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Author: | ProsecutorPressley [ Sun Nov 14, 2010 6:23 pm ] |
Post subject: | Turnabout Brothers - Chapter 1 |
Welcome to my first fanfic: Turnabout Brothers So, this is my first fanfic, which is supposed to become a multiple chapter story. I'm still working on it, so I decided to post the first chapter here. Hopefully I'll be able complete some more (if school would give me the time, at least...) You might have already guessed that the two main characters are Kristoph and Klavier Gavin, so if you haven't played AJ, you should probably wait. It might contain spoilers! Before I start rambling, I'll just post chapter 1 here... (please tell me if there are any spelling/grammar mistakes, English is my second language, so I'm sure you'll find some... tell me what you like and even more important: what you don't like, it means a lot to me. Spoiler: Chapter 1 Spoiler: After you read this... |
Author: | nudalman [ Sun Nov 14, 2010 7:07 pm ] |
Post subject: | Re: Turnabout Brothers - Chapter 1 |
I can't comment on too much, since you only have the first chapter, but I'm really liking what I'm seeing so far. Good job! My only crit would be to have the chapters a little bit longer. Also... Spoiler: AJ spoilers |
Author: | ProsecutorPressley [ Sun Nov 14, 2010 8:38 pm ] |
Post subject: | Re: Turnabout Brothers - Chapter 1 |
nudalman wrote: Also... Spoiler: AJ spoilers Yeah, sorry about that, I should have been more specific. This will become clear in the next chapters, but for now... Spoiler: I did want to make it longer, but the next chapter which I would like to make the other half of this chapter, still needs some editing... I'm hoping I can get it cleared up this week... |
Author: | Mary Faraday [ Sun Nov 21, 2010 2:59 pm ] |
Post subject: | Re: Turnabout Brothers - Chapter 1 |
A-M-A-Z-I-N-G! I can't wait to read more! -- And I don't have critism, well that's only the first chapter. But it looks like really awesome. I wish you good luck and fun to write more chapters (: |
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