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Changed in 6 days (Phoenix/Maya, Miles/Franziska)Topic%20Title
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Me and dabn made this fanfiction an hour ago, i wrote a little, sent it to him on MSN, he sent me back with his parts, anyway, this might have some typos since english is my second language.
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Title: Changed in 6 days
Author: D3moniz3D & dabn
Rating: 13+
Genre: Romance
Status: In progress
Pairing: Nick/Maya
Summary:
Wright & Co. law offices recieves an invitation for an expensive vacation from Gatewater corp. includes many attractions such as : 5 nights on Gatewater hotel, trip to gatewater land, jeep tours, and an expensive limousine to drive them to all those events. during the vacation, Nick's feelings change towards Maya.

*knock* *knock*
"Just a second!" Phoenix shouted.
He got out of the bed slowly and went towards the door. "Yes, What is it?"
"Letter for... Mr. Wright?" The postman said.
"Yes, that's me, thank you." Phoenix ansewred back and took the letter.
"What is it, Nick?" Maya said quietly.
"Hmmmmm... it's a letter but i'm not sure what's in it, let me open it."
Phoenix opened the letter and saw a bright font saying
"Dear Phoenix Wright, i felt I really needed to repay you for what you've done for me.
Thank you.
-Will Powers.
PS: look outside"
"Well?" Maya said.
Phoenix ignored her, and looked outside seeing a huge limousine.
"Look!" He pointed and brought her attention to the outside.
"WOW!" Maya screamed, "I can't belive it! is that limo related to the letter?"
Phoenix smiled, "Of course it is, Will Powers, you remember him, right? Sent this letter
saying that he want to repay us for something. Why won't we get ready and go outside?"
"I can't wait!" Maya said while her eyes glittered.
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"Come on Nick, get ready!" Maya said.
"I'm coming, i'm coming!" Phoenix replied.
They both headed outside...
"Nick, wait! I can't belive you forgot Pearl!" Maya remembered.
"Me? You forget her too..."
Maya went to Pearl's room and woke her up.
Pearl rubbed her eyes.
"What is it, Mystic Maya?"
"I'll tell you you later, Pearly, meanwhile, pack your stuff." Maya said.
"We're going back to Kurain already?!" Pearl panicked.
"No, of course not, just go and pack your stuff." Maya replied.
"Ok, ok."
two minutes later Pearl looked outside and saw the huge limo and said.
"WOW! how come? i thought Mr. Nick couldn't afford it!"
"No, Pearl, Mr. Will Powers sent that limo! remember him? from the Engarde case?" Maya answered.
"Oh yeah him!"
Phoenix looked at the sparkle in pearl's eyes and said "Sorry to ruin this moment, but lets head out."
"Ladies and Gentelman, if you will, get in the car." The driver said.
Phoenix, Pearl and Maya did as he say, "I can't belive im inside a limo!" Maya shouted.
"I know what you mean Mystic Maya, I feel the same." Pearl said.
The limousine started to move while the three looked outside the window, could'nt wait to know where
they're going.
Suddenly Pearl moved to the back seat.
"Umm Pearls, why's that?" Nick asked.
"Couples needs to stay alone, Mr. Nick!"
"Okay, that's it." Maya said, "driver, can you stop the car for a second?"
"As you wish."
Maya moved to the back sit and screamed:
"FOR THE LAST TIME, ME AND NICK ARE NOT A COUPLE!"
Pearl started to cry, Nick turned back and told Maya
"Now look what you did, good going, Maya"
Maya muttered to herself and returned to the front seat. Nick went to the back seat.
"Hey Pearls, is everything alright?"
"Im... im sorry, Mr. Nick, i didnt mean to bug you or Mystic Maya..."
"Hey, it's alright... now come to the front seat with us."
"O..Okay."
They went to the front seat.
suddenly the driver stopped. Nick looked outside the window seeing a huge sign:
"Welcome to Gatewater hotel, enjoy your stay!"
What a suprise Nick thought.
"Gatewater hotel! i havent been here in a while!" Maya screamed.
The bellboy arrived.
"Oh, it's you."
"Welcome back, Phoenix Wright, sir!"
Maya said "you know each other?"
"Yeah". Nick said. "On the Mia murder case he was SOME kind of help."
"AHEM." the bellboy stopped them, "May i take your bags?"
"Oh yeah, sure." Phoenix said, and went to the lobby.
Another bellboy came to the parking lot. "homemade lemonade?"
"Alright!" Maya said, taking 3 glasses, giving one to Pearl, and then they both headed in, Maya gave another glass to Nick.
"Thanks!" Nick said.
"No prob, now lets find Mr. Powers."
They found him sitting on a expensive couch, they sat in the sofa's around him.
"Oh, so you arrived!" Will said.
"Yes, of course, thank you very much, Mr. Powers, you're our most kindest client." Maya replied.
"Aww, quit it, you're making me blush, you saved my life more then once."
"Can i know what is it all about now?" Nick butted in.
"Oh, yeah." Will talked, " I decided to thank you with this huge vacation pack, from me and all of Gatewater Corp. go to the main lobby for your keys. and get some sleep, we'll call you in the morning."
"Alright" Phoenix said.
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Chapter one, if you liked it i can add more.
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Hooray!! I love Nick/Maya!!! Great job!!
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Hooray!! I love Nick/Maya!!! Great job!!

