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Great! I just had the perfect idea to why Lana's personality went sour now.
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... *wince*
Will Larry ever escape loserdom? I doubt it...The Larryesque never will, either.
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JasmineJustice wrote:
... *wince*
Will Larry ever escape loserdom? I doubt it...The Larryesque never will, either.


Nah, I don't think so. The next story is so gonna kill Larry.
Not literally, but Edgey just has to get his revenge on the buffoon for the events of 3-5. And before.
Yeah...you heard it, straight from me! The Author!

if I tell you that I hired someone to write it instead of me, would you believe it?
No, I really wrote the story myself, but, just asking.
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What's wrong with taking credit for something that you blackmailed somebody else into writing?
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No.

So review chapter nine!
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Update...my story's been rotting for so long...gah
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You fixed Lana up nicely from this chapter, foreshadowing a love dispute between Lana and Angel over Edgeworth that might have had nasty consequnces.

The investigation stays true to the games in terms of characterization and how it's actually carried out but done professionally enough that it feels real. The plot appears to be thicking nicely.
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This is the best thing I have ever read since Green Eggs & Ham in my entire life!!!

I liked how everyone was in character and how funny it was too.

PS: By the way, how do you use the smiley with :gant: clapping?
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I like this so far. :gant:
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I like it! Man, this makes the catfight between Lana and Angel more interesting. Poor Edgeworth though. I can't wait til the next update.
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Yaragorm wrote:
This is the best thing I have ever read since Green Eggs & Ham in my entire life!!!

I liked how everyone was in character and how funny it was too.

PS: By the way, how do you use the smiley with :gant: clapping?


:gant-clap: :gant-clap: :gant-clap2: :gant-clap2:

Lol, you have to click "view more smilies"

But seriously, giving me Gants is telling me that my story sucks...bad...

And there's a sequel
present-testimony/time-happiness-sequel-indecision-phoenix-iris-t16594.html
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Platinum Skye wrote:
You fixed Lana up nicely from this chapter, foreshadowing a love dispute between Lana and Angel over Edgeworth that might have had nasty consequnces.

The investigation stays true to the games in terms of characterization and how it's actually carried out but done professionally enough that it feels real. The plot appears to be thicking nicely.


You give reviews specifying positive things that I wasn't even aware that I added. That makes me feel very good about myself.
Thanks! :gant:
Now...what's wrong with the chapter?
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Personally I felt nothing was wrong with the chapter.
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Huh...
It might be a week before I can update again, just because of time constraints.
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It's a fun ending, although I felt that Larry was a bit over the top (even for him). I have trouble believing that Larry wouldn't have, by that point, dealt with the fact that Iris didn't love him. I imagine that he'd have thrown his normal temper tantrum and then moved on to the next girl as he always does (after a lot of his "devastating" break ups, he's quite quick to flirt with Maya or Franziska or whatever other girl is in the area despite his apparent "broken heart.". That's just Larry). Just my thoughts though. I liked this. I'll go read your other story now. Nice work. :)
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This is interesting so far. You're building the story up nicely. I look forward to the next part.
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It's a fun ending, although I felt that Larry was a bit over the top (even for him). I have trouble believing that Larry wouldn't have, by that point, dealt with the fact that Iris didn't love him. I imagine that he'd have thrown his normal temper tantrum and then moved on to the next girl as he always does (after a lot of his "devastating" break ups, he's quite quick to flirt with Maya or Franziska or whatever other girl is in the area despite his apparent "broken heart.". That's just Larry).
Just my thoughts though. I liked this. I'll go read your other story now. Nice work. :)


Clearly, this you have not read this fic.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4924538/1/C ... _the_Larry
Oh right, it's not mine. It's just something I like a lot
Thanks for the review!
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Mia_Fey wrote:
This is interesting so far. You're building the story up nicely. I look forward to the next part.


Aw...not a detailed review? :sadshoe:
Pfft, I don't believe there isn't something wrong. Come on, I actually need to improve my writing
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Clearly, this you have not read this fic.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4924538/1/C ... _the_Larry
Oh right, it's not mine. It's just something I like a lot
Thanks for the review!


I have read it before actually. It's not a bad fic, but that doesn't mean that I agree with the author's interpretation of Larry.

And you're welcome. ^_^
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Aw...not a detailed review? :sadshoe:
Pfft, I don't believe there isn't something wrong. Come on, I actually need to improve my writing


Well, Platinum Skye already brought up a number of the things that I would have complained about. There isn't much point in my repeating what's been said already.

But, I suppose that I can expand a bit (I will always take an invitation to talk too much :P).

Although the basics of the fic seem solid enough, I would like to see you work on your details and descriptions a bit. While the characters talk, what is happening? It just helps set the scene a bit better, at least it does for me. I've never been a fan of long strings of dialogue without any descriptions because it makes it harder to picture the scene.

There are some grammar errors, but none so bad that they really interfered with my enjoyment of the story. Still, it would be nice to see those fixed.

I don't have much else to say. I hope that this helps.
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The plot thickens... :eh?:

I thought this one was pretty good too, hope you can update more! :maya:

Although comparing this to your first story is like comparing the First Phoenix Wright to Justice for All...
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Yaragorm wrote:
This is the best thing I have ever read since Green Eggs & Ham in my entire life!!!

I liked how everyone was in character and how funny it was too.

PS: By the way, how do you use the smiley with :gant: clapping?


:gant-clap: :gant-clap: :gant-clap2: :gant-clap2:

Lol, you have to click "view more smilies"

But seriously, giving me Gants is telling me that my story sucks...bad...

