for the trial of Pete Jay."

"The Defense is ready," said Phoenix.

"...The time has come, Mr. Phoenix Wright," said a voice from the Prosecutor's bench that Phoenix still knew all too well.

"Er, Ms. von Karma, are you--OUCH!" said the Judge before he was hit with a whip.

"Silence! Just get on with it!" said Franziska von Karma. "I want to get this over with and go home, got it!?"

Franziska sure didn't seem like a happy camper with this case. Though her goal was always perfection, it seemed this time she knew it wasn't entirely possible. Though Phoenix knew, above anything else, that she'd try to throw theories in his face along with that whip she carrried.

"Very well. Your opening statement, please," the Judge said, half-cowering from the whip.

"On 2 AM on the night of the murder, the suspect and the victim walked into the supermarket. Eventually they had a brawl, and one killed the other. I intend to prove that's the case. ... The end." She bowed.

"Call your first witness, then, if you please," said the Judge.

"DETECTIVE! GET UP HERE!" Franziska literally screamed.

'Poor Gumshoe...' thought Phoenix.

Gumshoe came to the stand. Franziska looked about ready to kill. "Forget asking for name and occupation. Just get on with it already."

"Yessir!" Gumshoe said.


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"The murder happened at 2:15 AM in the Supermarket. This man, Jaden Fawkes, was seen breaking in via video camera, along with one other person. The camera beside the door was not working at the time, so it didn't capture them entering. This video, however..." Gumshoe pulls up a copy of the tape he gave to Phoenix. "...shows that the victim and suspect met each other, and the suspect killed the victim."

"... If that is the case, then I'm afraid this case is over before it really begins," said the Judge. "Begin your Cross-Examination, Mr. Wright."

"With pleasure," said Phoenix.


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"OBJECTION!" said Phoenix after thinking it all over. He then held up the tape. "I think it's obvious the defendant did not harm the victim, as seen in this video."

"What!?" said Franziska. "Alright then, Mr. Phoenix Wright. Earn your keep, and tell us where this contradiction lies!"

Phoenix uses the tape player on his podium and shows the court the tape. He then points out the object that's thrown across the room at the victim, causing him to get knocked over. The defendant, however, never moved. "I fail to see how this makes the defendant the killer!"

Franziska was taken aback. "Ah...!" she was already sweating, but thinking up a theory. "What if it didn't kill him, but the defendant finished him off afterward?"

"How would that be possible!?" demanded Phoenix.

"What about the unaccounted five minutes when the electrical system shut off!?" Franziska shot back.

"Gack...!" said Phoenix.

The court bickered, before the gavel was slammed down again. "Order! Order!" said the Judge angrily. "Well, Mr. Wright? Care to explain what you think happened?"

Phoenix thought to himself. 'That green line that appeared before the item was thrown... I think it was obviously a third person that was in the area! But I have to prove it... and support it... fast!'

"Feenie? Do you know what happened?" asked Iris.

Phoenix nodded. "Don't worry, Iris. I know what I'm going to do."

Phoenix then turned to Franziska. "Very well then, von Karma. I'll show you what really happened!" He then backed up to right before the item was thrown, and paused it. He then pointed at the green line. "Do you see this short green line? Night vision shows any obstacle as a green illumination... meaning that something appeared during the course of that video!"

Franziska raised an eyebrow. "Oh? Do tell."

"It was obviously a third person! Where else would this thrown item come from?"

Franziska looked surprised. "Agh! .... Do you know what the thrown item was?"

"I have a hunch..." said Phoenix. He procured the metal safe-breaking device. "...and this is it."

"Is that a device for breaking into safes!?" exclaimed the Judge.

"Indeed it is, Your Honor. We found it under a stand in the Supermarket, a bit away from the crime scene," said Phoenix.

"Wouldn't that make it not part of the actual crime?"

"Not always. People tend to hide things that they've used in crimes... and it looks like we found it."

"Ah...!" Franziska looked like she got shot at from point-blank range, but had missed.

"What do you have to say now... Detective Gumshoe?"

Gumshoe didn't look fazed. "... I helped you find that, remember pal-- OUCH!" Franziska had whipped him.

"You fool! If you had helped him find the item, why didn't you tell me about it!?"

"Sorry, it slipped my mind--OUCH!" Whipped again.

Franziska looked pissed off. "Damn it, Mr. Phoenix Wright! Why do you always have to have every answer to every hole in a story, even if they're miniscule!? Detective, get off the stand. It's time to continue this trial."

"Y-Yessir!" said Gumshoe. He ran off the stand, away from Franziska's whip.

"Now then... I call the defendant to the stand!" said Franziska.

Pete came up to the stand. "Name. Occupation. Now," said Franziska severely.

"Pete Jay. I used to be an investigator, but I quit a year ago. Now I'm a freelancer."

"Good. Now, testify for us about the day of the murder. And hurry up with it!"


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"I saw someone entering the Supermarket. He used a device to unlock the door, and slipped in. I came in after him, but he had disappeared. By the time I found him, we stared each other down. Then, he seemed to be hit with something and slumped over. ... I have no knowledge of the events after this."


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Phoenix began his crossexamination. "HOLD IT! How long did it take you to find him?"

Pete thought for a moment. "It took me a couple of minutes. Most of the lights were out. I'd say it was about 2:10 when I found him."

'That's the time of the video... so that's not contradictory.' He then pressed on the final statement. "What do you mean you have no knowledge of the events after that?"

"I... blacked out. I'm not sure why, but after he fell, I found myself falling as well. When I woke up, I was in custody."

"But in the video, you weren't shown falling before the video ended..." said Phoenix.

"I fell after the electricity burned out. I heard a loud boom as I fell unconscious as well."

"Wait... a loud boom? What did it sound like?"

Franziska held her whip at the ready. "Are you quite finished with your babbling, Mr. Phoenix Wright? Is this really necessary to ask the defendant?"

The Judge nodded. "The Prosecution has a point. Does this noise make any real difference, Mr. Wright?"

Phoenix nodded. "Of course it does. Defendant, what happened that night?"

Pete looked skeptical. "It... it was storming. The storm happened to be directly above the supermarket that night."

Phoenix looked thoughtful. "Perhaps that's what caused the electrical system to malfunction temporarily... And what of the third person?"

"What third person?" asked Pete. "I don't remember any third person..."

"You see, Mr. Phoenix Wright?" said Franziska triumphantly, giving her childish smirk. "I think your mind was playing tricks on you--"

"OBJECTION!"

"I think you're forgetting one thing!" said Phoenix. "The weapon was thrown at the victim from an angle the suspect couldn't've achieved!"

"You mean... ... ...ARGH!" Franzisk crossed her arms, sweating. "How can this be!?"

"That proves, beyond a shadow of a doubt, that someone else was there. All we need to do is find out who that person is."

"And how do you plan to do that, Mr. Phoenix Wright?!" said Franziska. "You don't even know who this person is!"

"No... but the defendant does!" Phoenix shot back.

"He just said--" began Franziska, but Pete spoke up. "No... he's right."

Franziska readied her whip. "You have approximately fifteen seconds to tell me why you lied..."

"I didn't lie. I just didn't remember." Pete thought hard for a moment. "That person... he had to have worked there... he evaded all of the cameras, and he had the lockpick and safe-breaking device. He had to have came in behind me... but I did see him before I blacked out... I even know who he is!"

"GAAACK!" Franziska dropped her whip, shocked at this confession. "You're playing on my last nerve here. Who was it!?"

"... His name was Matt Fawkes. Jaden's brother."

The court bickered, and the Judge whacked his gavel. "Ms. von Karma! You are hereby ordered to find this Matt Fawkes. Hurry!"

"No need... I'm already here."

Matt Fawkes walked down from the audience. He was wearing a blue T-Shirt and blue jeans, as well as a white hat over his hair.

"Name and profession...?" said the Judge.

"Matt Fawkes. Brother of the victim. Currently no occupation."

"Very well. Testify to your whereabouts on the night of the murder."


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"I didn't go to the Supermarket that day or that night. I was busy preparing for a job interview the next day. I had no idea about the safe-breaker device or the lockpick, nor did I know about the electrical shutdown."


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"OBJECTON!" Phoenix found himself saying almost right away. "Electrical shutdown?"

"Well, yes. Someone hacked into the system and shut it down, didn't they?"

"... No, it was thought of that a lightning bolt hit the power cables and temporarily disabled everything."

"Ack!" Matt looked shocked. "W-Well, that still doesn't prove that I was there!"

"Sure it does. How else would you know?"

"M-My brother told me!"

Phoenix facepalmed. 'This guy's an idiot.' "Your brother died within the Supermarket. He wouldn't've been able to tell you... so thanks for proving my point this early in the cross-exmaination."

"NOO!" said Matt.

"So you're telling me... he also used to work at that supermarket?" asked Franziska.

Phoenix replied, "Of course. How else would he have evaded all the other cameras? Even then he wasn't perfect...that one tape did capture part of his head, after all."

"... ... But why would I kill my own brother? Can you prove that, Mr. Wright?" said Matt. "Why would I do such a thing?"

"..." Phoenix couldn't figure it out. Why WOULD one kill their own brother? It's true he knew nothing about them... but why?

"Time's up, Mr. Wright. Why do you think this witness would kill his own brother?" asked the Judge.

"I can think of only one explanation for the moment... and it has to do with why they were there. Mr. Fawkes. You came in with a lockpick and safe-breaker device. I could think of only one reason - You wanted to break into the safe and steal the money inside!"

"ACK!" said Matt. "Y-You found the two devices!?"

"That's right. You and your brother wanted to open the safe... and you knew how to get around the cameras... because you used to work there!"

Matt looked like he was just punched in the face. "Argh... you're definitely good, Phoenix Wright... But that still doesn't answer why I would kill my own brother!"

"I'm not done yet."

"WHAT!?"

Phoenix shook his head. "You knew about the sensor that called the police if you tried to break into the safe. So you snuck into the back, hacked into the system, and ordered a system shutdown. Even though you could do that, you knew you would have a limited time before the system restarted and shut back on. But by then you realized that the defendant had followed you in..."

"No, I followed HIM in!"

"Ah, yes, he followed your brother and you followed him. Well, let's see. You saw them confronting each other... and you wanted to break into the safe, but didn't want the person to know you were there. But while thinking, you were running out of time. You panicked. You threw the device, and missed, hitting your brother instead."

"!"

"And before the defendant could turn around and see you... you snuck up and knocked him across the head and knocked him out!"

The court went into a furious frenzy of chatter. The judge whacked his gavel three times. "Order! Order! Order! OOOORDEEEEEER! MR. WRIGHT! Explain yourself for this accusation!"

"It's simple, Your Honor. He panicked, having the timer tick down on him. But when his brother fell, he jumped to his side, and felt his heartrate. That's when he realized the horrible truth: He had hit his brother across the head with the metal device, and he crashed into glass bottles and smacked onto the floor. His body ceased to function. He had caused the death of his own brother. But he still wanted the money, what they had planned to get in the first place. So he began walking towards the safe."

"But all the money's still in the safe!" said Franziska. "The police were called there, yet they never found him!"

"Then I have one explanation. I'm sure the place has a nice little silent buzzer on the wall that the front cashier can hit if he or she is held up. If lightning struck and thunder blared and scared him... He could have simply stumbled from being surprised and knocked into the buzzer. Then... he simply went out the way he came, before the electricity turned on."

"But the buzzer is connected to the electricity!" said the Judge.

Phoenix shook his head. "Actually, the buzzer is connected to a separate line. If the power goes out and they need to use it, it has to be available. I'm sure it also has another way to reach the Police Department if that line goes out."

Franziska and Matt both looked shocked. "But-but you can't prove that I did it! Even with that ridiculously long theory, you have no proof that it was me!"

"Gack!" Phoenix was taken aback. He hadn't realized that the only way he can condemn someone is by proving conclusive evidence. Even with the perfect theory, it's only a theory in itself.

"Feenie, don't give up now!" Iris said to Phoenix. "You have the evidence! Don't think too hard... you can do it!"

"I-Iris..." Phoenix thought to himself. 'I've got to end this now. What can I provide that'll condemn Matt once and for all?'

"Well, Mr. Wright?" said the Judge. "Can you prove once and for all that Matt Fawkes killed his brother?"

"...Yes, I can, Your Honor," said Phoenix. He procured the video one more time. "Take a look once more, if you will..."