Thank you, we will probably do the seconed part tommorow.
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NO! RIGHT NOW! :godot:
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Hey, we're gonna add an extra pairing to chapter 2.

Hint: They're both prosecutors.
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Cute so far. I look forward to Chapter 2. I must admit I'm curious as to who this second pairing is composed of. :karma:
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We're just about to finish it. :godot:
And its fairly obvious who the prosecuting pairing is. >.<
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Sorry for double post but heres chapter two!


"Oh yeah! I need to check in the reception, be right back." Phoenix said and hurried to the lobby.
"Ummmm.... Excuse me, I got this invataion from Will so does it mean I don't have to pay?" He asked.
"Hey bellboy! Come here!" A Familiar voice shouted.
Phoenix ignored the receptionist's ansewr and turned around.
"Miles?"
"Well... well... if it isn't Mr. Wright." Edgeworth said with a cocky grin.
"Miles... what are you doing here?"
"Me and Franny are here for vacation we tought we would relax from all the hard work."
"Wait... Franny? As in, Franziska?"
"Yes, didn't I tell you we are..."
*whip*
"...Lovers." A cold voice suddenly popped out of nowhere.
"Oh great, this vacation is gonna be hell even before it starts" Nick thought.
"Oh, Mr. Phoenix Wright, how are you?"
"Oh, fine, Franny... i mean, Franziska. still calling people in their full names, i see."
"Anyway," Miles said,"why are you here for, Wright? you finally got a client who actually PAY you?"
"Yes, Mr. Powers rewarded me for saving him 3 years ago"
"Okay then, i'll be off." Edgeworth said.
Edgeworth proceeded yelling at the bellboy.
"Goodbye, Phoenix Wright" Franziska said and went along with Edgeworth.
"Oh wow, I have to tell this to Maya" Phoenix thought as he went back, forgetting that he needs to check
in.
"Maya! you won't belive this!" Phoenix called.
"What, WHAT?!" Maya screamed back.
"Miles... and Frann, er Franziska are... a couple."
"WHAT?!" Maya, Pearl and Will shouted together from the shock.
"Wait, who is Franziska?" Will asked.
"Phoenix do you know what that means?" Maya said and overcomed Will's voice.
"Care to share?" Phoenix asked.
"It means... you forgot to check us in. How could you be so careless?"
"M...maya but..."
"Oh! Never mind that, Mr. Wright, i'll check you guys in." Will said generously.
"Thank you very much." Phoenix said.
Phoenix suddenly looked down and saw the angryness in Pearl's eyes.
"Maya, go with Will."
"Alright." Maya said and went to check in.
Phoenix looked at Pearl and said "What's wrong?"
"That evil blue haired girl! she took over Mr. Ed-ji-Werth so she could ruin our vacation! I hate her! she's

nothing more then a little girl without her whip!"
"Pearl, calm down, she helped me last time, without her we would never have saved Maya."
"O-ok Mr. Nick."
They waited five more minutes and then Will and Maya came back.
"Well, lets go put our stuff inside the room." Maya said.
When they arrived to the room Will said goodbye and went back.
"Ahhhh! Finally, wer'e here!" Pearl said.
"Yeah, I bet we will have so much fun!" Maya announced. "... I'm very tired, lets go to sleep Nick."
"Ok, Maya, but don't you think you and Pearls need to shower first? I'll shower in the morning." Phoenix replied.
"Ummmm... ok, I guess you're right."
As they walked in, Phoenix thought to himself "Wow, this room is really big and luxurious. And when I think of

it,
im also getting pretty tired, I guess i'll take a little na......p"
Maya went out of the bathroom seeing Phoenix asleep lying against the cold window headed to the beach.
"Mr. nick! Wake up!" Pearl said.
Nick yawned, "What is it, Pearls?"
"You're sleeping on the window, Mr. Nick!"
Maya giggled. "Wow Nick, i didn't know you were THAT old."
"AHAHAHA, very funny."
Nick, Maya and Pearl went to sleep.
--Day 2--

