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Memories, Trials Family, The Fic into a Comic.
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Hello People! This will be my sprite Comic. It's based on a Reallllllllly long Fic i wrote and never did anywathing With.
Anyway: IT not your usal "Invent and Ace attorney and do a few trials" comic (No offense people) Instead it's a bloody long story. (About 6 months in writing.)
First Boring stuff:
All sprites and backgrounds are made by me :D
Thanks to Coffee Prosecutor for being my Spell cheacker and Co-Writer
Next: There is only one OC Here's her profile.
Spoiler: Picture form since Forums for me don't like alot of text,
And thats about it on with the Story!
Part one: Start and Search
1: Letter
2: Call and News
3: Wright, Lock and Files
4: Scars
5: Questions and Answers.
Cracking Plans
6: Quiet Plans.
7: Argumental Plans
8:Future Plans
9: Finding Plans
10: Dating Plans
Date ~
11: Prepertions for a date
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Coffee Prosecutor wrote:
I like it so far
But on the 5th page a name tag is missing
But on the 5th page a name tag is missing
Fixed :D
6th page will be up soon but I mucked up the names and text so i have to re-do it. It's annoying
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Ptapcc wrote:
Sounds interesting and is interesting when I read it. I look forward to the next few releases.
Ptapcc
Ptapcc
Thanks.
Page 6 i will now put up. I checked it over and it seems okey-dokey but it was annoying one to write since it's alonnnnnnnng chapter and i had to simpilfy it down. In fic she asks about Diego is he is still there and that she might visit him.
Also Dayan seems a little OOC but hat was on purpose and if you think abut you can kinda think why.
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DefenceLawyer wrote:
wait... isn't that my apollo sprite?
No i made it quickly, Used Trucy's mouth and just skin coloured the mouth. I used the 4-4 screenshot for the body.
Edit:
This my apollo foward.
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also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
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DefenceLawyer wrote:
ok, I was just making sure
also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
I thought that but you don't stay aas Karoline all the time, Like You go as Phoenix in chapter 3 and i i thought it would be to confusing with out it. I try to do it as less i can then or just limit to whoever you "Play" as.
It's hard really.
EDIT: Next chapter is up :D Kristoph's name tag went weird Although it stuck to the Fic. The fic Actully was diffnt with the MC hiding under a bed and putting a bug on Klavier and track him. Instead i changed the story alittle.
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KrazyKaro wrote:
DefenceLawyer wrote:
ok, I was just making sure
also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
I thought that but you don't stay aas Karoline all the time, Like You go as Phoenix in chapter 3 and i i thought it would be to confusing with out it. I try to do it as less i can then or just limit to whoever you "Play" as.
It's hard really.
EDIT: Next chapter is up :D Kristoph's name tag went weird Although it stuck to the Fic. The fic Actully was diffnt with the MC hiding under a bed and putting a bug on Klavier and track him. Instead i changed the story alittle.
maybe you could write something like: 'KLAVIERS POV' of something, because I've been getting confused... sorry
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DefenceLawyer wrote:
KrazyKaro wrote:
DefenceLawyer wrote:
ok, I was just making sure
also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
also I think the comic will be a bit better if we didn't hear everybodys thoughts, apert from the MC
I thought that but you don't stay aas Karoline all the time, Like You go as Phoenix in chapter 3 and i i thought it would be to confusing with out it. I try to do it as less i can then or just limit to whoever you "Play" as.
It's hard really.
EDIT: Next chapter is up :D Kristoph's name tag went weird Although it stuck to the Fic. The fic Actully was diffnt with the MC hiding under a bed and putting a bug on Klavier and track him. Instead i changed the story alittle.
maybe you could write something like: 'KLAVIERS POV' of something, because I've been getting confused... sorry
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There i changed Chapter 7 and i will do who's point of view all the time.
The next chapter i'm stuck. It's is actully surrpose to be a difgr when Klavier get's beaten up and Karoline goes ape at the boys. I don't kno weather to make that chapter or go straight into the next meeting.
Edit: I'll give a
to anyone who can guess why i've some of the pages why. double for anone who can tell why i called chapter 6 "Quite plans?"Edit Edi: page seven is up. Sorry for the bad spriting in this one. was gonna be called "WTF? IS THAT BLONDE HAIR"
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I look forward to reading your future chapters!