And there's a sequel
present-testimony/time-happiness-sequel-indecision-phoenix-iris-t16594.html


:gant-clap: Oh, but it's the only clapping smilie... :sadshoe:

And I think it deserved some applause.

And I haven't read Green Eggs and Ham since I was 5...
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Mia_Fey wrote:
VeryHappyTaffy wrote:
Aw...not a detailed review? :sadshoe:
Pfft, I don't believe there isn't something wrong. Come on, I actually need to improve my writing


Well, Platinum Skye already brought up a number of the things that I would have complained about. There isn't much point in my repeating what's been said already.

But, I suppose that I can expand a bit (I will always take an invitation to talk too much :P).

Although the basics of the fic seem solid enough, I would like to see you work on your details and descriptions a bit. While the characters talk, what is happening? It just helps set the scene a bit better, at least it does for me. I've never been a fan of long strings of dialogue without any descriptions because it makes it harder to picture the scene.

There are some grammar errors, but none so bad that they really interfered with my enjoyment of the story. Still, it would be nice to see those fixed.

I don't have much else to say. I hope that this helps.


It does, it really does.
I always knew that I had to describe the setting, but it just really never occured. And...honestly, I'm terrible at writing setting descriptions.

As for what Platinum Skye said, I attempted to rectify most of my errors from the third by giving explanations in the fourth.
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Mia_Fey wrote:
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Clearly, this you have not read this fic.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4924538/1/C ... _the_Larry
Oh right, it's not mine. It's just something I like a lot
Thanks for the review!


I have read it before actually. It's not a bad fic, but that doesn't mean that I agree with the author's interpretation of Larry.

And you're welcome. ^_^


Oh...OK.
Well, if you notice in my Fic, Iris never really directly rejects him, so he never actually gets the hint that she doesn't reciprocate, that, and the fact that he's dumb as a sack of bricks. (Which is why he couldn't defend himself in case 1-1. I mean, seriously, anyone with an IQ of 70 or above could beat 1-1)

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:gant-clap: Oh, but it's the only clapping smilie... :sadshoe:

And I think it deserved some applause.

And I haven't read Green Eggs and Ham since I was 5...


Honestly, Gant applauds at the absolute most terrible times possible.
Bad sentence grammar.

Well...uh...I think your last statement is quite an exxageration, but nevertheless thanks!
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Wow, I don't even like FeenRIs, but I think this story is awesome. Your court sequences are amazing. I'm dissapointed in myself for not reading this earlier.
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Wow, I don't even like FeenRIs, but I think this story is awesome. Your court sequences are amazing. I'm dissapointed in myself for not reading this earlier.


The court sequences contained a couple of contradictions that I bypassed when I first proofread them and then caught later on. See if you can catch them.
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You're welcome. :edgy:
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But seriously, try your hand at some fanfics.
I mean it. It's not often we get new shippers.

So in order for the movement to stay alive, there must be a constant stream of new material for us to feast our voracious minds on.
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But seriously, try your hand at some fanfics.
I mean it. It's not often we get new shippers.

So in order for the movement to stay alive, there must be a constant stream of new material for us to feast our voracious minds on.


Well I'll see what I can do Although it would probably take months and still be a terrible job... :yuusaku:
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Yaragorm wrote:
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But seriously, try your hand at some fanfics.
I mean it. It's not often we get new shippers.

So in order for the movement to stay alive, there must be a constant stream of new material for us to feast our voracious minds on.


Well I'll see what I can do Although it would probably take months and still be a terrible job... :yuusaku:


Don't be so pessimistic.
In fact, you get automatically boost 400% extra credit from me just cuz I love the pairing so much.
:gant: :gant: :gant: :gant:
Sorry, wrong laugh
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VeryHappyTaffy wrote:
Yaragorm wrote:
VeryHappyTaffy wrote:
But seriously, try your hand at some fanfics.
I mean it. It's not often we get new shippers.

So in order for the movement to stay alive, there must be a constant stream of new material for us to feast our voracious minds on.


Well I'll see what I can do Although it would probably take months and still be a terrible job... :yuusaku:


Don't be so pessimistic.
In fact, you get automatically boost 400% extra credit from me just cuz I love the pairing so much.
:gant: :gant: :gant: :gant:
Sorry, wrong laugh
:will: :will: :will: :will:


Yay? :eh?:
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*Sighs*
OK, I prodded you too far. Sorry.

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Is it a ladder or a stepladder?

I think it's the latter.

I MADE UP THAT JOKE!!! =D

Not sure if I have to say this, but the avatar is not mine, it was made by Croik...


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*Sighs*
OK, I prodded you too far. Sorry.


Nah, it's OK. :maya: I feel like writing one anyway.

Although I hope I won't accidentally take someone else's idea since I'm way too lazy to go look up every previous phoenix/iris fanfic
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Eh, as long as you don't quote word for word....
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Not sure if you knew this already but I wrote one now. :godot:
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I didn't. I'll go read it right now!
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:edgeworth: / :lana: I'm looking forward to if it appears.


Spoiler: GK? I dunno...
:right-there: I finally found someone to pair him up with!! :maya:

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OK, haven't updated in forever, it seems.

Here's a minor update. If you don't like angst, or if you don't like cliffhangers, or if your squeamish, I'd advise you to skip chapter five.

From now on there will be four types of warnings.
ANGST
CLIFFIES
NASTY
FLUFFY

I think you should be able to figure out what each is.
OK, have fun!
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A reference to Shelly De Killer?!? As it so happens I am playing that case again right now... o_0
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Fair chapter, I wish the other side of the cliffhanger is as good or better. In regards to this story being continued under a different author, it's your decision, although I think it depends on the author him/herself.
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