"Mr. Nick, Mr. Nick! Something came out of the door! It's a piece of paper, it says "Gait-woter corp. invites us
to 'Gait-woter Land'"!
"Wh-what? Moooom five more minutes!" Phoenix said half-asleep.
"MR. NICK!" Pearl shouted into his ear, "this is important!"
"Leave it to me, Pearly." Maya said.
Maya picked a glass of water, and splashed it on Phoenix's face.
"AUGHHH!"
"Well its about time you'd wake up, pops!"
"Wh-what is it?"
"We got an invitation to Gatewater land!"
"Oh, the new theme park, is it?"
"Yeah, now hurry up and take a shower, i don't want to miss a single second of it!"
"Alright, alright."
Phoenix hurried up to the bathroom, and took a shower. 8 minutes later he came out, Maya was shocked.
Nick didn't look as usuall, he was wearing jeans, white T-shirt, and a blue jacket.
"Quite a performance, Nick."
"Huh? anyway, i think we should go and call Edgeworth, he might wanna come with."
"Alright! Is Franziska coming too?"
"Maybe".
Phoenix called Miles.
"Hello?"
"Hey, Edgeworth, you and Franny wanna come to Gatewater land?"
"Alright, Wright."
"Okay, get ready and meet us at the front lobby."
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"You're sleeping on the window, Mr. Nick!" I like it. Funny stuff. I'll admit I'm a little baffled as to why Edgeworth agreed to meet them at Gatewater Land so readily, but perhaps he and Franziska have conceived of a surprise to spring on them or something. Interesting...
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Actually, dabn wrote that Maya and Pearl just leave him at the window for the night, i said "WHAT IF HE FELL OFF!?".
Chapter 3 tommorow.
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HOORAY!!

again...
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I second that yay!
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Btw, I did an alternate ending for chapter 2 but he wrote something else and posted it before i had a chance to show it to him. :<
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I dare j00 to post it. :jazzgant:
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I deleted it. :<
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*drums*
Episode 3!