As the video cut off, the person moved. He paused the video at that time. "Look. This proves a third person was there. We proved earlier that Matt was there, and that he knew how to get around the cameras. We also deduced that he hacked into the system and temporarily shut down the cameras. But this video shows proof of the killing - the device being thrown and the victim being hit by it. It was enough to kill him if it damaged his skull or brain enough... isn't that right... Matt?"

"...I...I...I..." Matt could barely speak. He was caught. "I... No.. no... I needed it all... I wanted it all... SO I HAD TO!"

"... You mean... you killed your brother on purpose?" said the Judge.

"I... I confess... I killed him... I'm a greedy person and I killed my brother... all the guilt I feel... it's all true... if we had gotten the money, there would have been no way for them to tell it was us; Jaden simply slipped up when he found the defendant and ended up being in sight of the cameras, and I did... but I'm guilty! Just get it over with!"

"Grr.... Mr. Phoenix Wright...!" said Franziska.

Phoenix almost forgot she was still there. "Don't feel bad, Franziska. We all have our off days--OUCH!" He was then whipped by her.

"I'll get you next time! I swear by it!" said Franziska.

The gavel sounded.

"I think it's time to pass judgement on Mr. Pete Jay. This court finds the defendant..."


---NOT GUILTY---


"Court is now adjourned!"


- May 13, 3:40 PM
Defense Lobby 7 -

"You did it, Feenie!" said Iris, and she ran and hugged him. "I knew you could do it!"

"Thanks... Iris," said Phoenix, smiling. But then Pete approached.

"...Thanks, Mr. Wright. I owe you for that. And I'm sure my brother will be happy too when he finds out."

"No problem... but tell me, why did you follow the person?"

"I wanted to see what he was doing... and if he was going to steal something, I wanted to stop him at all costs."

Phoenix rubbed his chin thoughtfully. "Ah... you were a vigilante, then... You did get Matt condemned. So, I wouldn't feel too bad about it."

"Thank you!" Pete ran out of the courthouse.

Iris then approached Phoenix again. "I'm still so glad you were able to figure it out. I couldn't figure it out myself, at all... but I'll still stay by your side!" and she smiled.

"Thank you, Iris," said Phoenix. He found himself blushing. Iris found herself blushing too, and they found their faces only inches apart, as they finally closed the gap and their lips met, a feeling they had not experienced in six years. They wrapped their arms around each other for a moment, before breaking the kiss, looking into each others' eyes and blushing.

"Well, shall we go back? You still have to show me around... Feenie," said Iris.

"Yeah... let's go," said Phoenix. Hand-in-hand, they began to walk out of the courthouse...

SMACK!

"OW! P-Pearls!!"

"How could you, Mr. Nick! And with another woman!" Pearl looked defiantly mad at Phoenix.

"Pearls, enough with this! ... Go talk to Maya, she'll tell you what's going on."

Pearl looked down. "... ... Okay."

Iris bent down and pat Pearl on the head. "Pearl... I'm sorry."

Pearl looked back at Iris. "Ms. Iris... I understand now, I think... I paid attention during your case... I'm sorry."

Iris and Pearl hugged. Pearl then said, "I'm going to go tell Mystic Maya the news!" and rushed out.

Iris giggled. "Well, that was easier than I expected... shall we go?"

Yet again, hand-in-hand, they walked out of the courthouse, to go explore the world during their spare time...

Because, for now, they had an eternity to spend together, to share their love for one another.



-END OF CHAPTER-


And that's it for Case 1! Next chapter is an Inbetween Cases chapter. There will be on of those between every case, usually depicting what they do on their off-time. Reviews are welcome! Thank you for reading! ^.^

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Last edited by Xero Wright on Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:31 am, edited 1 time in total.

Excellent work! I look forward to the next update.

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I decided to go ahead and post Chapter 4 since it's shorter than Chapter 1, and serves as a placeholder for all PxI fans. Here you go! Sorry it's so short. The next Inbetween Cases chapter will be longer.



Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Last Cases

Inbetween Cases

Chapter 4: A Walk In The Park


- May 13, 4:00 PM
Wright & Co Law Offices -

Pearl ran in and shut the door. "Mystic Maya! Mystic Maaaayaaaa~!" She looked around, but couldn't find her. "...Why was the door unlocked?" She decided to sit down and wait for Maya. It wasn't long before Maya bounded in the door and shut it. "Mystic Maya! Did you leave the door unlocked!?"

"...Ah, that was my fault, Pearly," said Maya. "Sorry. How long were you waiting?"

"Not long... Mystic Maya, is it true that... between Mr. Nick and Ms. Iris..." She looked down.

Maya walked over and knelt down beside Pearl. "Pearly... they were together in the past. They were meant to be together, even now."

Pearl sprang up. "But I thought he loved you!"

"Pearly!" Maya shook her head. "You're just stuck on the Kurain Tradition. Nick and I have a working relationship; nothing more. I think Iris is better suited for him either way; I'm too young for him."

"Does that mean... you liked him?"

"... Perhaps. But I found out that I liked just being friends with him better. Another time, another place, it could have all worked out. But Iris... poor Iris, she felt that she had betrayed Nick, and Nick wanted to forgive her and start over again, the way it should be."

"M-Mystic Maya... I understand now." Pearl sighed. Then she perked up. "Now I get to tease both of them!"

"Hee hee," giggled Maya. "Want to tease 'em together?"

Pearl jumped up. "Yes!"


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Phoenix brought Iris to Gourd Lake. At its entrance stood two mid-height brick walls, one engraved with a sign which read, in big bold letters, 'Gourd Lake.' "What is this place, Feenie?" Iris asked.

"It's Gourd Lake. I remember coming here during a trial for an old friend, Miles Edgeworth."

"Oh, that's right, Mr. Edgeworth. I remember him now."

Phoenix led her through the entrance and into the park area. It was still springtime; the grass was viridian and the lake stood still, since there was no wind. He took her and they sat down at a picnic table. Iris looked around her, and sighed, "It's... it's beautiful, Feenie."

"I know. I've never been able to actually appreciate the view that Gourd Lake actually gives... it's quite soothing."

"What was the case about?" asked Iris, suddenly curious.

"Oh, it's a long story... an evil prosecutor by the name of Manfred von Karma attempted to get Edgeworth arrested for the murder of Robert Hammond... but it was an older man named Yanni Yogi that had taken Hammond's life... and Edgeworth feared he had killed his own father fifteen years ago, when Manfred had done it himself."

"I see... poor Mr. Edgeworth..." said Iris.

Phoenix put his arm on her shoulder, and said: "Don't worry about it. I got him out of that mess, since I owed him for many things in the past. We're all good and happy now, let's stay that way... okay?"

"...Okay, Feenie." She smiled again, and rested her head on his shoulder.

"I've still got many places I want to take you, Iris... but of course we can't do it all right now. I think after this we need to do something else."

"Well, I think we've deserved a rest, so we need to find something fun to do... maybe go dancing or something?"

"Sure. That'd be fun."

Unbeknownst to them, Maya and Pearl were sneaking up on them, ready to hatch their plan to embarass them for the fun of it. Maya whispered, "Okay, Pearly. Be quiet, they can't hear us yet. Do you know what to do?"

Pearl nodded. "Uh-huh! You ready?" Maya nodded.

Iris looked at the lake. "It's so peaceful..."

Pearl ran up, tapped Iris on the back, and hid to the side where she couldn't be seen. Iris turned around, then turned to Phoenix. "Feenie... did you poke me?" Phoenix shook his head. Pearl snickered, then snuck up and did it again.

This time Iris didn't say anything, but she was ready, for the moment that little pointer finger again touched her back, she whirled her head around and saw Pearl. "Ah!" Pearl said, covering her mouth.

Iris looked at Pearl, half-smiling. "Now, Pearl, it's not nice to do that..." Pearl smiled innocently, hiding her face except her eyes in her hands, as she saw Maya beginning her part of the joke.

Maya snuck up behind Phoenix, and held up an airhorn, and let it blare out its loud sound. Phoenix jumped in the air so high, he nearly could grab the high branch on a tree. He fell over and landed in the grass.

They then began singing, "Nick and Iris, sitting in a tree~ K-I-S-S-I-N-G~"

Iris helped Phoenix up, and laughed. "Oh, you two. You just want to tease us, don't you?"

Pearl nodded, wearing her innocent smile. "You aren't... mad at us, are you?"

Iris shook her head. "Of course not. Just... don't do it too often, okay?" She winked at Pearl.
"Of course!" Pearl replied.
Phoenix smirked. "Well, we'll get you two back someday."
Pearl giggled. "No you won't."

Iris and Phoenix looked at each other, and both smirked. "Well, we need to get back to the office and clean up for the night. You two be careful, and call us if you need us."

Maya and Pearl nodded, but Maya called after them: "Don't do anything in bed, now~!" Phoenix and Iris made a break for it right after that.


- May 13, 7:30 PM
Wright & Co Law Offices -

"Well, that was an eventful day, wasn't it Feenie?" said Iris. They were sitting together, her head on his shoulder again. "Where are you taking me next time?"

"It's a secret," he whispered, making her blush and giggle. "Either way, we gotta go for now. A new day awaits tomorrow, and if there's no new cases, we can go somewhere else."

Iris followed Phoenix out to his apartment, and they slept together for the first time. Pearl and Maya, on the other hand, met up at the Law Office, where they normally sleep.

"That was fun!" said Pearl, happily.
"You sure had fun, didn't you Pearly?" said Maya.

"Yes! Teasing them is fun. I just hope they can stay happy together," Pearl said while wearing her cute face.

"I'm sure they will, Pearly. The more important thing is that we make sure we look out for each other. Things have happened in the past, and I don't want them to happen again."

"Well, good night, Mystic Maya." "Good night, Pearly."

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The next morning, Phoenix woke up before Iris, and went out to look outside.

Unfortunately, the sight wasn't exactly something he wanted to see...

-END OF CHAPTER-

A/N: I'm sorry this was a shorter chapter than most. I ran out of ideas for what they should do, and plus they had just gotten out of a court case. I promise that the next Inbetween Cases part has more PxI in it. (Although the cases themselves will have a bit either way.)

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Last edited by Xero Wright on Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:33 am, edited 1 time in total.

I love romantic fluff! Nice job!

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I'm posting Ch. 5, then going to bed.

- As a side note, this is my least favorite chapter out of the six I have currently written. But that doesn't mean it's bad. Any opinions would be greatly welcome. I won't be doing a Case like this again.





Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Final Cases

Case 2: Turnabout Jeopardy

Chapter 5: The Condemning Factor


.... Gah! I can't believe it..

... ... I've been found out. This can't be happening...

... ... ... ... ... ... ...

I know! I'll condemn... him for everything!

I'll leave this note here... and... the body here!

Hee hee hee hee...


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The sight Phoenix saw when he looked out his window wasn't something he expected to see...

A bloody body was lying on the ground, four stories below where he was standing. A pool of blood... and what looked like a letter. He dashed out of the apartment and went down. He picked up the letter, and read it...

'Got you. Have fun rotting in jail.'

"What!?" said Phoenix as he read the letter. He turned around and saw police cars rounding up on him. He stood still as Gumshoe stepped out of the car.

"Hey! What are you doing here, pal!?"

"... I didn't do it, Gumshoe." was Phoenix's only reply.

"Well, I think it's best we test the fingerprints on that murder weapon first!" He pointed to the knife stuck in the body. Phoenix sighed a sigh of relief; thankfully, he couldn't be condemned for that, for he had never touched the weapon. Gumshoe continued, "Come with me, pal!"

"But... what about Iris!?" said Phoenix, alarmed.

"Don't worry, pal. We'll be back within the next hour or two."

Unfortunately, Iris had already awoken and saw the commotion. "Oh no.. Feenie! I've got to go help him!" She raced out of the apartment and went down to where the police cars were. "Wait, Detective Gumshoe!"

"Oh... oh! Sister Iris!" Gumshoe whirled around, noticing her. "What are you doing here?"

"Where are you taking Feenie!?"

"We've got to take him to the station for now. We're going to examine fingerprints on this knife and see who killed the victim."

"Who is the victim?"

"The victim? That would be the defendant of the last case he was in... Pete Jay."

"No! He wouldn't do that!"

"...Here, I'll allow you to come with us this one time. We're going to get to the bottom of this!"

Gumshoe led Iris to sit beside Phoenix. The moment she got in, she threw herself in his arms and hid her head in his shoulder. "You didn't do it... you didn't do it..." was all she could say.

