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Daddy Day Care (chap 3 update)Topic%20Title
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Title: Daddy Day Care
Author: windrain
genre: comedy
rating: G for General
status: incomplete
summary: Phoenix and Maya were supposed to go on a date. But Phoenix has been waiting for more than 2 hours! Where is Maya..? Phoenix gives up and goes home. Suddenly, he finds a 5 year old little girl that looks exactly like Maya! She then starts calling him "Daddy"! Phoenix doesn't know what to do, this is going to be one heck of a ride!

Spoiler: Chapter 1 - Baby and me
Phoenix was in Tres Bien, waiting for Maya to come.

"9pm... she's 2 hours late." Phoenix mumbles a he looks at his watch.

"Sir, We're about to close, so.." The waitress tells Phoenix.

"Ah, yes, I'm sorry." Phoenix says as he stands up to leave.

"Maya... did you just... turn me down..?" Phoenix asked himself.

Phoenix looked down on the ground and started walking.

It was getting chilly. He put his hands inside his jacket pocket and walked home.

*ring* *ring*

"Ah, my cellphone" Phoenix said as he searched his pockets for his phone.

"Hello..? He said.

"Daddy..? Um... we've got a problem..." a voice said over the phone.

"Trucy...? What happened?" Phoenix asked.

"Um....can you come home? I don't know if you'll believe me if I told you without seeing it." Trucy mumbled.

"Ah, oh, okay. Wait a few minutes, i'm on the way home." Phoenix said.

With that, he jogged home.

~a few minutes later, Wright and Co. Talent agency~

"Trucy...?" Phoenix called as he entered the room.

"Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!" A voice laughed below him.

Phoenix looked down.

"...? Daddy!" the voice screamed in delight.

"Huh...?" Phoenix was astounded.

"Daddy! Daddy!" the voice repeated at Phoenix.

"M...Maya?!" Phoenix stammered.

"Daddy, Maya wants a cookie!" the voice tugged at phoenix's pants.

Phoenix kneeled down and looked at her closer.

"You're...Maya! But...You're 4 years old!" Phoenix stammered.

"Daddy, Maya's 5!!!" the kid that looked like Maya answered.

"So, you're...Maya..?" Phoenix asked.

"Ya!!!! Maya wants cookie!!!" Maya tugged at phoenix's sleeves now.

"Ah, uh...okay...um.." Phoenix picked her up and carried her to the kitchen.

"Ah, daddy...looks like you've found her." Trucy sighed.

"Is she...?" Phoenix asked.

"Maya? yes, i think it is her. I called Kurain village, and they said Maya wasn't there, and looking at her, same clothes, hair, eyes, everything! And she only answers to the name of Maya!" Trucy replied.

"..." Phoenix was in thought as he stared at the 5 year old little girl who was eating a cookie beside him.

"Maya?" Phoenix called.

"Yes, Daddy?" Maya answered, looking up at Phoenix with a cookie in her mouth.

"She's calling you Daddy?!" Trucy laughed.

"She started saying that when I came into the room!" Phoenix protested.

Phoenix kneeled down beside Maya.

"I'm...Your Dad?" He asked her.

"Yes! Phoenix is Maya's Daddy! I love you, Daddy!" Maya cheerfully hugged Phoenix and gave him a peck on the cheek.

Trucy was laughing like crazy.

"Daddy, your girlfriend's now you Baby! and I mean it literally!" Trucy laughed.


Spoiler: Chapter 2 - You want a MOMMY?!
"Daddy!" little Maya called out to Phoenix.

"Um..yes, Maya?" Phoenix stuttered.

"Where's Mommy...?" Maya asked innocently.

"Wh-what?" Phoenix was wide-eyed.

"She's asking for your 'wife', Daddy." Trucy laughed.

"But...but...but.." Phoenix protested.

"Hey Trucy, Mr. Wright, I'm here." a voice called.

"Oh, come in Polly!" Trucy acknowledged.

"Hey everyone how about we- ...WOAH. Is that... a kid?" Apollo saw the little Maya on Phoenix's lap.

"Um, yeah... you see.." Trucy explained.

So she explained everything that happened to far.

"So she's...Maya?" Apollo asked.

"Yup." Trucy answered.

".." Maya stared up at Apollo.

She got off Phoenix's lap and went to stand in font of Apollo.

Apollo knelt down so that they could be on the same level.

"Hi there, Maya. My name's...-" Apollo was cut short

"His name's Polly, Maya." Trucy joked.

"..." Maya stared at Apollo with...awe, for some reason.

"Looks like she likes you, Apollo." Phoenix laughed.

"But hey, no matter what age she is she's MY girlfriend, got that?" Phoenix warned.

"Yes, yes. Um...How are you, Maya..?" Apollo asked.

"...Polly..." Maya started to say.