After they got ready Phoenix, Maya and Pearl went to the lobby to meet with Edgeworth and Frnziska.
In their way to the lobby They met Will heading to their room.
"Oh, hey, Will" said Phoenix.
"Hey, sorry I didn't call you in the morning, but i brought in a flyer instead."
"Yeah, I found it!" Pearl said impulsively.
"Well Will, we are headed to the lobby, for the trip, bye!"
"Bye, have fun!"
After they met Will the three continued to the lobby.
*WHIP*
"So you arrived, Mr. Phoenix Wright."
"Sigh... same old Franziska." Phoenix thought.
"Well, you need a ride, right, Wright?" Edgeworth said.
Phoenix cleared his throat, pointing at the limousine that has "Wright & Co." on it.
Miles was shocked.
"Err, sure, see you at the enterance?" Miles said.
"But Edgeyyyy, i wanna ride a limo!" Franziska yelled at him.
"'Edgey'?" Phoenix asked.
"Anyway, Wright, can we join in?"
"God, i've been waiting years for this day to come" Phoenix thought to himself.
"Yeah, sure." He replied.
"YAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY! Mr. Ed-ji-werth comes with us!" Pearl said.
"Wow, Phoenix Wright, I never thought i would ask to join YOUR limo." Franziska said after they all got in.
"And I never thought YOU would ask me to join my limo." He replied. After that, an awkward silence filled the air.
One mintue in into the ride and Maya said, "Come on! Stop beeing so deppresive everyone, we are going to that park, and we are gonna have FUN!"
"Yeah! Mystic Maya is right!" Pearl shouted right after.
"Well.... yeah i guess she is." Phoenix added.
Miles and Franziska stayed quiet.
Pearl moved to where they sat and whispered to Miles, "Why aren't Mr. Nick and Mystic Maya like you guys?"
Miles couldn't get a word out of his mouth.
"Pearl, what did you say to him?! You shouldn't scare him like this, you know!" Maya shouted after noticing Miles's face.
"Sorry, Mystic Maya."
"Well say that to Edgeworth!" Maya said.
"Mr. Ed-ji-werth? i'm sorry."
"Oh, it's ok, Pearl." Miles said.
"Ladies and gentleman, we've arrived Gatewater land" the driver said.
Everyone got out of the car.
Phoenix went to the trunk and pulled something.
He came to Maya, hiding that thing behind his back.
"Guess what are we gonna do later?" Phoenix said, and pulled the object:
A picnick bag.
"Picnick!" Maya screamed, and hugged Nick, Pearl's eyes were shining.
"Hmph," A voice came out of Franziska's mouth, "picknick is a waste of time. only foolish fools such as santa clause does it."
"Oh, come on Franziska! It could be fun. Right Mr. Miles?" Pearl said.
Miles started to blush, he couldn't refuse a nine year old, right? "Right." He ansewred.
After that, they all walked to the gate, Phoenix showed Will's invatation and they got in free.
"Nick, let's go to that ride!" Maya demanded.
"But May...aghhh!!! Stop pushing me!" Phoenix shouted back.
Phoenix, understandting that there's no way Maya will give up shouted, "Edgeworth, take care of Pearls!"
Nick looked at Maya running towards a giant rollercoaster.
"She couldn't possibily-"
"NICK! let's go on that!" Maya screamed.
Phoenix got on the roller coaster, and it started going up.
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"Back off, Edgey, im a pro with children." Franziska said.
"As you wish." Edgeworth said.
"Hello, Pearly!" Franziska said with a fake smile.
"I despise you" Pearl said, and turned her head.
"She's all yours." Franziska shoved Pearl to Edgeworth.
"Mr. Miles, what can we go on? WITHOUT your special someone?" Pearl said.
"She doesn't seem to like you, huh Franny?" Miles said with a cocky grin.
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As the rollercoaster went up, Phoenix looked around, the roller coaster was huge, it had 8 loops, and then it turns upside-down. he felt sick.
"Come on, Nick! don't be such a coward!" Maya said
"Uhh fine" Phoenix ansewred
"I guess it does looks kind of fun." He thought.
The roller coaster was about to ride down.
"Are you ready?" Maya said, feeling excited.
"Yes."
"You're sure?"
"NOOO-!"
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOSH!
They both holded each other, screaming "WOOO!", the roller coaster fished a loop, and rode into a cave, it was just then Phoenix noticed it was only him and Maya on the ride.
The cave's track was going down in circles, When the coaster rode that track, Phoenix told Maya: "You know, this IS pretty fun!"
"Told ya so!" The track got out the cave, and then did 6 loops in a row.
Suddenly, TACK!
Maya's belt was released, She tried holding it the hardest she could, Phoenix gave her his hand, trying to reach her hand, since his belt was stronger.