"No... I didn't," said Phoenix, as they drove away to the precinct.

... 1 Hour later...

Phoenix was sitting in a chair in front of Detective Gumshoe. "Pal, what happened back there?"

"I woke up and looked down out of my window, and there was a body lying there. With a note beside it. I ran down to see what happened... and found this." He handed the note to Detective Gumshoe, who read it.

"Got you. Have fun rotting in jail. What is this!?"

Eventually a policeman came back with the results; Phoenix's fingerprints were on the knife. "...What? That can't be right! I was asleep when the murder happened!" was his response.

"Pal, I really want to believe you, especially with this note, but there's nothing I can do. They're going to condemn you, thinking you were Jay's killer."

Iris ran in. "No, you can't do that! I can testify to him being with me! We were sleeping the entire night!"

"... Look, pal. They kind of look down on lovers protecting one another in court. You're going to have to somehow find evidence that links someone else to this murder."

"Meaning...?"

"If you can prove that you were asleep, we can promise you we'll find someone else..."

"He does!" said Iris. "ME!" This was the first time she actually seemed as distressed, and yet defiant, as she was.

"I'm sorry, Iris. I can't let that be proof enough." But by the time Gumshoe had finished, Phoenix walked off. "Where are you going, pal!?"

"Give me one hour." was all he could say. And he was gone.

"Damn it, pal! I'm going to get in trouble for this!" roared Gumshoe, but Iris consoled him.

"Let him go... I trust him."

...Another hour later...

Phoenix came in with a photograph and a testimony. "Here you go."

Gumshoe took a look; The photograph showed the body beside a broken window, a clear sign that that's where the victim dropped out from. He then looked at the testimony; a Bellboy had records of when anyone exited the complex, and neither Phoenix Wright nor Iris had left the building... but a man named Jordan Uthep did.

"Pal, this is going to be the most interesting case in the world," said Gumshoe. "you proved you weren't connected to the case, but people are still going to condemn you for having fingerprints--"

"There's one more thing," said Phoenix. He handed another knife to him. "Get a fingerprint check on those. That should bring us to the killer... I found it in the room with the broken window."

"Get a check on this! NOW!" said Gumshoe as he handed the knife to another officer. The officer walked off.

... One more hour later ...

"We've got it, sir!" said the officer. "This knife has the victim's blood on it as well, and it has a man's fingerprints! His name is... Jordan Uthep!"

"Jordan Uthep!? We just got wind that he left the apartment complex earlier!" said Gumshoe. "Well, pal, you're definitely off the hook. I'll try my best and keep the knife with your prints on it with me, since it's fake evidence... but if Ms. von Karma finds it, we're in deep trouble."

"Got it. Thanks, Gumshoe," said Phoenix.

"And, do me a favor - don't take this case."

"... Okay," said Phoenix.

He led Iris back to his apartment, and she immediately broke down. "I-Iris..."

"How could someone do this to you? You didn't do anything!"

Phoenix consoled her. "Don't worry. I think I know what I can do make this case easier... You stay here, okay?"

"Feenie! Don't go..."

"I'm sorry. I'll be back soon, I promise." He left her a kiss on the cheek and went out of the apartment.

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"And you want me to believe you? Mr. Phoenix Wright, this is a surprise!"

"I'm sorry to have to actually come to you with this - but you have to believe me, I didn't do anything. I even proved it with the real murder weapon."

Franziska von Karma looked down at the sitting Phoenix Wright. She had a complex look on her face; a clear sign that she was thinking hard. "Hm. I believe you, Mr. Phoenix Wright. But you must help me look for the real killer. If Scruffy currently has the fake murder weapon, that should keep you off the hook for now. Stay that way."

Phoenix then nodded. "Yes. I will do so."

Franziska finally came up with a solution. "I will help you this time. I'm going to give you permission to thoroughly search the crime scene and look for clues. This is not a case a defense lawyer can win... Scruffy was telling you the truth. Let me handle this for once."

Phoenix nodded and went off, thinking. 'So for once I'm helping a prosecutor... interesting.' He met up with Iris in his apartment.

She got up, looking surprised. "What happened...?"

"I talked with Prosecutor von Karma and--"

"Prosecutor von Karma?! Are you trying to get yourself arrested!?"

"No, no, I asked for her help." With that, Iris looked thoughtful. "Oh...?"

"She agreed to help me find the real killer..." he then grinned and added, "After all... if I get condemned, she'll never be able to beat me in court." Iris giggled.

"So then, who's the defense attorney?"

"I dunno. I won't be able to see the court case. Franziska said that while the real killer isn't known, a court date hasn't been set... she also told me that while she's in court, we can do anything we want... but we have to meet her before and after the court session... and I have to give Franziska a testimony so I don't have to go in, which is what I did a minute ago."

"What's next then?"

Phoenix made a straight face. "We have to investigate the crime scene; Apartment 103." Iris nodded, and followed him there.

- May 14, 11:35 AM
Apartment Complex
Apartment 103 -

The door creaked open, softly, slowly, as Phoenix and Iris stepped into the room. The room was very dusty; it looked as if it had not been used in a long time. Phoenix discarded the key he got into his pocket; he needed to give it back to the administrator once he was finished using it.

"What is this...?" said Iris as she looked around. "Everything's so dusty... it's like it's been unused for a long time."

"Well, according to the front office, the spare key is missing... so that might explain things," said Phoenix, looking over the furniture set up. He ran his finger across one of the tables. "I don't see anything of use here though..." but before he could continue, Iris shrieked. Phoenix whirled around and looked at her, then at where she was looking - A message was scrawled on a cupboard. 'Welcome back... and goodbye.'

"This has got to be a clue to what's going on!"

"Gotta get Gumshoe on the line..." Phoenix got out his phone and dialed up the Precinct.

"Hey, pal! Did you find any clues?"

"Oh yeah we did! Get down here, and hurry!" And with that, Phoenix shut his phone. "He's on his way."

Iris stood close to Phoenix. "Feenie... I'm scared. What if the killer comes back?"

"To the scene of the crime? Not likely. Bet the killer knows he'll get caught if he comes around."

Iris still looked scared, and held onto Phoenix's arm. Eventually Gumshoe arrived and kicked open the door. "Gumshoe here!"

Phoenix sweatdropped. "Couldn't make your entrance any less known, could you?"

"When a clue like this is here? No way!" Gumshoe brought out a piece of paper and pressed it against the message. As he pulled it back, the dust around the message disappeared, making the message unreadable.

"What was that?" asked Iris.

"Simple. Flypaper. It can take fingerprints off of any surface... though it's normal use is for catching flies. But we've found a good use for it with fingerprints, so we've been using them. We'll take this to the station and have it analyzed... and we'll call you when it's done!" said Gumshoe, and he left.

"Well... should we go back?" said Iris.

"I think so, yeah." said Phoenix. He took Iris' hand and led her back to the apartment.

- May 14, 12:10 PM
Apartment Complex
Phoenix and Iris' Apartment -

They both sat down and drank some tea. "I can't believe it, Feenie... you were almost condemned for another murder you didn't do..."

"I know," was his response.

"...and Prosecutor von Karma agreeing to help you..."

"I'm surprised too. Despite the fact that she wants to beat me in court, I'd figure she'd still condemn me given the chance."

Iris sighed. "Is it like this for you all the time, Feenie?"

Phoenix nodded his head. "It's tough living life as a defense attorney... but I take it as I go along. I have friends to help me through, and rivals to keep me sharp..."

Iris smiled. "I... I definitely want to stay with you. Besides..." her look turned to worry... "I fear something may happen to you, and if given the chance, I want to protect you just as you would protect me..."

Phoenix nodded. "I understand."

Suddenly, the doorbell rang. Phoenix walked to the door, and opened it up.

Standing right in front of him was a black-grey-haired man with a red overcoat and usual sullen face. "Edgeworth."

"Wright. I need to talk to you," came Edgeworth's voice. He then stepped outside, and Phoenix followed and shut the door. "This is very important... concerning that investigation you're doing."

"What is it?"

"Franziska says that you need to find the killer quickly. The Police Department and Prosecutor's Office are getting impatient, since we've cut off all contact for the moment, and they have no idea you're involved. And we intend to keep it that way."

"Well, there's no real clues in the apartment, and there were no fingerprints on the cupboards that suggested any items were hidden... it's almost as if..."

"...the room was just used for the message and killing." Edgeworth finished. "I'm willing to bet the killer has the real murder weapon, and still is not able to hide it.

"... Iris is still freaked out that I might actually be connected to this murder..."

"Wright, keep yourself together. Someone probably hated Pete Jay and decided that since he got off the hook, he should be taken off it entirely... hence the murder." Edgeworth looked very stern. "Don't let yourself get down. You have to stay up and happy. For Iris, for Maya, Pearl, and everyone else. You may not be able to participate in this case, but at least you will be able to make sure that someone who deserved it gets locked away."

"Yeah... thanks, Edgeworth," Phoenix said. "But what are you going to do?"

"Me? I'm going to track down the places Pete Jay was before he arrived back at his apartment. Apparently he had been gone on a long trip, and came back right before the supermarket break-in. This person probably didn't want him to come back... for some reason."

"Mm."

"Wright. You know something you can do. She can contact Pete, and ask who killed him. It may not bring us the decisive evidence we need, but it'll give us more clues to who this person actually is."

"You mean...?"

"Yes. I wouldn't worry about it at the moment, but before the day's done you need to speak to her. I need to go. ... Goodbye, Wright." Edgeworth walked off. Phoenix walked inside and sat back down.

"What did Mr. Edgeworth need, Feenie?" asked Iris.

"Oh, he just gave me some hints about how to track down the murderer... but for the moment I want to just sit here," came Phoenix's reply.

Iris stood up. "I want to go look for clues again in that apartment. If you want to stay here... you can... but I'm not going to let them condemn you."

She looked mostly serious, and Phoenix nodded. "Be careful then..."

Iris nodded in reply, and walked off, shutting the door. Phoenix sighed. "Iris.. things will be okay... I promise."

It wasn't too long before the phone rang. "Phoenix Wright here..."

"Feenie! I found something! Hurry down here!"

"Iris!? I'm on the way!" he bounded out the door and entered Apartment 103...

- May 14, 12:40 PM
Apartment Complex
Apartment 103 -

He walked in and saw Iris holding a device. "Let me see that," said Phoenix. Iris handed it over, and Phoenix examined it. He saw an infared scanner, and as the infared piece passed Iris' body, it went off. He moved it away; it stopped. He tried it again; it went off again. "A motion detector...?"

"Most possibly planted by the suspect!" said Iris. "We've got to get this to Gumshoe before the trial tomorrow..."

RING. RING. Phoenix's phone rang. "Phoenix Wright here."

"Hey, pal! We got the results in!"

"Oh? What happened?"

"You're not gonna like this... it happens to be Pete himself!"

"What...!? N-No way!" Phoenix felt as if he was whacked over the head with The Thinker. "How can that be!?"

"I don't know... Jordan's fingerprints are on the murder weapon, but Pete wrote his own death message... and the letter you showed me happens to be Jordan's handwriting."

Phoenix felt a migraine coming on; the only way he thought this could happen was if Jordan forced the victim to write the message before or after his death... 'Wait... that's it!' he thought.

"Gumshoe, I think I figured it out..." but before he could continue, the door was slammed shut by a young man.

"Well well! It looks like you found me out after all...!"

"You must be... Jordan Uthep," said Phoenix, eyeing him carefully. Jordan was wearing a shirt that read 'Manipulator,' blue jeans, and his hair was messed up.

"You've been looking for me, haven't you? I eavesdropped on you talking to that worthless blue-haired prosecutor, and decided to take you out myself... and your little girlfriend too."

Iris shrieked and hid behind Phoenix. Jordan continued. "Heh heh... I knocked that fool, Pete, unconscious, I made him scrawl his own death note, I even forced him to stab himself through the heart! I manipulated everything to make it look like you did it... I even stole a knife from your apartment!"

Phoenix looked shocked. "How did you...!?"

Jordan held up something that Phoenix recognized all too well - The Lockpick! "Oh ho ho ho... this turned out to be a very useful device. I broke into your apartment, stole a dirty knife, and used it on him after forcing him to kill himself! I am the master of manipulation, and now, I'm going to clean you both and make my escape!"

"NOT SO FAST, PAL!!

