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I've been working up the courage to write about Matt for a long time now, so there is gonna be more of him.
This isn't so much a series of fic as an excuse for me to write all my favorite characters together (heheheh). Here's hoping it works out okay.As for the "sweeties", I guess I didn't really see them so much as motherly as the silly pet names newlyweds use. Sweety, Honey, Baby, Pumpkin... (I don't quite remember if she calls him "anata" in the game...?). But I'm open to suggestions if you can think of something cuter.
As always, thanks for all your comments!
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Croik wrote:
As for the "sweeties", I guess I didn't really see them so much as motherly as the silly pet names newlyweds use. Sweety, Honey, Baby, Pumpkin... (I don't quite remember if she calls him "anata" in the game...?). But I'm open to suggestions if you can think of something cuter.
As always, thanks for all your comments!
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I did like the case in Von Karma's POV. Very impressive.
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Anywho, great chapter (as always) and I'm greatly anticipating the next one (as always). Now that the court case is settled I'm excited for Phoenix and Edgeworth's budding relationship again. :B
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In the meantime, I added some extra NaruMitsu porn to my LJ (written for Nemesis):
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Sustenance 3 is up. It features Matt Engarde being a sociopath!
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Spoilers for JFA~
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Quite good. The little changes make the end flow a LOT better and the rest of it is just stellar (and creepy!) overall. Awesome indeed.
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Evil shouldn't be so fun to write >.>
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Anyway, nice good fic for Matt.
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But I'm glad you guys liked it.BTW, the next chapter of Color is up, too! I didn't mean to post them both today, but it's just when my betas finished, so why not?
http://community.livejournal.com/igiari/85455.html?#cutid1
I'll tell you a secret: this was my favorite chapter to write. I hope you like it, too.
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Croik wrote:
Actually, I don't even know who that is! I am uneducated. But I'm glad you guys liked it.
But I'm glad you guys liked it.I major in french lit and have a semester long course just on this guy... it just made me think about it. Fic is good regardless. Matt is a dick.
And the latest chapter of Color is awesome. Just the right amount of angst and cuddling.
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Sustenance:
First of all, I'm going to start off with something relatively minor. "Shouldn't you be home mowing my lawn or something?" Damn! That line just...knocked me flat. It was like a punch in the gut, in a good way. The whole fight between the two of them was excellently orchestrated--I liked how upset Juan was, but how his first impulse was to blame Matt instead of himself, when he probably shared a good portion of the blame for Celeste's suicide.
Then, moving on to Adrian. Matt can't even remember her name, but knowing that she was close to Celeste, wants to be the one to give her the news out of that twisted impulse to play with people. The idea amuses him. Brr, you just captured that creepy side to him so well. (And the way he laughs when he figures out what she's trying to do, that she's trying to kill herself, AND THEN HE JUST WATCHES) Really complicated interplay here, where she makes him sick, but saving her is the same as letting her die--perhaps even more cruel...
Just excellent job all around. I'm really interested in seeing where you're going with this series of fics.
Color:
Afsdlfjslfjsdlfsdj! (That's good, btw) Note perfect! I was beginning to wonder if you could top the last chapter for me--even though there wasn't any actual P/E interaction--but you just NAILED it. I especially liked the scene with Mia and the juxtaposition of the scene with Miles. For so long, Phoenix has really leaned on Mia as his strength in a lot of respects, especially when it comes to court and the path he takes.
And while what she was saying was true, what I liked was that it was Miles telling the truth that really allowed Phoenix to release his pent up emotions. Because that is what would be important with those two as a couple, he gets something from Miles that he can't get any place else. The Feys, the rest of the cast, they all love him and support him and try to make him feel better. They're his friends, that's natural, that's important. But Miles can let him know he's made a mistake, and that it's not the end of the world. Not try to erase that mistake or tell him he shouldn't feel bad, but allow him to move forward with it as a learning experience.
This chapter was just incredibly polished and rang completely true to the characters. And that last paragraph and line especially were just PERFECT. I was completely floored. I can tell you put a lot of work into this chapter, as you said. It really shines through.
I really will miss this fic when it's over.
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"Shouldn't you be home mowing my lawn or something?" Damn! That line just...knocked me flat. It was like a punch in the gut, in a good way.
I felt guilty writing it, especially since it came to me much too easily. As soon as I thought, "He should fight with Juan," it was followed by, "OH! That's what he'll say. ...Wait, where did that come from?!"
It was Matt, not me~~~
I'm still not entirely sure how the rest of the fic will work, since...it is a rather bizarre collection of characters I'm throwing together. But I am downright determined to force Matt and Yuusaku to interact! Wacky adventures are sure to follow.
...I should feel guilty, too, about throwing Yuusaku to the lions. But it's too much fun.
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Because that is what would be important with those two as a couple, he gets something from Miles that he can't get any place else. ... But Miles can let him know he's made a mistake, and that it's not the end of the world. Not try to erase that mistake or tell him he shouldn't feel bad, but allow him to move forward with it as a learning experience.
That's just what I was hoping to portray. Even though Phoenix lost in JFA, it still doesn't really feel like a loss, since he was more concerned with saving Maya than Matt the entire time anyway. Since he was forced into it, it wasn't *really* Phoenix that was wrong. In Color I really wanted to confront Phoenix with a genuine loss, something a little closer to what Miles had to go through in the first game. That way Miles could pass on the rest of what he learned back then: it's okay to lose sometimes, but more importantly it's okay to be wrong. But you have to accept it before you can leave it behind.