He pulled her back in, holding her in his arms, "You should been more careful, you know
"Th-Thanks, Nick." She was breathing heavily.
The ride finally came to stop, Maya then hold Phoenix and whispered, "Thank you so much... I almost fell!"
Phoenix looked down, wordless. "Im sure you would do the same." He said after a few seconds break.
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Franny sucks with kids and we all know it.
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I thought i'd add more comedy to this, i never EVER wrote something serious. my life is a joke. :larry:
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WOOOOOOOOOOOO! PART 4!
"WHAT HAPPEND?! I HEARD SOMEONE SCREAMING!" Miles runned over the two, While Franziska and Pearl running behind them.
Suddenly, Pearl stopped running, and tripped Franziska with her leg. "Oops! sorry!"
"Nick...saved my life..." Maya said.
"...."
"What?"
"...again?"
"...Yes."
Pearl was super excited.
"You know what? lets go and do the picnick, i don't feel safe here anyway." Phoenix interupted.
"He's right, lets find a nice place with grass and sun." Franziska said.
"Didn't you said that only foolish fools such as Santa Clause does it?" Maya asked.
"Umm, i was referring to fat people. not people who have a picknick."
"Hey Wright, here's a place!" Edgeworth shouted.
"Nice find, Edgey" Franziska said.
Edgeworth's face turned red.
Phoenix covered a part of the grass with a blanket.
Everyone sat, and Miles pulled the Picknick bag.
"For Maya, ...A Burger." he said, giving her a burger.
"Thanks!"
"Franziska, ummm... ice cream with whipped cream." giving her a luxirious plate.
"Thank you." Franny said.
"Pearl...cake."
"Thanks, Mr. Ed-ji-werth!"
"Wright... a cookie."
"WHAT THE HELL?!"
Miles gave Nick a cookie shaped like an attorney's badge.
"..." Nick muttered to himself.
Everyone finished eating.
"Maya, can you come with me for a second?" Phoenix asked.
"Oh yeah, sure, Nick." She said to him.
they both went over the game stands.
"Well, looks like its just you and me now, huh, Franny?" Edgeworth said.
"Ice-cream?" She asked him.
"Sure."
Edgeworth took a spoon and had a bite.
"Tasty...did you know you have the most beautiful eyes?"
"Awww, now hurry up with it."
Edgeworth kissed Franziska.
"Way to go Mr. Ed-ji-werth!" Pearl said, and Miles blushed.
"HEY GUYS, LOOK WHAT NICK GOT ME!" Maya screamed as she and Phoenix went back.
Edgeworth, Franziska and Pearl looked at a giant stuffed bear Maya was holding.
"Well, you ARE the future master of kurain, after all, you deserve some gifts..." Phoenix said while blushing.
"Wow, Mr. Nick, That's so sweet of you!" Pearl said.
"Th-thanks, Pearls."
"Hey Nick, can we go on this?" Maya said, pointing at a ride that has chairs going up and down slowly, it looked like a nice, calming ride.
"Umm, sure."
"I wanna come too!" Pearl yelled.
"Alright, come with us" Phoenix said, "Miles, you and Franiska can stay here right?"
"Of course we can, we're not six..." Miles said, annoyed.
Phoenix, Maya and Pearl went to the ride. As it went up, Pearl pushed herself to the side of the sit so Phoenix and Maya will be together.
"Pearls, Please don't tell me that you do what i think you are doing."
Pearl's look were fixed at Phoenix and Maya so she didn't hear his question.
"Ughhh.... never mind."
"Wow, Nick! Look the the horizon! At the view!" Maya yelled when they were near the top.
"Yeah! It really is a great view." He smiled and ansewred back.
"It's so romantic!" Pearl said.
Phoenix started to think about his relationship with Maya, it fel so weird to him somehow, he wasn't sure what it was.
The ride came to and end, Phoenix noticed Maya was sleeping on his shoulder, so as Pearl. He took Maya & Pearl on his hands, and went back to Miles and Franziska, to see them kissing.
"Miles!" Phoenix shouted.
"*cough* Oh, errr.... Wright. Don't you think we can go back to the hotel?" Miles said red like a tomato.
"Yeah, we've been here long enough, let's go find that limo driver, can you hold Pearl?"
"Sure." Miles replied.
They went to the limo, Nick let Maya sleep on the back seat, and Pearl was sleeping on Edgeworth's knees.
they got in to the hotel, Nick said:
"Can you take her up to her room?"
"Yeah, sure." They got up by the elevator.
Miles put Pearl on the small bed.
Phoenix put Maya on the 2 people bed, and went to Pearl. Maya peeped.
He was covering Pearl with some covers. "Awww..." Maya sighed, as the momment she saw Nick turning around she pretend to sleep.
Nick slept next to Maya, she was pretending to turn around and "accidently" put her arms on him.
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Chapter 5!