As Jordan advanced on Phoenix and Iris, Gumshoe busted the door down. Jordan jumped and turned around. "Grr! The fuzz!"

Gumshoe and two other Police Officers detained Jordan. "We heard everything, pal, and you're coming with us!"

Jordan strained himself trying to escape, but eventually desisted. "Grr... I hated that man, Pete Jay... he got my best friend put in jail! And you helped him do it! So I got my revenge on him... but failed on my revenge against you!" He cursed and screamed as he was dragged out of the room.

Phoenix sighed. Iris did as well; they were finally safe. Iris stepped out from behind Phoenix. "Mm... that court case is tomorrow morning at 10 AM, isn't it?"

"Bet so, now that we've found the killer."

"But still, don't you think this wasn't really a case? I mean, the killer tried to frame you and then came after you..."

"It was still an investigation. You know, like on all those TV Shows. We solved the problem before it got us killed. Either way, it's getting later in the afternoon... how about we get some early shut-eye in a bit?"

Iris nodded, and they returned to their apartment. After watching a few hours of TV together, they went to sleep.

The next day...

- May 15, 9:35 AM
Prosecutor's Lobby 3 -

"So you came... Mr. Phoenix Wright." Franziska stepped up to Phoenix, wearing a straight face. "I see you're still alive... something I am rather glad to hear."

"We found the killer, as you already know," said Phoenix. "And, so you know... Gumshoe saved us."

"Yes, I heard Scruffy's tale. And I do believe, after all this time, he should get a raise. ... just a little bit of one," she added with the slightest trace of a smirk. "You already gave me your testimony however, so I do not need you for the post-hearing. Be prepared though! Next time we meet, it will be in court, and I will stomp you!" She pointed her finger at his chest as she said these last lines. "I WILL be victorious!!"

Phoenix shook his head and exited, meeting Iris outside. "Well, now that that's over... want to go dancing?" he asked.

Iris' eyes lit up and her face flushed red. "O-Okay..." And they walked off, heading for the nearest dance party.

-END OF CHAPTER-

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Last edited by Xero Wright on Thu Nov 01, 2007 3:42 am, edited 1 time in total.

I haven't had a chance to read through the whole thing yet, but I did notice a few times that you have dialogue from more than on person in a single paragraph. You should always start a new paragraph when a new person is speaking. Like this:



Should look like this:

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However, it's up to you how you arrange the text afterwards. While Croik re-adjusted your paragraph as



You could arrange it another way as long as the speaker got a new paragraph.



You don't have to leave a full line either, many people decide that a new line is enough instead of a paragraph. Like this:

It's all up to your preferences, as long as you make sure you don't leave different peoples speech on the same line. :3

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Ah. Thanks for the tips. I don't really have time to go through all five chapters and do that... but I'll go through 6 and 7 and try to fix them.

EDIT: Actually, I'll have to fix up Chapters 4 and 5 too, since I haven't uploaded them to FF.Net yet. (You guys got Ch. 4 and 5 early :P)

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Here's Chapter 6! (There goes my buffer. Now I'm just going to update chapters as I finish them.)

Note that this chapter has a LOT of PxI fluff in it, but it also contains some very important bits and pieces of information in it.

Enjoy! :D


Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Final Cases

Inbetween Cases

Chapter 6: A Premonition, And A Vacation


Phoenix and Iris walked out of the dance party, laughing. They had had a good time, and had actually been able to spend time with each other. EVen if it wasn't truly alone time, it was still fun. And even then, it was only about 1 or 2 PM... they still had time to do some other things. Phoenix decided to take her to Kurain Village - they needed to visit Maya, who had gone there the previous day to see about her being the new Master of the Kurain Channeling Technique. Despite the case which involved her, she was ready to take the position and lead in her mother's place.


- May 15, 3:30 PM
Kurain Village -

It didn't take long for Maya to notice their presence; she ran out of the Manor and greeted them. "Nick! Iris! You came to visit me!"

Pearl came out as well. "Yay, they're here!" Maya then took Iris on a tour of the Fey Manor, while Phoenix sat down and watched the sun begin to go down. Pearl walked over beside him. "Is something wrong, Mr. Nick?"

"Huh? Oh, no, Pearls. Don't worry about me." Phoenix responded, patting the little girl on the head.

"But Mr. Nick... you've been acting really weird lately. Ever since the case with Mystic Maya and Iris..."

Phoenix sighed. "It's something that I'd rather think about later. Don't worry, Pearls, everything will be fine."

"If you say so, Mr. Nick..." she bowed her head and entered the Manor.

Maya walked out with Pearl. Maya then spoke, "Hey, Nick, Pearly says she wants to show Iris around Kurain Village. She also wants you to come with her."

"That's a good idea," said Phoenix, and he stood up, dusting himself off a bit. He saw Iris walking out, still looking around as if she was getting a good feel for how the Manor looked.

"Alright, let's go!" said Pearl, her eyes peeking from between her fingers.

She led them out of the manor and walked down the stone street of Kurain Village. The village was not as big as a city, but it had quite a lot of buildings and some shrines. Iris looked around in awe, saying "Some of these artifacts look similar to ones at Hazakura Temple!"

Pearl giggled. "There are some duplicates, since some are legendary Mystics like Mystic Ami that all spirit mediums want to worship during times of need." She sounded like a genuine tour guide; she knew all about Kurain Village, since it's all she ever saw during her earlier childhood years.

Iris held Phoenix's hand as they went by houses. Spirit mediums, young and old, turned to wave at the couple. Pearl couldn't help but hide her face in her hands and peek out between her fingers when she turned around and saw them.

'Aw, Pearl thinks we're a cute couple... hee hee.' thought Iris.

Pearl eventually came to a garden. Half-fenced in and full of bright green grass, the only other thing was a large statue of Ami Fey. "This is the Kurain Garden.. the children usually come and play here when they're not helping their families," said Pearl. "I come here and play with them sometimes," she added, giving off her adorable child-like smile.

Iris and Phoenix walked into the garden; the children were nowhere to be seen at the moment. Pearl gave them a cutesy look. "You two look so cute together, Mr. Nick!"

Iris blushed. Phoenix couldn't help but go a bit pink himself. "Well, thank you, Pearl," said Iris.

"Oh, oh! I know! You two should hold hands in front of Mystic Ami and wish for a happy life together!" Pearl seemed to be pushing things a bit, but Iris and Phoenix decided to do it anyway.

Both of them stood in front of the statue, then faced each other. Phoenix softly took both of Iris' hands into his own, and they stood close. They closed their eyes and thought about how life would be in the future with them together. Neither noticed that they both were turning quite red thinking about how much time they could spend together and possibly devote their lives to one another. They finally opened their eyes and looked into each other's; a look that signified they knew what the other wished for. They then shared a soft kiss, a soft breeze flowing around them, as if Mystic Ami Fey were watching over them.

Pearl jumped into the air happily, saying, "Yay! That was so beautiful!"

Iris and Phoenix turned to Pearl. "We need to go back though, Mystic Maya's probably worried that we've been gone too long... we need to eat and then maybe sit together and talk about things!" said Pearl, and she led them back to the Manor.

As they entered, Maya greeted them. They ate, shared conversation, and played a few card games (having to teach Pearl how to do so as well)... until it was time to go to bed.

Iris and Phoenix decided to stay at the Fey Manor until the morning, upon which they would return to L.A. and perhaps go on a date. They eventually drifted off to sleep...


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Phoenix walked along the path of the Fey Manor. "I feel strange... what's going on?" He then heard a scream. He ran through the door to the Channeling Chamber, and saw Iris... and... another Iris?

No... that other Iris had to be...

Dahlia!

Dahlia held a gun at Iris' chest, apparently not caring that Phoenix was there. "You did very well to get out of the mess you're in, dear sister... but I'm going to kill you, and then I'm going to kill dear Mr. Wright over there." Phoenix flinched - he had not realized she knew he was standing right there.

He stepped closer. "Don't hurt her!" But this only caused a smirk to play across Dahlia's face.

"Oh, you'd love that, wouldn't you? To have her forever... now that you've learned the truth... But I can't have that. I despised you, and you got me convicted... And now she's told you everything. I can't let either of you live. But first..."

Phoenix ran at Dahlia. "No! Stop!" But before he could reach her, Dahlia pulled the trigger --

Iris turned to Phoenix, screaming, "Feenie!!" before the bullet screamed out of its revolver... and struck Iris. Iris then fell to the floor.

Phoenix skidded next to her, not caring that Dahlia could have him at point-blank range, and picked Iris up. "Iris... Iris!"

"Fee....nie..." she looked up at him with her eyes full of tears. "I was scared... I was... scared... that this would happen... my sister, Dahlia... she was vengeful... I knew that after that case, she'd come to get revenge.... ... But I guess... I couldn't stop her..." Her hand brushed against Phoenix's cheek. She made one final blush. "Feenie... I... love you..." and she fell limp in his arms.

Dahlia let out a shrieking laughter. "Goodbye, dear sister! You were such a good help... until I died! And now you are too!"

Phoenix, however, was distressed, and shook Iris' body, refusing to believe what he saw to be true. "Iris.... Iris! IRIS!" he finally felt his tears well up.

"IIIIIIIIIRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIS!"

Dahlia laughed again. "Oh, dear Feenie, you were so naive, weren't you?" She looked at the distraught face of Phoenix Wright. "But, of course, it was obvious this would happen...you brought it on yourself, after all...now your time has come...goodbye." And, still wearing that sickly sweet, innocent smile that hid her deviousness, she pulled the trigger...


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Phoenix woke up right before the bullet hit him in his dream. He felt his face... and felt the sweat bullets racing down his cheeks. "I-Iris..." He looked over, and saw her, still sleeping peacefully. "... It was just a dream..." he said to himself. "... Is this what she feared might happen? ... Was this all a culmination of my fears?" He decided that he wouldn't tell her about the dream... yet. He didn't want to distress her now, not after what happened when they got cornered by Jordan.

But... at the same time, he felt he couldn't keep this from her. He also found that he couldn't go back to sleep, not when he knew that Dahlia would simply haunt his dreams again. 'Pull yourself together, Phoenix!' he thought to himself. 'This dream was all because of your fears, and Iris' too! ... I want to focus on being with her. My life has never been as happy as this... but still, I need to get this off my chest...'

It wasn't long before Iris woke up. "Feenie? What's wrong?"

Phoenix frowned; it was time to tell her. He sat down beside her, and explained everything. Iris' face turned from interest, to worry, to tears. She threw her arms around him. "Feenie... This was all probably part of your fears... after what I told you... I'm so sorry.."



"Iris, it's not your fault," said Phoenix. "I know it was probably just a bad dream... we all have them. I don't want to worry you. I'm fine. Really." Iris looked at him tearfully.

"Okay... just... be careful. I fear somehow Dahlia can be summoned... I mean... Pearl of all people was instructed to summon her... and someone else could do the same if given the right motive..."

"Don't worry, Iris. I'm not going to let Maya get in danger. I told Godot I would not let that happen." Iris rested her head on his shoulder. He held her close to him, and they cuddled together for a time, thinking about the past.

Eventually, Phoenix got up, and gently helped Iris up. "Let's not worry about the dream for right now, okay, Iris?"

"... Okay, Feenie..." she wore a smile again, and it was genuine; she knew that when she was near him and saw a smile on his face, she couldn't help but smile back, showing her innocence. Iris couldn't help but smile back at the man she had loved for six years, who had come to be very respectable over the years.

Phoenix thought of what Godot or Mia would say if he asked them about the dream. But almost instantly he knew already... they would tell him not to worry about it. There was no way Dahlia could return. The plan was foiled, no others like Dahlia that were vengeful are still around... He finally strengthened his smile, wiping all doubt from his mind.

Eventually, the time came that they needed to leave Kurain. "What are you going to do, Maya?" asked Phoenix.

"I have to stay here, unfortunately... and I guess Pearly's going to stay with me," responded Maya. "I still have to get some things straight, and then I'll figure up whether I can come visit you again for a while. ... Course, this means I can't help you solve cases anymore..."

"That's my job, then," said Iris, smiling. "I stood by him in the last court case, the last investigation, and I'll stay by him for the rest of them, too."

Maya nodded. "I know you can do it, Iris." She then turned to Phoenix. "Nick... make sure you take care of her."

"That's a no-brainer, isn't it?" said Phoenix.

