‘Kristoph…’ The young girl said and stood up. She pushed her hair back and grinned evilly. Kristoph just sat down and made himself comfy. She stood up, they were in her apartment. She got him a drink of red wine and got herself some.

‘Would you like some wine, Mr. Gavin?’ She asked as she poured. Kristoph nodded, slowly and said ‘Say that again.’. Dahlia looked at him and said: ‘Would you like some--’ Kristoph shut her up with a kiss and said: ‘Say it the way I like it this time.’ Dahlia smirked and said, sharply ‘Want some wine, Kristoph?’ And laughed, not in her fake giggle but in a cruel, intimidating laugh.

‘Better,’ He said ‘I love your laugh. The voice of angels to me.’

She laughed again and Kristoph kissed her, with getting up and wrapping her in his arms. ‘Don’t overdo it.’ He smiled, cruelly and asked her ‘Where will we go?’ She looked at him and replied ‘At the cinema. Nice films. Horror and Murder.’ Kristoph put on his coat and smiled. ‘Alright then.’ They exited the building to the cinema.

‘Me and Molly? Story of a happy couple and their happy love? Pfft.’ Dahlia read the titles of the movies. Kristoph got excited with the title of one movie. ‘Carry. Fantastic.’ Dahlia jumped up and down like her false, happy self. They walked up to the ticket booth and Dahlia cleared her throat. ‘Sir?’ She grabbed the full attention of the man very quickly.

‘Y-yes, ma’am?’ He asked. Dahlia looked at Kristoph and gave him the ‘Got him!’ face. ‘We received two tickets for a movie.’ She said. The man looked at her and said ‘I wasn’t told about that…’ Dahlia sobbed and said ‘B-but we were told! Were we tricked, Kristoph?’ She asked, when she turned around she whispered to him ‘Play along with it!’ Kristoph looked at the man and said ‘Sir! How could you? There, there, Dahlia, we can just go home.’ He said, astonished by her good acting.

After a few seconds of sobbing and sweet talk, Kristoph and Dahlia walked to their seats. They even got him to give them free food and drinks. Dahlia looked at Kristoph after sipping her coke. ‘Something wrong with it?’ He asked. Dahlia smirked and laughed ‘Not cold enough.’ She said. They both laughed. Even harder when the girl in the film killed all of her classmates. The part got to when she killed her mother and they suddenly realized that they were facing each other. Their faces drew closer and closer until they met, kissing deeply. People were staring at them and one of them shoved Dahlia and she hissed. The guy backed off.

The credits rolled and the happy couple walked out of the cinema. ‘I loved it, thank you, Mr. Gavin.’ Kristoph looked at her, smiling. Dahlia looked back and said ‘Sorry. Liked it, not enough violence, Kristoph.’ Kristoph laughed and started walking. ‘Dahlia?’ Kristoph asked. Dahlia replied ‘Yes, Kristoph?’ She asked. ‘Can we do this again tomorrow,’ He asked ‘I have free time.’. Dahlia looked down. ‘No. I can’t. I’m a witness in court.’ Kristoph said ‘OK then… The day after?’ He asked, eager. Dahlia kissed him and held him by the tie. ‘OK. The day after. I promise.’ She walked away and waved.

-7 Years later-

Dahlia Hawthorne.
1993-2019
Serial killer.
Executed by hanging.

‘Dahlia… You devil. You got yourself into a big mess and now look. I miss you. Tsk. Silly girl. You broke your promise. You said we’d meet again. I will see you one day. I promise.’

The gentleman left a rose by the grave of the murderer. He looked behind his shoulder and said ‘See you soon…’ As he walked away and drove in his car and exiting the graveyard. The silence was broken by one word. No-one heard it but it was still there. A word with no meaning. A word that no-one, even if they did hear it would know what the mystery voice meant…

‘Kristoph…?’

‘Bwahahahaha!!!’ Kristoph laughed as the police dragged him to his cell. Kristoph couldn’t stop. The judge sentenced him to death by lethal injection. He screamed as he was in his chamber. He went absolutely insane. He stopped after 3 days. It was his execution the next day. He sat there, no visitors, reading a book.