Franziska put her mouth next to Pearl's ear while she was sleeping.
"You love Franziska....you hate Edgey....-"
"Franziska, i despise you." Pearl said.
"Okay, what do you want from me? so yeah, i've been bad to your foolish fool sister, and whipped all your friends, but i also saved your sister, and the foolish lawyer."
"So? you've done enough to make me despise you."
"You know, i had a dad.. *sniff*... he was my only family besides my sister and her dog... but now... he's no longer *sniff* with me.." Franziska bursted crying.
"Was he... your special someone?"
"WHAT!?"
"how was he killed?"
"Mr. Phoenix Wright-"
"HE KILLED HIM!?"
"...yeah, you could say that."
"...SERVES YOU RIGHT! I BET HE WAS A MEANIE JUST LIKE YOU!"
Franziska left the roomm offended, and returned to Miles.

--Day 3--

"Good morning Nick! Think you can guess where are we going today?" Maya said, cheerful.
"No. But I wanna go to the dining room." Phoenix said back.
Maya's tummy growled. "Yeah, You're right. Pearl! Wake up and get ready to the dining room!"
"Ok Mystic Maya!" Pearl shouted back from her room.
The three got up, prepared themselves and went to the dining room where they met Miles and Franziska.
"Good morning Miles and Franizksa" Phoenix said.
"Good morning, Wright." Miles replied.
"Wow! What a giant buffet! Nick, lets go get ourselves some food!" Maya screamed as soon as she entered the room.
"Ok, ok, hold on. Miles, it's ok that we sit next to you, right?" Phoenix said.
"Me and Franny needs our alone time." Edgeworth said and kissed Franziska.
" *sigh*... Fine."
Phoenix, Maya and Pearl took a sit.
"OK, Pearly, come with me so you wont get lost." Maya said, "What are you gonna get, Nick?"
"Probably just toast and a salad." He ansewred.
"Alright." Maya said, and went with Pearl to get some food. Phoenix organized the forks and knifes so they're shaped like an X meaning the table is taken,
Phoenix went, Maya got back. later then Phoenix returned too with, as he said, two toasts and salad.
Pearl was eating a bowl of cereal.
"So, where are we going today?" Phoenix asked.
"Let's go to the pool!" Maya said.
"Sure' why not?"
"Mystic Maya, what's a pool?" Pearl asked.
"It's like a huge bathtub, so people can swim in it." Maya ansewred.
"But I don't know how to swim, Mr. Nick will you teach me how to?"
"Of course I will Pearls." Phoenix said, smiling.
After they all finished eating, they went back to their room to change for swimsuits, then to the pool.
"Oohhh I get it now! THIS is a pool, right?" Pearl said.
"Yes."Phoenix said, tilting his head, smiling.
"Hey, Mr. Nick, look! That guy in the pool is..."
*whip*
"A fool Pearl. Swimming is a foolish waste of foolish time and only foolish fools do it. Ha...!" Franziska came out of nowhere, followed by Miles.
"God, she reminds me of Godot." Phoenix thought.
"Swimming anyone?" A far away voice said.
"Gant?!" Phoenix yelled.
"Sir, what do you want from me?" The same voice said, "Who's this 'Gant' you're talking about?"
Phoenix blushed, "S-sorry, i thought you are someone else."
Pearl pushed Franziska to the pool.
"What the heck!?" Franziska shouted. "You fool! my precious clothes! the diamonds! WHERE ARE THE DIAMONDS!? MY PRECIOUS BLUE DIAMONDS!"
"You took them off in the room, remember?" Miles said with a grin, he let her his hand so he can pull her back.
"HEY NICK! ONETWOTHREEFOUR SWIMMINGCOMPETITION!" Maya said quickly and jumped off to the water.
"Oh, no you don't!" Phoenix said, jumping after her, and swimming faster then her, in a few seconds, he was swimming next to her.
"Ahh, love!" Pearl sighed.
Phoenix passed Maya, and reached the finish of the pool.
"I WIN!"
"Cheater!" Maya said.
"Hey, you were the one who jumped before telling me we are doing a contest."
"It's not my fault your hearing is bad."
Phoenix laughed, they both went out of the pool towards Pearl.
"Pearl, where are Miles and Franziksa?" Maya asked?
"Franziksa said something like 'stoo-pid gem' and they both left." She ansewred.
"Oh."
"Mr. Nick, whats a gym?"
"It's a place where you work out, Pearl."
"Nick's unfamiliar with the place." Maya laughed.
"Says the girl that just lost against me." Phoenix said with a cocky grin.
Maya pushed Phoenix into the pool, and then she returned talking with Pearl. Phoenix pulled Maya's leg to the pool and caused her to fall in too.
"Hey!" Maya yelled.
"Thought i'd let you off the hook that easily?" Phoenix said and smiled, Maya returned him a smile, "well let's head back to the room so we can dry out."
The three went to their room, they saw no sign of Miles or Franziska.
"I'm first in the shower!" Maya said as soon as she stepped inside the room.
"Second!" Pearl shouted.
"I guess i'm last huh?" Phoenix sighed.
"Mr. Nick, why didn't you teach me how to swim?" Pearl asked.
"Oh, i'm sorry Pearls, I was busy with Maya that I forgot. I'll teach you in the next oppurtinity we have, ok?" He smiled.
"No problem, Mr. Nick!"
While Phoenix and Pearl waited for Maya to come out of the shower... *knock* *knock*
"I'm coming!" Phoenix yelled.
He opened the door... "YOU?!"
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The Master Reviewer, reviewing fics on the CR forums now!

For the first chapter:
Spoiler: Chapter 1 Full Review
The characterization was very nicely done for Phoenix, Maya, and Pearl. A few capitalization errors, however, damage the review.

Also, for the first chapter, not enough information is given concerning the start, how Phoenix got out of bed to go to the door, yet he has a bedroom away from the office (stated in 1-3). I COULD assume that Phoenix got money and thus, was able to buy more "Office Space", and also a bed for one of the areas, upon a request from Pearl, but... this isn't shown here, and it's a lot of assuming.

I am a bit surprised to see the Bellboy deliver a cameo here, considering he took over management of the hotel (as stated at the end of AA), but I guess maybe he'd still want to be a Bellboy.......?

Currently, my ranking is a solid 7/10. I shall update it soon, naturally.

