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Justin Order Ace AttorneyTopic%20Title
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I was bored and thought i would make a sprite comic, Justin Order Ace attorney:

Turnabout Rewind
Spoiler: Chapter 1
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Spoiler: chapter 2
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Sig.


Last edited by DefenceLawyer on Sun May 17, 2009 5:12 pm, edited 2 times in total.
Re: Justin Order Ace AttorneyTopic%20Title
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i feel pretty

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I think there are pehaps three faults in this. The first is the lack of an intro. The second is the poor grammar, and the third is that this is way too much like the beginning of one of the other games. (Can't remember which, but definitely one of them.)
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Property of Big Corporate Things Inc.

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Also, Grossberg's mouth is constantly open, even when he's not speaking.
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i feel pretty

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How did I miss that?
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I hate Klaviema >_>

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Also, both Justin and Order are taken by other OCs.

And it's like AJ's intro, only it makes less sense.
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Otaku, #1 Machi fan, #2 Machi Fan

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What everyone else said, but...

Jibber, I'm disappointed in you. I woulda thought you'd be the first to say

Spoiler:
JPEG ALERT JPEG ALERT JPEG ALERT JPEG ALERT JPEG ALERT JPEG ALERT

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ALL GLORY TO THE HYPNOGANT
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I hate Klaviema >_>

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That too.

*can't be bothered to upload banner*
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i feel pretty

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Show me your moves, Trite!

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I remembered something after see this comic:

Quote:
HOW ARE YOU GENTLEMAN?

ALL YOUR BASE ARE BELONG TO US.

WHAT YOU SAY?

YOU'RE ON YOUR WAY TO DESTRUCTION TAKE YOUR TIME.

This is a sig. Don't you believe me?
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Ah, an update! Or... down-date? Considering you added an intro after the case began...


Anyway, one thing I don't really like is the grammar. Here's a Fix'd version:

Spoiler:
:phoenix: :edgeworth: (smilies used for convenience)
:phoenix: : Mr. Harold! I'm here about the book!
:edgeworth: : About that... you see, it's been rejected.
:edgeworth: : It will never be published.
:phoenix: : Really? I'm saddened... (or something to that effect)
:phoenix: : Well, before you go, i've got something for you.
:gun: : BANG!
:phoenix: : Why? why is it always me?!
:phoenix: : That case wrecked my life...
:phoenix: : I won't let this one too!


There. Much better.

Oh, and in future, you may want to alert us as to updates.
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