"Polly...want...

a...

cracker...?" Maya smiled and handed him a cracker.

everyone was silent for a minute.

then Phoenix and Maya started laughing.

"She thinks you're a parrot, Apollo! Polly! hahahahahaha!" Trucy laughed.

"Um, i'm not a parrot, Maya.." Apollo tried to explain.

But Maya was already walking to Phoenix.

"Daddy...I want my MOMMY!" Maya cried.

"H-hey, Maya, don't cry, okay? Um... uh...who..who's your mommy?" Phoenix asked.

Personally, Phoenix didn't want to hear that answer.

"...Mommy's... a prosheekyuthor." Maya sniffled.

"Wh..what?" Phoenix asked.

"I think she said, Pro seeking author?" Trucy suggested.

"What does that supposed to mean?!" Apollo wondered.

*ring* *ring*

"Your phone, daddy." Trucy said.

Phoenix answered the phone.

"Hello?"

"Wright, Franziska just came back from Germany for awhile, and...I'm planning a...get-together..? party for her..." Miles Edgeworth mumbled.

Maya suddenly grabbed the phone and spoke.

"MOMMY!"

"E-excuse me?" Edgeworth was surprised.

Phoenix was shocked, amazed, and disgusted.

Edgeworth waS his..WIFE?!

He quickly grabbed the phone back.

"Edgeworth, um..it's a long story, I'd rather SHOW you who said that." Phoenix panicked.

"If this is your idea of a sick joke, Wright, I'm not laughing." Miles angrily said.

"I'm not joking, i promise. I'll meet you in...?" Phoenix asked.

"Tres Bien. right now." Miles answered.

"Ok. i'll be there. And..i'll bring someone else too, okay?" Phoenix hesitated.

"Maya?" Edgeworth asked.

"Um..yes." Phoenix answered.

~a few minutes later, Tres Bien~

"Ah, Phoenix is here, pal!" Gumshoe shouted.

"Um. hi." Phoenix said.

Maya suddenly released his hand and ran to the person sitting on the left chair.

"MOMMY!" She shouted.

"W-wright... is this..?" Edgeworth asked.

"Maya." Phoenix answered.

So he had to explain all over again.

"Mommy... come live with me and Daddy!" Maya suddenly blurted out, clutching on Edgeworth's neck.

"Um..ah..Maya, I...have work to do, I can't..Uh..I'm not your.." Miles hesitated.

"DON'T!" Gumshoe shouted.

"Why?' Franziska raised her brow.

"She might cry, she's just a kid, pal!" Gumshoe interjected.

"What do you expect me to say?!" Miles answered.

"Daddy has work as a prosheekyutor, right?" Maya smiled.

"A..what?" Gumshoe asked.

"I think she meant 'prosecutor.'" Phoenix said.

"How'd she know that?" Gumshoe asked.

"I don't know.." Phoenix answered.

"YAY! MOMMY'S HERE, MOMMY'S HERE~!" Maya chanted as she ran around.

she suddenly tripped and started crying.

Phoenix quickly stood up from his chair and went to Maya.

He hugged her tight and patted her head.

"There there...it's okay.." Phoenix said.

"I never knew he could seem so much like a ...father." Gumshoe said.

Miles suddenly stood up from his chair and approached Phoenix and Maya.

"Where do you hurt, Maya?" Miles asked.

"...Leg." Maya sniffled.

Edgeworth picked Maya up in his arms and carried her to a chair.

"E-edgeworth.." Phoenix said.

"...This girl..her parents real died , right? I know..how it feels like to have no parents. We might as well... be here for her...until she changes back.." Edgeworth mumbled as he patted ice on Maya's leg.

"But... I obgject to being called 'mommy'. I am not...female." Miles was embarassed.


Spoiler: Chapter 3 - Nanny Skye
[b] the next day, at the Wright and co. talent agency,,,[b/]

“Edgeworth, are you..serious?” Phoenix asked as he cooked breakfast.

“Yay! Eggs!” Trucy cheered as she saw the pan Phoenix was holding over the stove.

“Trucy, help Maya get dressed, will you?” Phoenix asked.

Trucy went to the other room to check on Maya.

“Edgeworth, answer me, will you?” Phoenix repeated.

Miles put down the newspaper he was reading and stared at Phoenix.

“Serious about what, Wright?” Edgeworth replied.

“About..pretending to be Maya’s…um..parents?” Phoenix stuttered.

“Not about being her parents, as in Father and Mother, but FATHERS, as in both of us…then yes.” Edgeworth replied as he crossed his legs.

“I never knew you could be so… so…” Phoenix stopped.

“So..?” Edgeworth continued.

“So… caring? If that’s the right word for it. I mean, I’ve known you ever since, but since your Father died, you’ve…changed.” Phoenix said as he served the eggs.