A woman. A woman at Kristoph’s age ran through the corridors to his cell. She held flowers, Dahlias. He took them and thanked the visitor. ‘What’s your name?’ He asked. She looked very familiar to him… ‘Iris.’ The woman said ‘My name is Iris.’ Kristoph looked at her. ‘You seem familiar.’ He said ‘Are you allowed to come in?’ Iris replied ‘Yes. For 15 minutes.’ She got the keys and opened the cell, she was holding some sort of documents.

Iris sipped her tea. She put the papers down and said ‘Are you familiar with a Ms. Hawthorne?’ She asked. ‘Yes I am,’ Kristoph said ‘Dahlia Hawthorne. My girlfriend.’ Iris put down her tea. 'We've made a discovery. When Dahlia Hawthorne was excecuted, we hid lab results that proved she was....' Kristoph cut her off. 'Don't tell me. She was pregnant.' Iris nodded quickly. 'Yes.' She replied. She looked at Kristoph and said 'We took some of the... Stuff out of her body. You know. What makes her pregnant and found unknown results for who the father was. Then we tried everyone in the city. It lead us to one person...' She nodded slowly at him. Kristoph looked in horror. 'I...I'm the father...?' He stuttered. Iris nodded 'I was the scientist in that... Procedure... I'm the one who found you,' She said 'She was my sister.' She said. Kristoph stood up and sank his head into his hands, sulking 'I don't believe it... I could have had a child...' He pounded his head against the wall, Iris stood up and tried to calm him down 'Please, Mr. Gavin. Stop!' She tugged him away. 'You'll be with her tomorrow. In that place in the sky...' She said.

Kristoph looked at her and said 'My lady. I'm not going there.' He grabbed the nail polish and sprinkled some in her coffee.

'Here. Have some more coffee.' He said.

A few moments later, Iris was in hospital, in a coma, thought to have been poisoned.

‘C’mon, Nick!!’ Maya yelled, putting on her usual clothes. Phoenix opened his eyes from the other room. He looked around and found himself in his bedroom. He weakly said ‘Wh-what…? It’s like 5:00 AM…’ Maya hopped into his bedroom, putting her necklace on. She spun around and said ‘It’s my birthday! My 20th Birthday!’ She danced around and yelled ‘Come in, Pearly!!’ Pearl Fey entered the room, in her usual clothes too. She smiled and said ‘Look, Mr. Nick! New clothes!’ She waved around, her clothes flapping. Phoenix lifted his head and saw Pearl. He said to her ‘You look the same but… Still it looks nice.’ He got up and asked them to leave the room. He got dressed and picked up the phone.

‘Hey, Edgeworth?’ He said after dialling the phone number.

‘Wright. Are you ready for today?’

‘Of course!’

‘All right. Don’t forget the plan.’ He hung up.

Phoenix had under his shirt a nice black waiter suit. The plan was to make a cake for Maya. It would have the steel samurai on top and would be made with strawberries and cream. He picked up the cake ingredients and went out of the room. Maya jumped up and down. ‘Happy Birthday, Maya!’ Phoenix said and gave her a package in steel samurai wrapping paper. Maya shook it and smiled ‘Don’t know what it is…’ She shook it again and said ‘Thanks, Nick!’ She kissed him on the cheek.

‘We need to take the bus,’ Phoenix said ‘I still don’t have my licence…’ He laughed. The bus arrived and they got on. Phoenix sat at the back of the bus, Maya and Pearl on the next row. Pearl looked through her pockets and pulled out a brown parcel, badly wrapped with a crumpled piece of paper. ‘Mystic Maya… It’s a gift and a card.’ She smiled, sweetly. Maya unfolded the paper to see a stick-drawing of Maya and a magatama, in red pen it said ‘To Mystic Maya from Pearl’. Maya cried with happiness and said ‘Pearl. That’s an absolutely beautiful drawing. She tickled her and Pearl went mad. Phoenix smiled at the cousins and said ‘We’re there!’