"Hey... why don't you two take a day's vacation?" asked Maya. "You two really need it, after what happened... I know! You should go to Verity Forest. It's really nice, has a few walkways, and a really beautiful view."

"Yeah, that's an idea," said Phoenix, suddenly smiling. He knew where that was, and it was the perfect place to go. He then turned to Iris. "Shall we go?"

"Of course!" said Iris, excited.


- May 16, 9:48 AM
Verity Forest -


Phoenix led Iris past the iron gates that led into the forest. The rising sun parted ways with the trees in its path; it bathed the forest in a bright red light. A gentle breeze again came, giving the couple cool air as they began their walk through the leaf-filled forest.

"It's beautiful..." said Iris, her eyes glittering as she looked through the forest. Phoenix took her hand softly, and they continued walking. They passed by bushes full of berries, trees with acorns, and many wildlife animals passed them.

Eventually they came across a building which read 'Loan Fish Corporation - Main Building.' "Feenie, what is this?"

Phoenix tilted his head. "I've never heard of this place before... seems to be new. But let's continue on our walk, shall we?"

"Of course..." Iris said softly.

They walked through the pathways, and eventually came across a lake. "This must be Verity Lake..." They sat down on a log, looking out.

"Feenie... do you remember our first date, six years ago?" said Iris, resting her head on his shoulder. Phoenix thought for a moment... and it came to him.

They had had their first date here, six years ago.


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A young Phoenix and young Iris were sitting on the log... at the time Iris was thought to be Dahlia.

"Oh, Feenie, it's beautiful..." said Iris.

"I know! It's so great, isn't it!?" said Phoenix. His younger self was more outspoken and more blatant and childlike than his present self. "I used to come here a lot in years past, but it's a memorable spot, don't you think?"

Iris looked out onto the lake. Sitting beside him, she couldn't help but feel tranquil. 'Why do I feel this way...? Do I really like him? I was doing this for sis... but...' She looked over at him. '... He's so outspoken... and I feel really... I feel good being here.'

"Dollie... do you think it really was fate that we met?" Phoenix found himself asking.

Iris thought for a moment... she was supposed to say what her sister said... but... maybe, she really felt it... "... I think it was... but only time can tell, Feenie."

"I do believe in true love, you know..." said Phoenix, thinking. "I've always believed in it... maybe this is it?"

"... Perhaps we'll find out in the future... Feenie."


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Iris smiled, remembering that day. She looked over at Phoenix, who was smiling as well.

"Yes... Iris... I remember coming here." He brushed her hair gently with his hand. "And you were beautiful then... not as beautiful as you are now, though." Iris felt her heart skip a beat and she flushed pink.

"F-Feenie!" She felt a bit embarassed that he called her beautiful.

"It's true. Despite the hyperactive trait I had in the past, I wasn't lying... and I'm not now. Now that I know it was you... I can feel better remembering... our past..."

Iris giggled, still blushing. "Feenie, you've really grown, you know that?" She kissed him gently. "Even more than I thought you did."

Phoenix put his arm around her and held her close. He then chuckled a bit... and decided to repeat what happened in the past. "...Do you think we'll be together... forever?"

Iris figured out what he was doing, and flushed. "... Yes... I do believe we will... Feenie." She huddled closer to him, feeling her face warm up even more from saying that.

They stayed that way for quite a while. Time passed, as they watched the lake. Phoenix couldn't help but think about the scenery around him. The green trees, the clear lake, the occasional boats that went by, reflecting the sunlight. It was the first time in a long time that he had felt genuinely happy, finally being with the woman that he loved.

Iris was feeling the same way; she felt at peace watching nature and thinking about her life. It was as if the soft breeze that was flowing through guided her hopes and dreams for the future, flowing through her mind.

Time passed... and they felt that it was time to leave... for now.

"Feenie... thank you," Iris said, and she gave Phoenix a kiss on the cheek. "I loved it..."

Phoenix gently brushed her hair with his fingers again. "Maybe someday we'll come back and watch the lake again."

"I'd like that." Iris smiled, and took his hand. "Shall we go back home?"

"Of course." They walked off, into the distance...

... ... ... ...

A month passes....


- June 16, 11:15 AM
Place: ??? -


"Wh-What are you doing here!?

"I told you... if you interfered one more time... we would take decisive action."

"You're doing illegal methods! You can't!"

"I beg to differ... we can do whatever we want, as long as the government never finds us."

"Then I'll tell them where you are!"

"I'm afraid... I cannot allow that."

"What are you...! NO!" The sound of a body hitting the floor was heard. Footsteps were heard, and silence... until footsteps were heard again.

Then a scream, followed by someone busting down the door and saying, "Freeze! Police!!"


-END OF CHAPTER-

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Last edited by Xero Wright on Thu Nov 01, 2007 5:24 pm, edited 3 times in total.

Cliff hanger and lots of fluff!!!!!!!! Nice work. The story is very cute.

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OMIGAWD! This is becoming quite the wonderful fanfic! ...You've left us hanging and I can't wait to see what's going to happen next! You are definitely one of the most skilled fanfic writers I've seen here on the forums.
Congratulations! Because of this fanfic, I've decided to move FeenRis from my "Favored Pairings" list to my "Absolute Favorite Pairings" list! Nice job!
I'm anxious for the next chapter, but take your time on it. There's nothing worse than a good story gone bad all because it was rushed... Luckily, I've never seen that happen. I'll be back!

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ALright, guys. I editted Chapter 1, with the help of Croik. Opinions are greatly welcome. They were suggestions, so all ideas on there were of my doing. I hope you enjoy the revamped Chapter 1. :3

EDIT: I also revamped Chapter 6 a bit, adding a huge chunk of stuff in the beginning. I hope you all enjoy it! :3

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OKAY! Aside from adding that huge chunk to Chapter 6's beginning and revamping Chapter 1, I've also gotten Chapter 7 done for you all!

I was going to run this all by a friend, but I looked over it myself a few times, and I think it's alright.

To all those who think there's a lack of evidence: Court. :P That is all.


Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Final Cases

Case 3: The Illegal Turnabout

Chapter 7: Ominous Intent


- June 16, 1:00 PM
Wright & Co Law Offices -

Phoenix opened the door and walked in, still holding the phone. "Repeat that again?"

"Look, pal, I'll say it one more time. An executive at the Loan Fish Corporation was killed."

"Loan Fish...?"

"One of the only legitimate loan companies. They've been around for some time, but they changed their main building to the place beside Verity Forest."

Verity Forest? Phoenix knew that place... it was where he had taken Iris a month ago. Phoenix walked further in, and Iris came in behind him, shutting the door.

"Look, pal. I'm going to come down there. The defendant wants to talk to you, but I think you need to know what happened first."

"Alright, sure, no problem." Phoenix heard the phone click, and he shut it off. Exasperated, he sighed.

"Are you okay, Feenie?" Iris asked, holding his hand with her own. "It's only been a month since our last case... which oddly enough, wasn't a full case."

"Yeah, I'm fine, Iris." He managed a smile, a half-grin. He wasn't fully awake still.

"You shouldn't be on the internet all night, anyway," said Iris worriedly. "Even watching episodes of your favorite childhood show can eat up a lot of your time if you're not careful."

But before they could continue their discussion, Gumshoe came bounding through the door. "Gumshoe here, pal!"

Phoenix jumped to his feet in surprise. "Gumshoe, next time KNOCK!"

Gumshoe looked embarassed. "Sorry. Listen, I came here with the details of the murder."

Phoenix stood up. "Alright, let's hear it."

Gumshoe took out the Autopsy Report. "It says here that Andrew Fish, an executive of the Loan Fish corporation, and son of the CEO, was found dead in his office. We found no murder weapon, but the guy's tie was tightly pulled around his neck, so we figured it was due to strangulation. The woman we found standing next to the body, the defendant, is named Leslie Porter. We found her fingerprints on the tie, so we arrested her."

"Another case like this, huh..." said Phoenix.

"Well, the evidence is very limited, so all we got were the fingerprints on the tie. So right now, Ms. Porter is the only relevant person who could have done it. We even have a witness that saw her go into the office, and a yell was heard. They heard nothing before or after that, and we came in shortly thereafter."

Phoenix thought for a moment. 'Why does EVERY case have to start this way? Sigh...' "Okay. So you said the defendant needs to talk to me?"

"Yeah. She's down at the Detention Center. Go ahead and visit her."

Iris stood up, and followed Phoenix out the door. Gumshoe came after them, and shut the door.


- June 16, 1:30 PM
Detention Center -


Phoenix and Iris entered the Detention Center, and found Leslie Porter's room. On the other side of the glass sat a woman. Her blonde-haired head was buried in her hands, and the back of her red business suit was visible. "Er.... Ms. Porter?"

Leslie's head shot up and glared for a moment... then turned into a straight face. "Oh... you're not that Detective..."

"No. My name is Phoenix Wright. I'm a defense attorney."

Leslie's eyes widened. "Oh! It's you! The famous Defense Attorney!" She then smiled. "I had told that detective to tell you to come by and see me!"

Phoenix nodded. "What do you need me for, Ms. Porter?"

"Oh, well... I was kind of hoping you would defend me in court... I didn't kill Mr. Fish!"

Iris stifled a giggle, thinking to herself: 'Mr. Fish... that sounds funny when you think about it...'

Phoenix spoke up, apparently stifling a chuckle at the name himself. "I see. Tell me what happened this morning during the murder."

Leslie put her hand to her forehead, then continued. "I was going to deliver a file to Mr. Fish, as ordered by one of the leaders of the company. This was around 11:00. I came into his office around 11:20, and I found Andrew dead! I dropped the file on his desk, shrieked, and I guess someone outside called the police... but he was dead before I came in!" She sounded alarmed.

Phoenix nodded his head. "Don't be alarmed, Ms. Porter. It's quite normal apparently to be suspected of murder if you're even near the body when the police came." 'Damn it, Gumshoe, I understand it was only her, but couldn't've you just interrogated her first!?' "Er... what's that?" He noticed part of the top of her shirt looked like a small rectangle was bulging out of it. "It looks like... a letter or something."

Leslie's eyes widened again. "You noticed it!? Even those Police Officers didn't! Though, I had hoped they wouldn't've..."

'Yeah, that's Gumshoe for you... unobservant as always.' "Well, can I take a look at it, please?"

Leslie reached into her shirt and pulled it out. "It's nice to have this secret pocket... though whenever I hide something in it, it gives all the men a reason to stare at me." She handed the letter to Phoenix.

Phoenix opened it up and read the letter:

'This is your final warning. Keep out of our business. What we do is none of yours. The next time you try to hack into our files again, we will take decisive measures.'

"Decisive measures...?" said Iris.

"They must've meant they'd kill him... well, there's no signature, but if he used his computer..." Phoenix said, then thought for a moment, but Leslie spoke up.

"Go to his office! I bet you can find some clues on it! He must've been keeping a watch on an illegal company, and was getting info off of something to send to the government!" She then bowed her head, and continued. "... Don't let his death go to waste... after this case is over, I... I want someone to finish what he started!"

Phoenix nodded. "Don't worry then, Ms. Porter. We'll go get some info on this... business." He stood up. "We've gotta go back, Iris."

"Go back where, Feenie?"

"To Verity Forest."


- June 16, 2:00 PM
Verity Forest
Loan Fish Corporation Entrance -


Phoenix and Iris walked up to the building. "Isn't this the building we saw a month ago when we came here?" asked Iris.

Phoenix nodded. "Yep... during our walk we came across this building... I guess now we have to go and see what's going on." And with that, they walked to the building. When they got to the door, however, Gumshoe was waiting for them. "Oh, Detective Gumshoe!"

"Hey, pal!" Gumshoe wore a straight face. "Did you find anything out from the suspect?"

"We sure did," said Phoenix. "Apparently this note here indicates that Mr. Fish was observing an illegal organization... and the details might be on his computer. Think you can get us in?"

"An illegal organization!?" roared Gumshoe. "Show me that letter." Phoenix handed him the letter. Gumshoe read over it, scrunching his face up after he finished. "Hm... interfering... decisive measures... sure sounds a lot like whoever wrote this is tied to the murder."

"So you'll let us in?" said Iris hopefully.

"Pal, I'll get you in, but you have to be careful. From what I hear, people around here don't like others looking into their computers. I can secure you about half an hour before they start getting suspicious." Gumshoe looked left, then right, then back at them. "Don't do anything stupid."

He then showed them inside.