I'm so glad the chapter's been so well received; not that 18 is uneventful, but the end of 17 is really the climax. Miles and Phoenix just compliment each other so well, they're great fun to write for. I love this fandom.
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)Thank you for your kind words (And reading my rambling).
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Croik wrote:
I felt guilty writing it, especially since it came to me much too easily. As soon as I thought, "He should fight with Juan," it was followed by, "OH! That's what he'll say. ...Wait, where did that come from?!"
Heh, maybe I should feel guilty for loving it so much too, but it was just perfect for Matt. That way of allowing some of his real self to push through. Reading that, I really, well, I felt like Juan. I could understand why Juan would get to the point where he would do ANYTHING to beat this asshole. Especially because he sees it and no one else does.
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That's just what I was hoping to portray. Even though Phoenix lost in JFA, it still doesn't really feel like a loss, since he was more concerned with saving Maya than Matt the entire time anyway. Since he was forced into it, it wasn't *really* Phoenix that was wrong. In Color I really wanted to confront Phoenix with a genuine loss, something a little closer to what Miles had to go through in the first game. That way Miles could pass on the rest of what he learned back then: it's okay to lose sometimes, but more importantly it's okay to be wrong. But you have to accept it before you can leave it behind.
And you really, really did achieve that. But, more than that, it's the way you did it. You didn't have to beat us over the head with it. Allowing it to come through Miles words and Phoenix's feelings made it incredibly powerful.
It's funny how the game will sort of lightly touch on these things, but then they back away quickly. So it's nice to have fanfiction to fill in the gaps.
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I think if people were to pick a fanfiction that best represents NaruMitsu, it would be that one, hands down. *nods*
Musouka basically stated my thoughts way better than I could have. XD
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Though I am sorry for your printer paper XD;;
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No problems there! :3
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Croik wrote:
Thank you Morinozuka, that's quite a bit of prasie! I hope the ending lives up. ^^;;
Though I am sorry for your printer paper XD;;
No problems there! :3
Though I am sorry for your printer paper XD;;
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No problems there! :3
Oh Trust me, buying more printer paper was worth it. *laughs*
I'm sure it will, whatever you decide to do in the final chapter. ...Though if you suddenly turned Phoenix straight or something, I wouldn't forgive you. XDD
Man, Nick sure is a trooper... If I were him, I'd be breaking down a little earlier than him. X= He handled it quite how I expected him to. It's not every day I see characters so... IC. *grin* So modest, you are. =P
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I disagree with Miles. I DON'T think Phoenix messed up, at least not as badly as he makes it sound.
Phoenix is a defense lawyer. The LAW entitles anybody--guilty or not--to a proper defense before being convicted. In that regards, Mia was right. It IS their job to trust. They HAVE to beleive that their client is innocent, or else they can't truly give them a proper defense that they are legally entitled to. If I think my client is guilty, then I'm not going to raise an objection I might have, I'm going to let things slide--and that in itself isn't a breach of the law. Yes, sometimes it comes back to bite you in the ass, but saying Phoenix made a mistake in trusting Chassie is like saying that Edgeworth/Friska/Godot make mistakes in trusting the evidence and believing that the accused are guilty when they're proven to be innocent in the end.
It's not a mistake, it's how the system works. A prosecutor that believes the accused is innocent might not do a proper job and maybe a truly guilty person might get acquitted. A defense lawyer that believes his client is guilty might not do a proper job and maybe a truly innocent person will be convicted.
In that regards, I think Mia was a lot more right that Edgeworth.
Still a wonderful fic. <3
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Spoiler:
I mean, I know I put the poor guy through a hell of a lot (*Croik hurts because she loves*) so it's not like everything is entirely his fault. But in the games Phoenix always comes out on top, and I wanted to take him down a notch.
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Croik wrote:
I mean, I know I put the poor guy through a hell of a lot (*Croik hurts because she loves*) so it's not like everything is entirely his fault. But in the games Phoenix always comes out on top, and I wanted to take him down a notch.
And even then, that's not his fault, since he's the player's avatar, so he... kinda has to win.
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There's still the epiloge left, which I'll post tomorrow.
It's kind of weird thinking that it's almost done with.
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Trust me, I couldn't agree more.
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It's over.
It's weird after all this time! I guess all long fics have that feeling.
No more NaruMitsu for a while. Depending on GS4, that is. I still haven't played the damn thing! But in the meantime I still gotta work on Sustenance 4.
Thank you, everyone who's commented on and supported my fics. I really appreciate it
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Seriously, I will say this : Color is the best fic I ever read. Bar none. Bar nothing. Bar whatever you want. It is the best fic I ever read, period.
I know I didn't read crappy fics before, either. If it looked bad, I just didn't read it. To capt my attention, there needed something special, something that grabbed me and told me "READ THIS OR YOUR LIFE IS FORFEIT!"
Color did that, but in a gentle manner, much like a romancized first lovemaking time. I literally felt penetrated by your fic, and thus give verbose praise to you.
I need to rerereread it again in order to shake me off this particular "fanboy" rant and perhaps spot a fault or two in the writing in order for me to stop the infatuation I have with Color.
Otherwise, I'd be comparing the rest of your fics with Color and that, in my opinion, just wouldn't be fair.
So, well, you strung your readers, amongst those I am, along for one goddamned long ride, and I couldn't be happier about it. Three cheers for the end of Color even though I don't want it to end dammit.
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That's a new one for me!Thank you for your compliments. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!
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Hello Corik do you know when the next trial will be?
Do you mean, my next fic? I'm not sure at the moment. I'm too focused on GS4 to worry about anything else just yet..
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