“That’s why…I know how it feels like to have no parents. Maya… whatever happened to her, she’s a 5 year old now. She’s a child, Wright. Do you seriously want to hurt her? If she says we’re her parents, then we might as well act for now. I mean, we could fix this if we showed her real parents to her, but seeing as she has none, what else are we to do? Do you expect us to just go on right out and say: ‘We’re not your parents, your parents are dead.’ To a 5 year old girl, Wright?” Edgeworth argued.

“Okay okay, I get it, no more speeches.” Phoenix sweat-dropped anime-style.

Edgeworth was satisfied with his part of the argument, so he picked up his fork and dug in to Phoenix’s eggs.

“Daddy! Mommy!” Maya smiled as she came into the kitchen with Trucy.

“Maya, I’ve already told you before, I’m DADDY.” Edgeworth corrected.

“Pffft.” Trucy tried to restrain her laughter.

“But…..Phoenix is daddy..” Maya pouted as she crossed her arms.

“We’re both your Daddy, okay?” Phoenix tried to explain.

“Okay, so Phoenix is Daddy 1, and Miles is Daddy 2!” Maya smiled.

“Hey Wright, why am I 2?!” Edgeworth complained.

“Hey, don’t ask me, she decided it. I guess I’m number 1. Ha! You’re 2nd edgey!” Phoenix pointed at Miles and laughed.

“Maya, why am I number 2?” Edgeworth asked Maya.

“Because Daddy 1 is the number 1 defense lawyer!” Maya announced as she gave a high thumbs-up to Phoenix.

“Atta girl!” Phoenix laughed.

“But I’m the number 1 prosecutor!” Miles retorted.

“Prosheekyutors are boring! Defense lawyers are the best!” Maya smiled.

“Ahhahaah! I think Maya’s trying to tell you that you suck, Edgeworth.” Phoeniox laughed even harder.

“Miles Edgeworth, I never though I’d ever see you like this.” A voice suddenly said from the doorway.

“E-ema!” Trucy said.

“Heya.” Ema Skye waved.

“Just dropped by to see how Maya’s doing. I heard the news from detective Gumshoe.” Ema said as she walked to Maya.

“Hi maya, do you know who I am?” Ema smiled.

“Your nanny Ema!” Maya pointed.

“Nanny…???” Ema asked.

“Yes.” Maya replied.

“Nanny…?” Phoenix tilted his head to the side.

“Nanny…maid nanny, or nanny grandma nanny? Trucy asked.

“Nanny maid nanny, I think.” Edgeworth smirked.

“Hey nanny, get me my shoes!” Maya commanded.

“Hey, I’m not your nanny!” Ema protested.

“Wh-what…?” Maya suddenly got tear eyed.

“AHHHHHHHH!!!” Phoenix and Edgeworth shouted.

“No, no, no, she’s your nanny!” They both stated.

“I’m WHAT?!” Ema shouted,

“Please, just to make her happy. We’ll---we’ll pay you!” Phoenix suggested.

“…How much…?” Ema suddenly piqued interest.

“We’ll talk about that later, but please, just for now…” Phoenix said.

“NANNY! MY SHOEEEEEESSS!” Maya screamed.

“You spoiled brat…” Ema muttered as she stomped to the other room.

I'm thinking of renaming the title of the story.

For people who know the anime DA~ DA~ DA! or UFO baby, the story's kinda like this, but Edgeworth's the mom, so i though of changing the title to DA~ DA~ DA! but then, not many people know of that here, I think? suggestions? :edgey:
Well? comments, suggestions, criticisms! :minuki:
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Re: Daddy Day Care (PhoenixMaya)Topic%20Title
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It's cute, and a pretty good start.

Although, it must be kinda creepy for Phoenix to have Maya calling him Daddy LOL
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I agree. It's a cute yet funny story :edgy:

Such a real good start to it. I wonder how Nick is going to solve this problem out and how to take care of little Maya :maya:.
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thanks for the comments :edgey:
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I wonder what happened to Maya...

My theory would be that she's Maya's kid, but I don't know why her name would be Maya then...
Re: Daddy Day Care (chap 3 update)Topic%20Title

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D'oh! Didn't even notice there was a 3rd chapter until now. Ema needs to chill.
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Not to sound mean, but, I found a lot of problems such as incorrect spelling, capitalization. I can also see where you tried to put bold letters. Really, I don't want to sound mean. I make those mistakes all the time.

I still think this is a good story and concept.

You just need to proofread.

I love it.
Spoiler: WHAT'S THIS?!?
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I think Maya calling Edgeworth 'mommy' was hilarious. One question though: So does Maya retain any memories of being Nick's girlfriend? Just wondering.
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Very nice to read and amusing! Keep up the great work! :3

Aww, I think that Phoenix will look really cute when he is picking up maya after she falls. x3
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