ED WORSHIP DINING.

Maya clapped when they got out. She saw the restaurant and squealed. ‘Yay!’ She jumped around and danced with Pearly. Pearl sat down and waited for Maya. Maya just stood there. Phoenix got in and sat down. ‘Hmph!’ Maya exclaimed, Phoenix just looked at her and said ‘Is something wrong?’ She looked at him and said ‘Nick! It’s my birthday! B-I-R-T-H-D-A-Y-!’ He spelled out. Phoenix stared at her ‘… I know?’ Maya rolled her eyes and said ‘A true gentleman would pull out my chair for me!’ She crossed her arms. Phoenix got up and laughed ‘Oh! Hahaha! Sorry!’ He pulled out her chair and bowed. She giggled and sat down. She waved her hands at one waiter. ‘Sir! Sir!’ She yelled. The waiter turned around, he had huge glasses, covering his face and a brown moustache, his face was covered. He had a silk cravat on him and a grey suit. He replied, in an almost fake-sounding American accent. ‘Yes, what would you like?’ Phoenix then stood up and said ‘I might wonder around. It’s a nice place.’ The waiter walked into the kitchen after taking Maya’s order, a special birthday burger and Phoenix slowly followed him. When they got in, The waiter took off the false moustache and the huge glasses.

‘Wright, never make me do that again.’ He said. Phoenix laughed and said ‘You looked so funny in those glasses!’ Miles smirked and asked him ‘Have you got the cake mix? I have the decorations.’ Phoenix opened the bag and revealed the ingredients. Edgeworth bluntly said ‘We better start.’ After that it was just sorting things out. Mix goes left, Flour goes right and the eggs… Where were the eggs? Phoenix searched high and low. ‘Edgeworth? There’s a problem.’ Edgeworth turned around. ‘What is it?’ He asked. ‘I forgot the eggs! I must have left them!’ Edgeworth sighed and said ‘Don’t worry! There must be one somewhere!’ Phoenix searched looked in the kitchen refrigerator and there was a note.

‘Out of eggs. Buy some tomorrow.’

Phoenix banged his head against the fridge and cursed. ‘Wait. There’s another note!’ Edgeworth pointed out.

‘Last eggs given to customer.’

Phoenix dashed outside, making sure the girls didn’t see him. He looked around for the customer. He saw a man. An old man in a kimono. He had a plate of raw eggs on his plates. ‘Who orders raw eggs?’ Phoenix thought to himself. He rushed up to him and realized the man. ‘Victor Kudo?’ He stared at him. He was looking at one of the waitresses and soon snapped out of it. He looked at him with an angry face ‘Leave me alone!’ And threw bird-seeds at him. Phoenix took 2 of the eggs and got back to the kitchen.

Aviv: Hey, Crystal!
Crystal: Aviiiv!!
Aviv: (Woah! Her boobs are jumping like basket balls!)
Crystal: Heehee... Remember that time on the beach, Vivyyy? Eheheh..
Aviv: Crystal! What the fuck have you been drinking!?
Crystal: Not much. Heehee!! You're sooo cute!
Aviv: Huh!?
Aviv: (Okay, something's wierd...)
Crystal: What have you been dooooing?? Eheehee!!
Aviv: Mostly making comics... And you?
Crystal: Thinking about yooou!! Heehee!!
Aviv: (... O-kaaaay?)
Crystal: Aviv?
Aviv: Yeah?
Crystal: Do you like these clothes??

First story: Nobody would ever put "Serial killer, executed by hanging" on someone's tombstone even if it was true, that's just awful. (Besides, Dahlia legally wasn't a serial killer; she was only convicted for Doug's death.) There'd just be a name, date of birth and date of death, and maybe a poetic quote or something.

Second story: ...I'm really confused with this one. First, how was Dahlia pregnant with Kristoph's child when she was on death row for five years? Next, Iris isn't a scientist. Speaking of Iris...was there any point to Kristoph poisoning her other than just to show Kristoph is a prick?