- June 16, 2:15 PM
Loan Fish Corporation
Andrew Fish's Office -

Phoenix came in, and after Iris came in, he shut the door. "Okay. We have half an hour to figure things out... I guess Gumshoe has some sort of plan." He saw the large file on the desk. "Hm... I wonder what's in his file?"

Iris looked at it. "I don't think we should be peeking into others' business..."

"That's basically what we're doing with his computer."

"I guess you're right... but even we can't tie that to the murder... they'll probably submit it during court," Iris said, and then looked at the computer. "It seems to have been used since his death... it's got some stuff up on it."

Phoenix looked at the computer. It had a couple of windows up on the screen; One had his email, and one had the Internet on it... a strange image was on the Internet window.

"Let's check that image out..." said Iris. Phoenix looked at it. It looked like a huge factory, with conveyor belts and people running around... people running around...

"This is a video!" said Phoenix. He looked at what was going on the conveyor belts, but he couldn't figure it out. Eventually, he saw one of the people looking at whatever this was coming from. The person held up a gun, and shot at the screen. The video turned to static, and a timestamp displayed - May 29, 4:30 PM.

"A recorded video... we've got to save this," said Phoenix. He happened to have a spare disk in his shirt pocket, and he slipped it in and saved the video. "This could come in handy... if we ever figured out what it was coming from."

"Hey, what about that other window? His email?" asked Iris. Phoenix remembered telling her about computers and technology when they went out while he went to Ivy University.

'At least she wasn't in the dark like Pearls... poor Pearls, she still doesn't understand everything yet,', thought Phoenix. He then spoke up, "Hm... hey!" He pointed to a certain email. "It's a hidden address... and the subject...!"

The subject of the email read "Warning: Don't Mess With Us", and the email address was encrypted. "Let's open it... I have a bad feeling that this has to do with the case," said Iris.

Phoenix opened it and read it:

"Dear Mr. Fish,

This is a formal warning. We have seen you watching our cameras and hacking into our databases as of late, and we will not tolerate this. We know what you are intending, and we will not allow it to happen. Please realize that if you attempt to tell the government of our whereabouts, and if you do not stop interfering, we will have to kill you.

Good day.

- MoneyMoneyMoney Corporation, aka 3-M Corporation."

"MoneyMoneyMoney Corporation? Sounds like some pretty greedy people," said Iris.

"That corporation sounds like... it deals in money! That can only mean one thing... but it can't be!" said Phoenix. He was staring at the message rather intently, as if he was attempting to decipher something.

"What is it, Feenie?"

"That corporation... it's dealing in and giving out counterfeit money!"

"N-No way!" said Iris, now shocked. "So that's what Mr. Fish was doing, and that's what got him killed!"

"Unfortunately... that won't be enough," said Phoenix. "There's a witness who saw Ms. Porter coming in here, and nobody else before her... and there were no fingerprints on the tie..."

"That means the killer was wearing gloves... to hide his traces," said Iris. "But then, why would his tie have her fingerprints...?"

"I think we need to ask her that," said Phoenix. "It looks like our half hour is almost up. We need to get out of here."

"Hey, Feenie... how do you think Gumshoe is able to give us this half hour?" asked Iris.

"I dunno... but we ought to get out of here while we still have a chance," said Phoenix.

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"Hey, pals! Let's do the Technodance again!" said Gumshoe. He had everyone's attention, and was doing a techno dance. Phoenix and Iris walked out of the building, unseen by the mass, and upon seeing Gumshoe, they simply bust out into laughter. Gumshoe noticed them, and roared, "Hey, it's hard work!"

'... Simple but stupid dancing is hard work?' thought Phoenix.

Gumshoe then shouted, "Okay, show's over, hope you enjoyed it!" Unbeknownst to him, every single person that walked off was snickering or stifling fits of laughter.

"You sure do know how to please a crowd, Gumshoe," said Iris inbetween fits of laughter.

"Yeah, well, that's life!" said Gumshoe. "Either way, where are you two going?"

"To the Detention Center," said Phoenix. "We've got to straighten out what happened with the defendant. We're getting nowhere; even with what we've found, we're going to be hard-pressed to present a well thought-out defense."

"Well, just hope that something's thrown out there in court that you can use against them, pal," said Gumshoe. "That's what you always end up doing, right?"

Phoenix sweatdropped. "Don't remind me..."

Iris put her hand on his shoulder. "I know you can do it, Feenie. I'll be there beside you during the court case."

And with that, they walked along to the Detention Center.


- June 16, 3:00 PM
Detention Center -


"Oh, you're back!" said Leslie as she saw them come in and sit down.

"Ms. Porter, I need to ask you some questions," said Phoenix. He then brought out the victim's tie. "About this tie..."

"Oh! I help him put that on every morning," she said, looking rather pleased with herself. "He still hasn't learned how to tie his own yet... but I love doing that for him."

'So that explains her fingerprints... but I don't think they'll believe that to be a good enough reason not to incriminate her,' thought Phoenix. "Anything else you can tell us?"

Leslie thought for a moment, and shook her head, causing her hair to flow about left and right. Before she spoke she had to get her hair out of her face. "I'm sorry, Mr. Wright, I've got nothing... do you think it'll be possible to get me acquitted...?"

Phoenix gave his best smile; Mia told him that he should always smile in front of a client, no matter how bad things get. "I'll give it my best shot. I've been in these situations more than once, and I've gotten out of them. It may not be easy, but I definitely will do my best to get you acquitted."

Leslie's eyes lit up. "Oh, thank you both! I knew I could count on you!" Iris seemed to take the look Leslie was given wrong, as she tightened her grip on Phoenix's arm just a touch. Phoenix didn't notice.

"Well, we might as well head back, then," said Phoenix as he turned to Iris. "We can't go back to the building, so there's nothing left for us to do except try to build on what we have."

Iris nodded. Phoenix helped her up, and they walked slowly back to the apartment.


- June 16, 10:00 PM
Apartment Complex
Phoenix and Iris' Apartment -


Six hours passed since they got home; they had sat down and went over everything they had learned.

"Okay, so let's go over this one more time," said Phoenix. Iris nodded, and Phoenix continued, "Ms. Porter put on the victim's tie for him this morning, hence her fingerprints on it. The threat letter and threat email are two pieces of evidence that points to another organization in the shadows, away from the government. The video we found shows a warehouse, but doesn't allow us to see what's on the conveyor belts. Someone shot the camera that this came from, meaning it was probably externally recorded."

"That also gives reason that whoever shot it knew that it was being recorded," said Iris. "Do you think that warehouse and the 3-M Corporation are related?"

Phoenix nodded. "Very possible. It seems that Mr. Fish had his eye on this corporation for a long time now. And if our hunch is correct, someone from that organization came, wearing gloves, and strangled the victim. Unfortunately, we have no evidence to back up that claim, so we'll have to hold back and see what happens. Perhaps our witness knows about it and just might slip up..."

Iris yawned, and rested her head on Phoenix's shoulder. "Feenie, do you think it's possible to get her acquitted?"

"I'm not entirely sure... it depends on if we can link the two organizations together at tomorrow's trial," Phoenix responded. "Without that connection, it'll be hard to keep the Judge from seeing no reason to prolong the trial and hand down Ms. Porter's verdict."

"I guess we'll just have to get lucky..." said Iris. "Shall we go ahead and get some sleep?"

Phoenix smiled. "I think that's the best option. We'll just have to hope things turn out well at the trial tomorrow..."

And they went to bed, hoping that somehow, some way, they'd be able to blow a hole in the witness' testimony and be able to link the 3-M corporation to this case.


-END OF CHAPTER-

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Last edited by Xero Wright on Thu Nov 01, 2007 5:00 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Hmm...well....I'm not sure your changes to the P/I reunion in chapter 1 really improved it any. But I am glad you changed the other stuff ^^;;.

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Excellent addition. I'm really enjoying the story.

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W00T! Chalk another one up for Xero Wright! Another excellent chapter! :D (Man, I would've loved to see a Phoenix Wright 3½ with all this FeenRis stuff... Maybe someone could make a fan case in Case Maker? Hmmmmmm............ Wait! That would've been a good name for this fanfic: Phoenix Wright 3½: The Lost Cases! Starring Phoenix Wright and Iris... eventually Wright? [Oh I wish...])

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And here's Chapter 8!

A note, if I may: I'm not particularly fond of this chapter. I kind of ran myself into a wall a number of times, so you may find yourself lost during some of the cross-examinations. Feel free to PM me with questions pertaining to it if you wish.

And of course, this is only Court Day 1... there's another day. (that should be less confusing)



Phoenix Wright: Ace Attorney: The Final Cases

Case 3: The Illegal Turnabout

Chapter 8: Court Incrimination


- June 17, 9:48 AM
District Courthouse
Defendant Lobby 5 -


Phoenix got up as he saw the defendant come in - he had been sitting there for some time with Iris, still going over their only clues. "Ah, Ms. Porter."

Leslie Porter did not look happy. She looked scared, as if she was afraid the Courthouse would eat her alive. She sighed and said, "Why do I have to be here...?"

"I'm sorry, Ms. Porter, I guess that's what happens when someone convicts you for murder... or frames you, for that matter."

"Are you ready then, Mr. Wright?" Leslie certainly sounded more serious than she had at the Detention Center the previous night. "I'm counting on you to get me declared innocent... or at least get the trial prolonged one more day."

"I wouldn't worry about it," said Iris, also standing up. "I have confidence in my Feenie. He'll get you acquitted." Phoenix blushed upon hearing this.

The Bailiff came through the doors and ordered that Ms. Porter come through the doors to the Courtroom, as the trial was about to begin.

Phoenix sighed. "Well, here we go... yet another nigh-impossible court-case that we'll have to stretch every contradiction to even make it out unscathed."

Iris put her arm around him. "Feenie, don't feel that way. We'll make it out, somehow. We'll just have to see who this witness is and make sure to point out any contradictions." She smiled up at him. "I know you can do it."

Phoenix couldn't help but smile back at the sight of her beautiful face. Eventually, however, they had to walk into the Courtroom.

Another battle for acquittal was nigh...


- June 17, 10:00 AM
District Courthouse
Courtroom Number 3 -


The audience bickered for a moment before the Judge slammed his gavel on the table.

"Court is now in session for the trial of Ms. Leslie Porter."

"The defense is ready," said Phoenix.

"... Just get on with it already," said Franziska, readying her whip. "I don't have all day."

"R-Right then!" said the Judge. "Your opening statement, then, if you please, Ms. von Karma."

"Very well. On June 16, around 11:20 AM. The victim, Andrew Fish, was due to receive some files from his assistant, Leslie Porter. However, when Leslie entered the room, outsiders heard a shriek and one witness saw her clutching the victim's tie. There was nobody else in the building that went into his office at the time."

"Clutching the victim's tie..." mused the Judge. "So it was death by strangulation, then?"

"Glad you got the gist of it that quickly, Your Honor," said Franziska. "Now, I would like to get things started. Detective, get up here!"


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Detective Gumshoe walked up to the stand, looking quite exhausted.

"I'm not in the mood for games, like you played during that supermarket murder. Explain how the victim died. NOW!" said Franziska, readying her whip.

"Y-Yessir!" said Gumshoe. He then pulled up a large map. "I'd like everyone to take a look at the floor map of the building."

The map showed a large entryway, then a long corridor. One large X was on one of the rooms, beside a window at the end of the hall.

"You can see all the rooms, doors, and windows in the building," explained Gumshoe. "The defendant came into the victim's room, intending to deliver a paper, and was spotted strangling the victim in his chair, and then putting him on the ground. The papers were put on the desk, and we eventually came and arrested her."

"Short..." said Franziska, and bowed as she continued, "...and sweet. Now then, Detective, testify about the morning of the crime!"

"Yessir!"


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"The murder happened around 11:20 AM. The crime photo here..." Gumshoe handed both Franziska and Phoenix a photo, and continued, "shows the victim lying on the ground, with his tie stretched out across the floor. We got this picture taken as soon as we arrived. The tie, as shown here, has the defendant's fingerprints on them, and nobody else's."


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"Well! I'm sorry to say that if that's the case, there's no room for error... and the court accepts the Crime Photo into evidence. Now then, Mr. Wright, you may begin your cross-examination."

"Feenie, let's take a look at the crime photo before we start finding contradictions," said Iris as she picked up the photo.