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Chapter 6! :o


Phoenix took a good look at the person standing infront of him.
Her blond hair, her glasses, her deep eyes. Tt was none other then...
"ADRIAN ANDREWS!" Phoenix screamed.
"Umm, how come you know my name?" Adrian asked.
"Don't you remember me? it's me, Phoenix Wright."
"Oh! sorry, you're usually wearing the blue suit."
"Well, thats OK, what're ya doing here anyway?"
"Oh, im living next door, i was baking a cake and i needed some sugar..."
Phoenix took a look at her, she looked different.
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"Oh that's great! we probably have conjoined rooms, So. you wanna come in for some coffee?"
"Sure."
Phoenix let Adrian in.
"Hello, Ms. Un-drools!" Pearl said.
"Haha, hello, Pearl, looking cuter then ever, I see" Adrian said, Pearl blushed. "Th-thank you..."
Phoenix and Adrian sat next to the coffee table.
"Hey, i just noticed, you loosen your hair a bit." Phoenix said.
"Thanks! you like it?" She replied.
"Yeah, its cute." Adrian blushed. "So, where do you work?"
"Still at Lordly Tailor, i wanna show the world how strong I am."
"Hmmmm... I see."
"MS. ANDREWS!" Maya came out of the shower to see her. "What are you doing here?"
Adrian smiled, "Same as you guys, i'm on a vacation."
Maya went to put her cloths on, when she came back she asked, "So, how long are you going to stay?"
"I arrived today, and im staying for six more nights."
"That's great!"
They talked a few more mintues, and then Adrian left. "Pearls it's your turn to go in the shower." Phoenix said.
Pearl got in, leaving Phoenix and Maya alone in the room. "So, Maya, what do you want to do now? we still got some hours till it gets dark."
"Hmmmm... I don't wanna take a shower again or waste a lot of time driving in a car, so lets go to the...
Arcade!" "Bar!" Phoenix and Maya said simultaneously.
"Phoenix! We can't take Pearl to a bar!" Maya yelled at him."
"Oh.... Right. heheh, sorry, listen, i wanna talk with Miles and Franziska, i'll be right back."
"Alright"
Phoenix got out the room, and wandered in the hallway, he looked at an expensive door.
"Room 425.
E+VK forever, foolish fool."
"Pffft, she's so perfectionist." Phoenix thought to himself.
He knocked twice, and Miles opened the door.
Franziska and Edgeworth were arranging the room,
"Ohh, Mr. Phoenix Wright, take this." she said, while looking at her suitcase, arranging it, suddenly she threw a piece of paper over Phoenix.
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"LARRY?!" Phoenix screamed.
"Foolish fool, its a piece of evidence i found on the airplane.."
"You mean the Engarde trial?"
"None other."
Phoenix ran out of the room, quickly slamming the door, and ran over his room, he opened the door violently, picked up Maya and hugged her as hardest he could.
"Nick... what's this all about?"
Phoenix didn't say a word. He showed her the card.
"Wh-where did you find... it?" Maya asked.
"It dose'nt matter..." Phoenix smiled, and hugged her again.
Maya started to blush.
Pearl got dressed and went out of the shower.
"Hehe, I knew it!" Pearl said with a big smile.
"PEARL! ITS NOT WHAT YOU THINK!" Phoenix and Maya screamed together.
"Whatever." She giggled, "i'm going to take my noon nap." Pearl went to her room and fell asleep.
"Well Maya, do you still wanna go to the Arcade?" Phoenix asked.
"Ummm... yeah, sure..." Maya replied, distracted.
Phoenix and Maya went to the Arcade, they didn't talk the whole way over there.
"Awwww I can't belive it! It's closed!" Maya said very disappointed.
"Don't worry Maya," Phoenix smiled, "wanna go eat some dinner? That's something that always make you happy."
"Sure." Maya said with a smile but a sad voice.
The two went to a local restaurant near the hotel. "Ahhhh, Classy, don't you think?" Phoenix said, trying to boost Maya's morale.
Maya smiled. Phoenix ordered a table for them, luckily, a couple just left so they had a free table for them.


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Spoiler: Chapter 2 review, and entire fic-review updated
A few spelling errors, but much less than in the first chapter. The plots here are very nicely done, but still not descriptive.

There is a lot more content here than in the first chapter, it seems. By that, I mean that a lot more things are going on. It already starts up the second day, while introducing a second pairing (which wasn't its INITIAL intention however...), which also brings to light new possibilities, and an increase in the storyline's idea.