Third: This one doesn't seem bad at all, but there's a few parts that feel really rushed through. I think adding a bit more description and slowing the pace down some would be nice.

All stories: More paragraphs would help. When writing conversations, you should make a seperate paragraph for each character's words and actions. Example:


Makes it much easier to keep track of who's saying and doing what.

And whats wrong with extreme?
heres what we came up with, you carry on from here.
Aviv: Hey, Crystal!
Crystal: Aviiiv!!
Aviv: (Woah! Her boobs are jumping like basket balls!)
Crystal: Heehee... Remember that time on the beach, Vivyyy? Eheheh..
Aviv: Crystal! What the fuck have you been drinking!?
Crystal: Not much. Heehee!! You're sooo cute!
Aviv: Huh!?
Aviv: (Okay, something's wierd...)
Crystal: What have you been dooooing?? Eheehee!!
Aviv: Mostly making comics... And you?
Crystal: Thinking about yooou!! Heehee!!
Aviv: (... O-kaaaay?)
Crystal: Aviv?
Aviv: Yeah?
Crystal: Do you like these clothes??
Aviv: ...Yeah. they suit you.
Crystal: *blush* Do you want to go to my bed and recall what happend at the beach...?
Aviv: ...Sure.
Crystal: Tee Hee, lets go then.
Crystal: Here's ma maison, cherie. Tee-hee!
Aviv: Wait... Crystal... You want to...?
Crystal: *nods* yes... Aviv... Pwease! I want you so much!! *rolls on floor like madwoman*
Aviv: Umm... Okay.
Crystal: Take off your shorts!
Aviv: Wait...

-New scene, Crystal holding Aviv's ****-

Crystal: Aviv!! Come on!
Aviv: Wait, Crystal!! D-d...
Crystal: *squeezes*

OK!! THIS HAS STRONG SEX SCENES! Not for squimish or under 16 year olds!

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Aviv: Hey, Crystal!
Crystal: Aviiiv!!
Aviv: (Woah! Her boobs are jumping like basket balls!)
Crystal: Heehee... Remember that time on the beach, Vivyyy? Eheheh..
Aviv: Crystal! What the fuck have you been drinking!?
Crystal: Not much. Heehee!! You're sooo cute!
Aviv: Huh!?
Aviv: (Okay, something's wierd...)
Crystal: What have you been dooooing?? Eheehee!!
Aviv: Mostly making comics... And you?
Crystal: Thinking about yooou!! Heehee!!
Aviv: (... O-kaaaay?)
Crystal: Aviv?
Aviv: Yeah?
Crystal: Do you like these clothes??
Aviv: ...Yeah. they suit you.
Crystal: *blush* Do you want to go to my bed and recall what happend at the beach...?
Aviv: ...Sure.
Crystal: Tee Hee, lets go then.
Crystal: Here's ma maison, cherie. Tee-hee!
Aviv: Wait... Crystal... You want to...?
Crystal: *nods* yes... Aviv... Pwease! I want you so much!! *rolls on floor like madwoman*
Aviv: Umm... Okay.
Crystal: Take off your shorts!
Aviv: Wait...

-New scene, Crystal holding Aviv's ****-

Crystal: Aviv!! Come on!
Aviv: Wait, Crystal!! D-d...
Crystal: *squeezes*
Aviv: W-woah...
Crystal: Aww... Want me to stooop?
Aviv: N-no... Keep going...
Crystal: *wraps 2 fingers around **** *
Aviv: A-ahh!! W-wait...
Crystal: I've waited forever... *kisses **** *
Aviv: *Kneels* W-wait... *strips*
Crystal: Now... This is better than the beach...
Aviv: A-ahhh...
Crystal: Enough...?
Aviv: I-I think I'm going to... *Comes* . Aaahhh!! Crystal... S-sorry I may have gotten you wet...
Crystal: M-hm...? *continues* I will beat that rod until the tank empties...
Aviv: Crystal... Crystal...
Crystal: Aviv... Fuck me...