In it, Andrew Fish was lying on the ground. His tie was stretched over the side of his suit and across the floor a good ways, the front of it being tightly wrung around his neck. The computer screen was off, as well as the computer on light being blank. There was one thing missing...

"OBJECTION! Phoenix pointed out at Gumshoe. "This crime photo presents a huge hole in your testimony!"

"What!?" said Gumshoe. "What is it, then, pal!?"

"I would like to ask that everyone look at the Crime Photo." He then pointed to the victim's desk. "Gumshoe's testimony clearly stated that the defendant had left the files she had brought on his desk, before you all came in. If that was so, why aren't the files on his desk in this image!?"

"Ah!" said Gumshoe. "Er... eheh...OW!" Franziska's whip cracked across Gumshoe's face.

"DETECTIVE! You're playing on my nerves here! Get on with it!" said Franziska threateningly.

"Y-Yessir!" said Gumshoe. "Well... the guy who was supposed to bring his camera didn't."

"W-WHAT!?" said Phoenix. "You've got to be kidding me! How long did it take you guys to go back, get it, and get back to the crime scene?"

"Err... about fifteen minutes, I suppose..."

Phoenix facepalmed, and thought for a minute. 'There has to be a reason why those files went missing... they were there when we investigated! Gumshoe said they saw it there when they found Ms. Porter... so who took them and why?'

"Scruffy! Did your men take the files or not?" said Franziska.

"Yes we did... I have them right here." said Gumshoe.

"The court accepts it into evidence," said the Judge, and Phoenix and Franziska got copies of the files.

"Now, then. Testify about what these files are, and let's get the facts straight that it has nothing to do with the current case, so we can get on with closing it!" said Franziska, looking ready to kill.

"Yessir!"


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"These files contained records about an illegal company. Apparently Mr. Fish was keeping tabs on this company. The name of this organization is the 3-M Organization, which gives no leads as to what they're doing. It doesn't seem like this has any bearing on this case, so I'll end it here."


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"There, are you satisfied, Mr. Phoenix Wright?" asked Franziska. "I think he thoroughly proved that those files have nothing to do with this case... but feel free to look over them yourself."

"Thanks, but I think we'll do the cross-examination anyway," said Phoenix. "I've never let a testimony slip by me yet, and it's not going to start happening now!"

"Very well. Begin your cross-examination," said the Judge.

Phoenix began looking at the papers. Thinking about what Gumshoe said, he looked inside. There were two pieces of paper; one stating the name of the organization and what he had on them so far; that they were dealing in illegal materials and were doing so in a hidden fashion... The other paper had records of when he tapped into their account through his computer; they appeared to start around May 10th... but he saw a date that instantly jogged his memory.

May 29th.

"Did you find something, Feenie?" asked Iris.

"Yeah, I've found something... this may come in handy a bit later, but for right now I need to tackle what the good Detective has already presented..." And with that, he delivered...

"OBJECTION!"

This caught Gumshoe off guard, making him fall over a bit, but he recovered quickly. "What is it, pal!?"

Phoenix pulled up the threat email he had recovered, which he had saved on a disk along with the video, and presented it to the court. "I'd like the court to view the email that is saved on this disk." He then popped it into a small drive and let the judge and prosecution look at the threat email.

After finishing it, Franziska was sweating. "A threat email!? From the company listed in these files!?"

Phoenix nodded, wearing his smirk. "I do believe that this threat email gives substantial proof that it is likely that Andrew Fish was murdered by a man from this company!"

"OBJECTION!" came Franziska's voice. "But he was seen being strangled by Ms. Porter--"

"OBJECTION! You haven't even given us proof that she DID!" Phoenix shot back.

"What about her fingerprints on the tie!?"

"She helps him put it on every morning!"

"And that helps your case HOW!?"

"Look at the fingerprint smears! It was obvious that gloves handled this tie some way or another, and I don't think that Mr. Fish uses gloves!"

"Gaaaah!" Franziska felt like she had just gotten hit with a hammer in the head. "Y-You... how dare you ruin my logic..."

Phoenix looked triumphant. "Well, what do you have to say to that, Ms. von Karma--OUCH!" the whip cracked dangerously near him and popped his nose a bit.

"It's... it's not over yet!" said Franziska. "I have another witness!"

"WHAT!?" said Phoenix, and he dropped his triumphant look; he didn't think that Franziska had another witness ready.

"Aha ha ha ha..." Franziska's face reverted to the childlike smirk. "It's far, far from over, Mr. Phoenix Wright... I can assure you that. Scruffy, get the hell off of the stand! It's time for the next witness!"

"Y-Yessir!" Gumshoe practically ran off the stand as Franziska's whip nearly cracked him one more time.


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A red-haired woman approached the stand. It was clear she was wearing a smirk as she looked around the courtroom, as if getting a feel for her surroundings. Her green business suit gleamed in the courtroom light.

"Witness. Your name and occupation... if you please," said Franziska, impatiently.

"My name is Relisa Fish. I am a co-executive at Loan Fish Organization... and Andrew's sister." said the woman.

"Very good. Please testify to the court about what you saw the morning of the murder."

"As you wish."


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"I was sitting in my office, drinking my morning coffee, when I heard a door open and a shriek. I ran over and I saw it - my brother being strangled by that horrible woman! She pulled him out of his chair by his tie, and threw him to the ground. She ended up banging her own leg against the desk, causing the computer monitor to fall and crack. I called the police, and after they arrived, I set the monitor back up."


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"Mr. Wright, you may begin your cross-examination," said the Judge.

"Oh come on, it's like she's giving us the answer..." muttered Phoenix.

"What is it?" asked Iris.

"She basically contradicted everything just by saying the monitor cracked..."

"OBJECTION! Look again at the Crime Photo, if you will..." said Phoenix. He pointed at the computer monitor. "As you can see, the monitor isn't cracked!"

"Aack!" sputtered Relisa. "H-How!? I-I saw it!"

"Sorry, but I'm afraid digital cameras tell better truths than your optical ones, there," said Phoenix.

"Witness! You will not lie in my court!" roared the Judge. "You swore to oath before you came on the stand!"

Franziska held her whip at the ready. "Now, now, Your Honor, let's not get too hasty. Ms. Fish, you must have an alternate explanation for the cracked monitor."

"Y....Y-Yes..." said Relisa, making a full recovery. "That's right! I do!"

"Well then, give us your testimony," said the Judge. "And no lies this time!"


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"When the murder occured, I heard something crack. I thought she had hit the desk, so after the police went back after finding the body, I came into the office. After making sure everything was unharmed, I left. The computer stayed off, I even came to check it around 2 PM."


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"Very well... your cross-examination, please," said the Judge.

Phoenix didn't even have to think for this one.

"OBJECTION! ... That was a very nice lie you just formulated."

"Wh-what!?" said Relisa, sweating.

"It just so happened that we found the computer on... around 2:15 PM." said Phoenix, smirking.

"A-Ah!!"

"Windows were open, the desk had been used... and the files were gone earlier. So what was it, Ms. Fish? What were you doing in that unaccounted time between the first time you looked and 2 PM!?"

Relisa glared at Phoenix. "W-Why you...! Why would you insinuate that I took those papers in the first place!? All they had on them was information about the 3-M Organ--AH!!" she realized her error too late.

"... That's exactly why I insinuated it."

"Now, hold on a second!" said the Judge. "Why would she want those papers? And why would she be using her brother's computer instead of her own?"

"That's easy, Your Honor," continued Phoenix. "Think about what was on the computer. It had his email up, with the threat letter that I submitted earlier. Those files had information about the 3-M organization on them. There was also a video... that shows she was looking into what her brother found on this organization."

"Why would you say that!?" demanded Franziska. "Go on, then. Show us your proof!"

"And proof I shall show, Ms. von Karma," nodded Phoenix. He loaded the disk again and showed them the video.

After it was over, it showed the timestamp - May 29th - again.

By this time, Franziska and Relisa were sweating immensely. However, Relisa was the first to speak. "So why would I look at that!? It was my brother's business, not mine! How could you honestly explain what I was doing?"

Phoenix smirked once more. "You were really into that business, weren't you? But I figured that if you wanted to uncover them as well, you would have been there for him after he got this!" He then presented the Threat Letter, the final piece given before the actual murder.

Relisa took a half-step back, not daring to believe it. "W-What are you insinuating then!? What was my role in all this?"

"I do believe... that you were conspiring with this company to kill your brother!" said Phoenix.

"Are you crazy!?" said Franziska. "How do you plan to substantiate your claim for this conspiracy?"

Phoenix stopped and thought for a moment. 'One thing has become clear so far. Ms. Fish has to have helped that company in some way, otherwise she would not have tapped into his computer and stole the files temporarily...' "I do believe that much of this trial has been very confusing up until now. But one thing has been made very clear: There is no way that Ms. Fish could not have known about the 3-M Organization! Take that into effect with the fact that she did not help her brother, and instead snooped around his office, and you come to the conclusion that she's working for that company behind her brother and father's backs!!"

"Ah..ah...AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!" shriked Relisa.

The court burst into chatter, and before long the judge slammed down his gavel. "Order! Order! ORDER! Well, this is most interesting--"

"OBJECTION!" came Franziska's voice. "The defense's claim is baseless--"

"...No... they're right..." came a soft voice.

"What was that!?" said Franziska fiercely.

All eyes turned to Relisa. She wiped a tear from her eye, and went on. "I have been working for this company for some time... the 3-M Organization. I couldn't help it, I needed the money, and my father and brother refused to help me! They thought I was in a good enough position as it was, and so I was left with no choice but to get my own money somehow..."

"And so that's why you joined the 3-M Organization, but still stayed at the Loan Fish company?" asked Phoenix.

"... Yes. I didn't know how far he had gotten with attempting to uncover the factory, so I had to look for myself... and it seems that he had found it... just before he got murdered."

"Did you see who murdered him?" asked Phoenix.

"... ... ... I'm sorry... I didn't."

The court erupted into chatter before the Judge silenced them. "Well, it looks as if we must delay the case for one more day. Too much doubt rests in my mind between Mr. Fish and this 3-M Organization. The defense and the prosecution are both ordered to look into this! And witness, you are ordered to tell us where this organization lies, so that we may investigate it!"

"Y-Yes, Your Honor," conceded Relisa.


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- June 17, 2:00 PM
District Courthouse
Defendant Lobby 5 -


"W-Wow! That was amazing, Mr. Wright!" said Leslie after they all arrived in the Lobby. "I didn't know you had such awesome deduction powers!"

"It was mostly luck," said Phoenix with a serious look on. "There wasn't much other doubt in my mind, but an old friend always told me... Once you've taken away the impossible, whatever's left, however improbable, is the truth. And it came out well in the end."

"Well, I hope you can find out enough clues at that 3-M place... where was it again?"

Phoenix looked at the sheet that Relisa had given them. "Apparently it's on the outskirts of L.A., in an old abandoned warehouse."

"Creepy."

Iris looked at the paper. "So I guess we gotta go there and investigate, huh?"

"Yup... I bet the police will have the place locked down, too," responded Phoenix. "Well, let's go..."

And they went off to the abandoned warehouse, home of the 3-M Organization, to learn more about them, and hopefully, be able to get enough evidence to settle this confusing case once and for all.


-END OF CHAPTER-

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Nice job!

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Alright, everyone, I've stopped on The Final Cases for now, and have instead been working on Phoenix Wright: Everything Gone Wright.

Title: Phoenix Wright: Everything Gone Wright
Author: Xero (Xero Wright, Author Xero. etc.)
Rating: PG (for mild lanuage)
Genre: Humor/Romance
Status: IN PROGRESS
Pairing:
Summary: Telling the story about Phoenix's college life. What if everything went right instead of wrong? What if someone told the truth before Game 3, Case 1 happened? Find out inside...

Here's the link:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3871338/1/P ... one_Wright

It has MAJOR TnT SPOILERS, so do be cautious if you don't wanna be spoiled. I have the necessary warning before Chapter 1 begins, so don't read unless you wanna be spoiled or you have already beaten the game.

If you have an FF.Net account and want to know when a new chapter is placed rather than waiting for this thread to update, add it to your "Story Alert +", otherwise stay tuned, for I will post any and all chapter updates here!

So far, you can read Chapters 1 through 5. I've already realized a couple of mistakes I made in Ch5, which I will fix in Chapter 6.