My ranking for the chapter is 7.5/10, thus...

My ranking for the whole story up to Chapter 2 is........ 7.25/10.

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He's going to be soooo mad at me for posting it this long. :P he wanted it twice as long but that;s too much... What I did was pretty much correct stuff plot-wise and write few lines. ^^

Spoiler: HUGE 1-4 and T&T spoilers.
The waitress came in.
"May i take your order?"
"Umm, sure, what to do you want to eat, Maya?"
"Umm, just a burger, and a fanta.." Maya said, still with the sad voice.
"I'll have nothing..." Phoenix said.
"Alright." the waitress said, and went back,
"Why are you being so depressive, Maya? So the arcade's close, not a big deal."
"No, Nick, it's not that... well... i've been thinking about all you've done for me..."
"Yes?"
"Well, i've never done anything for you.... each time you saved me, i just sucked up more from your wallet..."
"Don't say that! without you, we would never have gotten Von Karma convicted."
"Yeah, you're probably right.."
Phoenix looked at a room inside the restaurant.
"Poker club... POKER!?"
"Nick? why are you so excited? you suck at poker."
"Says you. I havent lost a game in three years."
"Really? that's awesome! I never knew a guy like you is playing poker."
"Well, there's a lot of stuff you don't know about me, stay here, ill be right back." He said, running into the room.
20 minutes has passed, Maya started to get worried, she got in the room, seeing Phoenix, and a bunch of guys around him.
"Full house! and... you lose." Phoenix said, taking a sip of grape juice,
"Nick! the order's here!"
"Who's that, Wright? your girlfriend?" one of the guys said.
"Umm, she's just a friend." he said leaving the room, and a wallet full of money after him.
"WOW! YOU EARNED IT ALL?!" Maya could'nt belive.
"Of course, Maya, you thought i was lying?"
Maya didn't feel her magatama tingling, so it means he was telling the truth.
They both ate their meals, and headed back to the hotel.
Phoenix opened the door slowely so Pearl wouldn't wake up.
"Well Nick, whaddya wanna do now?"
"Lets just... talk."
"What the... he have never been like this.." Maya thought.
They both lied on the bed.
"So, Nick.."
"Yes, Maya?"
"I've been wondering... you said earlier theres alot of stuff i don't know about you, thinking about it, i barely know ANYTHING about you..."
"Sure, ask a question, whatever you want."
"Well, for starters, you've never had a girlfriend, have you?"
He looked away from maya, "I don't really like to talke about this..."
"Ha! i knew it!"
She looked at Phoenix, he had this sad, puppy eyes.
"C'mon Nick, was there, or was there not?"
"It wouldn't harm telling her, she's my best friend after all, shes got a magatama anyway." Phoenix thought.
"Well, six years ago..."
"Yes?"
"I was accused of murder, and your sister defended me...it was her second case."
"SIS?! Why didn't she tell me? and most of all, why didn't YOU tell me? I thought we were friends, Nick!"
"Well... the case before that case traumotized your sister. badly."
"So wait, why's that have to do with your girlfriend?"
"She was the killer, and tried to pin this on me, she was a devilish woman."
"Nick, your life is full of trouble... what was her name?"
"I don't think you'd like to know..."
"Cmon, Nick! what was her name!?"
"Fine... it was... Dahlia Hawthorne."
"D..DA...DAHLIA HAWTHORNE!?!? THE ONE WHO WANTED TO MURDER ME!?"
"...Yes."
"But how come you didn't suspet her?"
"Because it was Iris... Don't you remember? Dahlia made Iris to trick me and get he necklace back."
Maya noticed a tear was falling out of Nick's eye. she hold him.
"Dahlia... she... betrayed me." Phoenix said, quietly.
"Nick... don't cry.. look, you loved Iris right? She always loved you. It was because of Dahlia that she asked that necklace back."
"You're right... but i don't know anymore, how long is it untill she gets released from jail?"
Maya looked at a calander.
"Hey look, she gets released tomorrow."
Phoenix wiped his face.
"That's good... but you, Maya, you're the only one that i can trust, you always been there for me... When Manfred tased us, you. You were the one that risked her life to take that cruical
piece of evidence."
"Nick... It really was'nt a big deal..."
"Yes it was Maya! without it i could'nt get Edgeworth free and convict Manfred."
"Hello, Mr. Nick. Hello Mystic Maya." Pearl woke up. Phoenix and Maya just froze when they heard her voice.
"'Good Morning' Pearls." Phoenix did a fake smile.
"Oh, H-h-hi Pearl." Maya said after Phoenix.
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