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Meenyman wrote:
These are very good Karo, so keep the awesome work, ok?
I look forward to reading your future chapters!
I look forward to reading your future chapters!
Thanks Meeny :D
UPDATE!
hapter nine is up! Sorry for the didgey nametags on this one. I tried a iffrent way of doing them. this one will be quite long this section with Daryan / Karoline / Kristoph in it.
Page 10/11/12 Are supposed to b funny ones wih a few referances to things. And Daryan and Kristoph have mini argument.
(IT'S HARD NOT TO SPOIL THINGS)
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Anyway chapter 10 is up and if i can put down TWEWY for a second the next chapter will be up later tonight.
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I look forward to the next chapter.
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PandaPrinzessin wrote:
There's just one thing that puzzles me- wouldn't Klavier recognise his own sister?
This is the only plothole that was easy in the fic not so easy in the comic.
In the flash back she has blonde hair, he also says he hasn't see her for two years. And when thee are on the "date" he says that she looks like herself (if you know what i mean) But says he recalls her with blonde hair.
Also He knows that "Karoline" Is winning trials in England therefore it's impossible for her to be in America. (The tme conradiction from chapter 2) Also When she's on the date she has a diffrent hair do.
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godot_blend_#107 wrote:
chapter 10 was a bit confusing at first, but after reading it again, it was fun !
Sorry Chapter 10 was hard to fit in but i didn't want it to over run.
Anyway Chapter 11. I LOVED making this chapter. It's rather funny and i liked doing it.
It shows me why i picked Daryan over any other character in jail. Like how he is kind of almost the complete oppersite of Kristoph.
Also There's an easter egg in this chapter.
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PandaPrinzessin wrote:
I LOL'd out loud at "Coming from someone whose hair looks like a pen-" Because we all know it does. Good chapter but please, please, please get someone to spellcheck for you!
My normal spell cheacker hasn't be on MSN and i know he will moan at me for not giving it to him first. And the day is nearly over. I shouldnt be so rushed i need to calm down.
Anyone seen the Awesome smiley on chapter 11 yet?
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KrazyKaro wrote:
Anyone seen the Awesome smiley on chapter 11 yet?
nope, were??
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godot_blend_#107 wrote:
KrazyKaro wrote:
Anyone seen the Awesome smiley on chapter 11 yet?
nope, were??
Second last frame. The awesome face is there trust me.
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KrazyKaro wrote:
godot_blend_#107 wrote:
KrazyKaro wrote:
Anyone seen the Awesome smiley on chapter 11 yet?
nope, were??
Second last frame. The awesome face is there trust me.
oh! hehe
i see him!
haha
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The constantly shifting viewpoints drive me nuts, and it's obvious that there's a lot of background between some of these characters... but we're never told it. I haven't bothered to read your first post because quite frankly I shouldn't have to. All I should need to know is a one-two line synopsis before jumping into the comic where all this information should be given to me. You're throwing around way too many characters at the moment and switching between them way too often.
Also parts of it are a little messy (your most recent frame in particular has a messed up Phoenix, to be pedantic), especially your text boxes. See if you can't tidy up the text a little bit; a little effort goes a long way.
I'm not trying to shoot you down or anything; kudos to you for tackling a sprite comic, I know that they can very quickly move from a fun little endeavour to something that gets way out of control. With a little maintenance and care, though, you could really make this something. Best of luck!
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Whats a good way to do text? At the moment I'm using Bitmap font writer, Annoying since I have to go and delete all the black boxes after.
And to be honest the latter chapters are more calmed down and easier to read, not sure how to do anything about the backgrounds of the characters since I'm going by the fic.
Also I'm gonna have to delay this comic since I'm staying around my sisters then going on holiday for chirstmas.
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Through my eyes, it can be a tad difficult to read at times and it does seem to rush, I like it. And I usually silently tear apart sprite comics.
I also appreciate what this is. A sprite comic of a fic. It's like a movie based off a book. Not easy. But this is performing well.
In conclusion ('bout time...), it needs a little cleaning, as all sprite comics do, but it's good.
And I am having immense trouble finding the awesome face.
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