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Well, as always, great fanfics. I really enjoy reading them and I also enjoy being your personal "cross-examiner"... It's quite fun to go through the testimony (the posted chapter) and find all the contradictions (typos and grammatical errors) to make the fanfic the best it can be. Keep it up, mi amigo!

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Both of your fics are adorable, a pleasure to read and generally well done. The fundamental concept is fluffy in the extreme and all around wonderful. Now that I've said that, some things to think about.

You use a couple phrases that seem a bit awkward, for example "I don't want her to kill you more than ever" not only sounds awkward, but makes it seem like Iris was relatively indifferent to Phoenix's life or death before this point( try instead, "Now, more than ever, I cannot let her kill you." Also, "get vengeful" is strange in context because a) Dahlia's not really getting revenge so much as shutting Phoenix up. Against Iris, maybe, but not Phoenix and b) it simply sounds awkward, as though vengeful were a pedestrian emotional state like "happy" or "sad" that could easily subside.

I also noticed that in "The Final Cases" you tend to shy away from internal monologue, but use it rather well in "Everything goes Wright." You might try adopting a similar approach for "Final Cases," since Phoenix's internal responses to people and events are always a large part of his characterization, beyond the internal "Eureka" that precedes every major breakthrough. Like I said, you already do this well in your second fic, so it's not really a major point.

There are a few characterization and plot issues that stood out as well. You probably already noticed this, but Dahlia poisoned cold medicine, not a drink in order to kill Phoenix. It's not very clear how Dahlia intends to kill Phoenix after that point, seeing as he knows she's after him. Phoenix, as you've set out the situation, wouldn't fall for the poison and Dahlia is unarmed. (hence the improvised murder weapon in 3-1). Also, I would think that, having discovered Iris's betrayal, and having just been deceived by Bikini, not to mention fearing ultimate exposure of her crimes, Dahlia might be a bit more than "angry."

On a related topic, why did you have Dahlia decide to kill Iris? In the normal version of these events, Dahlia refrained from killing Iris multiple times, even when she was completely at her mercy (3-5).

I know you characterize Dahlia as cool and calculating, but there is an underlying fury where calculation flies out the window. We haven't seen any of that, even in Dahlia's initial discovery of Iris's betrayal, where she ought to fly into some kind of rage, seeing how she reacts to Iris's name in 3-5. Remeber Dahlia's penchant for single phrase insults: oaf, little brat, weakling, spiky-haired jerk, and my personal favorite, spinster.

I say this half in jest, but it seems like Dahlia's "most evil" lines are straight from Darth Vader, with "sister" substituted for "Admiral." I kept expecting to hear:

"You have failed me for the last time, sister"

"I-I-I'm sorry, Dahlia, I couldn't-"

*stab*

"Apology accepted, Sister Iris."

Still, horrible attempts at smiley-based humor aside, this is good work. I fully acknowledge that my comments are mostly nitpicking, but the overall quality of the writing makes minor blemishes all the more difficult to bear. I'll be eagerly awaiting subsequent chapters.

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Ah, I thank you for your comment. It's nice to get someone else's standpoint at this stage of my writing.

Well, one of the main reasons I wrote Everything Gone Wright was because I was unsatisfied with the lack of detail in The Final Cases. Then I got kind of into it and... well, you got five chapters so far.

I didn't know how to make her say that more than ever she wanted to protect him. I fixed it, thanks for tipping me off on that =)

About the vengeful thing, I'm not sure how I would fix that, so I left it alone...

And Phoenix doesn't catch a cold because, in logic, if Iris stays with Phoenix half the time in his dormitory, it's more likely she'll keep him from catching one, right?

Dahlia still thought that Iris was posing as her at the time she brought Phoenix a drink, so she thought it would work. But once she saw Phoenix's horrified face (this is all theoretical since it's Iris' point of view during that time), she knew that Iris had gone against her will.

Note that I said she had an angry look in her eyes... she hasn't gotten an explanation of things yet, and I think she still wants to know why.

Now that they know she's after them, I'm sure Dahlia will try other ways to kill him. I've run this idea by many people; they all agree that my next few chapters would be a step in the right direction. Dahlia's kind of off the surveillance for the moment, so she's going to try to follow them around... and that's why they're going to Kurain Village; to hide from her. Dahlia is very vengeful for Iris' betrayal - and now I believe she wants to kill them both... but not outright. So she's not going to follow them to Kurain... she's just going to stay at the University.

Think about this: Iris told Phoenix all about what that necklace meant. When Dahlia sees that the bottle is broken, she knows that Phoenix must know by now, meaning Iris told him, totally betraying her. In 3-5, Iris didn't betray Dahlia. Hence, no reason to kill her at the time. In EGW, however... she did.

Oh, and trust me ;) calculations WILL be thrown out the window come Chapter 6, with what's going to happen... I'll let you see for yourself when it is finished.

Again, thanks for your review, and sorry for the long post - I wanted to answer all of your questions. Don't worry about being nitpicky - If it's a major thing, I'll be glad to hear it so I can fix it for future reading!

A side note- For those who are going to ask me come CHapter 6, it slips Bikini's mind about Morgan... you'll know what I mean if you've played 3-5.

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A further suggestion about "get vengeful" and it not being idiomatic, perhaps "seek retribution for" instead since its primarily punitive and less of a long borne grudge.

I would still like to see a little more surprise and variance of emotion on Dahlia's end, given the events of the last two chapters, and a few more insults thrown arond in internal monologue. I mean, Dahlia's a literature major, she must have an amusingly large vocabulary to draw on when irked.

In canon, Iris did betray Dahlia by falling for Phoenix, just not in the direct way of telling him about her. It's a more severe betrayal, but its not new, if you know what I mean. Not sure there's a difference at this point, but I would still predict the vast majority of Dahlia's anger to fall upon Phoenix.

I expect Morgan's reaction to her daughters' return to be priceless. Imagine, her precious Pearl exposed to such worthless creatures and that uncouth spiky haired ruffian!

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Morgan's not going to recognize Iris yet. But I'll make sure she refers to Phoenix as a spiky haired ruffian before Chapter 6 is over with! XD (Remember, it's been TWENTY YEARS since Morgan and Iris saw each other. Neither of them remember the other, just yet. I'll bet there'd be a tug at their memories... but for now, I'm leaving that alone.)

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http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3871338/6/

Chapter 6 is up! Enjoy. Chapter 7 will be a very, VERY interesting chapter...

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Another excellent chapter. I really like the improvements you've made in characterization, description, and diction, and fully anticipate something extremely amusing when Mia sees "Dahlia" in her house. That said, here are my thoughts in more depth:

A few awkward lines still persist, like "Did you reallly think that I, unlike my sister, would fall for you" This line seems like Iris didn't fall for Phoenix, try instead something like "Oh come now Mr. Wright (mention snide tone) , unlike my sister, I'm not nearly foolish (or other non-Franziska adjective) enough to fall for you." It makes the meaning clearer and sounds more like normal speech.

The way you describe Dahlia "clearly focusing her anger on Phoenix, merely taunting him rather than fuming at Iris" is awkward because it's an observation that the reader should be able to make from the scene without being directly told by the narrator. Perhaps describe how Iris's betrayal mattered less to her in that moment than the overall wothlessness of her choice. I actually think that this was clear from the scene itself, so perhaps just delete that line.

Your "opposite sides of a yin-yang analogy is a little wordy, perhaps "like yin and yang" The other problem with that is that yin and yang are complementary, forming an overall whole comprised of both parts properly regulated. However apt the analogy is to the twins, I doubt that's what Phoenix is thinking of at that time.

Small quibble: Dahlia and Iris endlessly refer to one another as "sister," it's awfully formal considering how important they are to one another.

Also, Maya like she would bring up some lighthearted topic of conversation, say burgers or TV, as something to talk about, especially since she's a fan of "outside" things and two fascinating sources of information about that have just entered the village. Overall a much improved chapter, keep them coming.

Poor Dahlia, she can't ever catch a break, can she? ;_;

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Ah, many thanks. I fixed Dahlia's line to "not nearly desperate enough" since 'foolish' or 'stupid' (as I was going to use before desperate) sort of doesn't make sense.

Remember, Maya's three years younger... but I guess she would still like burgers and TV... She's not gonna mention either of those next chapter cause after Maya wakes up, Mia comes.

Thanks for continuing to read. Chapter 7 will be posted in about two hours.

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http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3871338/7/

Chapter 7 of Everything Gone Wright is ready!

I hope you all enjoy it... if you find errors, PM them to me or post them here, and I will fix them.

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I'm not really... skilled enough to explain exactly what, but Mia's dialog seems terribly forced in Chapter 7, though I'm not sure how one would fix it.

The Best(?) example is probably this:

"I have to get back to the law offices for now," said Mia. "Perhaps you should come with me. There's not much to do in Kurain Village right now, and if you want to make up for not being in the University, then it's best you start learning more about law as much as you can." She stood up, and walked to the door. ".. You coming, Mr. Wright?"

The bolded part is the most... unnatural sounding part, if you ask me...

Otherwise, I like it so far, though I'm wondering why Dahlia is so... well... blunt about her motives and actions, not very Dahliaish =/

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Actually, Dahlia doesn't much care for the help of others, and now that her plan has been blown out of the water, she doesn't care what she says to Iris or Phoenix or Bikini now.

As for Mia... I really don't understand what you're saying. =\

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Oh, okay that makes more sense about Dahlia

and as for Mia... it's hard to describe, like I said, but in that particular case [the bold part] It seems like it's repeating itself "... more... as much as you can," they both represent the same idea, and having them both in close proximity is poor style, if not bad grammar.

For the record, I like it, I'm just offering criticism because IMO, it's better to have your writing critiqued and improve because of it, than to be complemented tremendously and never improve.

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Ahh, I see what you mean. I'll go ahead and fix the bolded part... and go ahead and look at the others.

Like I said, I WANT critique, so I can update my fic and have it look as neat as it can be. So your help is greatly appreciated =)

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I can't wait for the next chapter for both your fics.

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The chief problem with the dialogue is that, aside from redundancies, it just doesn't flow naturally; the whole scene progresses too quickly. Mia says at most 2-3 sentences on a topic before shifting. For example, you might expect her to talk about seeing a hole in one of the prosecution's arguments, or believing in her client's innocence. (not in a preachy way, more as a descriptor) Some of the more pertinent information to Phoenix is left out, what he can expect when they get there, a general discusssion of what the firm is like, details like that flesh out the dialogue and make it less like a Q&A session. A note, law firms are generally not too intersted in "moral things." Ethical codes of conduct maybe, but that's hardly a central part of their curriculum. Avoid general terms like "get" and "a lot", they're fine in casual conversation, but what the two guests will do next is a rather serious topic.

That was an awfully short visit on Mia's part, considering that its two hours by train one way. Including a little "slice of life" scene like what Mia and Maya do together (Phoenix and Iris optionally included) would do much to lssen the sense of breakneck speed.

Regarding the "Dahlia's in my house!" scene, I would think that any normal person's reaction to having a known multiple murderer (who poisoned her boyfriend) suddenly appear in their house would take significantly more than 2-3 lines of dialogue to resolve, and would probably occasion a more severe reaction than pointing.

The overall story is geting even more interesting though, as the story is freed from the cradle of canon events. Overall a good chapter, and pretty much everyone's dialogue is much more in character than when you started. Morgan, Iris, and Dahlia particularly so. Note: I would still expect Iris to feel guilty regardless of Phoenix's assurances, they may help, but there should be some unease left.

Oh, and it's nice to see the return of Dahlia's grade-A planning and logic skills: I have no idea where I am and have nearly died. I will now proceed to walk in a random direction without even knowing who is responsible for this new circumstance in which I find myself. Very authentic portrayal of "maskless Dahlia." Cute inclusion of lines from 3-5 as well. Again, a good job overall, minus the few pacing and dialogue problems.

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Yeah, I thought it was a bit fast too; but I don't think Mia's the type of person to do something like jump Iris or try to hurt her right off the bat - it threw her off guard and shocked her. I don't see anything like a fight or even close to one.

I can't fix all that now, since it would cause me to have to rewrite over half the chapter, but I'm trying to make up for it in Chapter 8.

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I come with a status report.

I'm very sorry that I've not been writing lately - I've been busy with school (and a few RPs XD), and I've been taking a break from writing. I felt that if I kept going with this one-chapter-a-day thing the fanfics would dissolve into boringness. Chapter 8 is currently half-done, and I'll probably finish it tomorrow.

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