Title: Comedic Turnabout
Author: CarChaseCityMan
Rating: PG-13 (Language, Suggestive themes)
Genre: Comedy
Status: Not Finished, Chapter 1 up.
Pairing: N/A
Summary: A joking look at Phoenix Wright's world.


Well, I hope you all enjoy this, I've never really had experience in writing, but I've decided to not care and go for it anyway.

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Last edited by CarChaseCityMan on Mon Oct 06, 2008 1:09 am, edited 2 times in total.

......Huh.....
That strikes me as... odd.
There's a lesson in this story, you sly devil.
I think we can learn a lot from it.
And it's kind of funny and sad at the same time how close those TV commercials/shows hit close to our reality.
Good job. I actually enjoyed it.
It made me think.

EDIT: AND I see it's not finished, from the status of it.
IN THAT CASE... I can't wait to read the rest of it.

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Thanks for the response. I took some kind of inspiration from the GTA series in how they make fun of society, so every chapter will have its own little roast.

And no, it's not finished. I have no idea how long it will last, really. I'll just wing it for as long as I can. Any critique, just tell me.

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Great you got some inspiration. But that's just the seed, right? Don't try to choke the life off the plant now under your care.

So... if it wants to become something more than just "making fun of society via GTA series-style", let it grow.

Way I see it, each story has it's own little personality. There are things under your control, but if your story wants to go in a certain direction, trying to force it in another way is just going to hurt it.
It's mostly touch and go, in that regards.
Should we disregard any sort of plan or structure then? Not at all. Have a very good idea of what is you want to say. Even if all you're saying is "commercials are ridiculous, in the way they are portrayed and influence our lives".

Yes, I'm just babbling here. But from one writer to another, I wish you the best.
I would say good luck if I meant it... since I don't believe in luck....
*rambles, shot*
ANYWAY I'll be sure to check up on your stuff from time to time, ahah.

Maybe I should write some fanfiction of this prosecutor I"ve got in mind....
but that's for another topic.
Good-bye for now.

*and with the wink of his eye, and the twirl of his cloak, he turned around...
... and walked out the door. Like a normal person.*

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Last edited by DarkCoffeeJazz on Mon Oct 06, 2008 12:38 am, edited 2 times in total.

*Blinks*

Whoa... Massive wall of well-written text. I think I just crapped my pants for a second...

But still, thanks for the advice. These stories... They don't really have a certain "plot", but I don't think they should. It would detract from the whole point of it, and that's just to make people laugh. I don't want the whole thing to jerk into a story-driven, serious thought kind of thing.

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Allow me to split my edited post....
In case you haven't guessed yet, writing is a passion of mine.
But that doesn't make me an expert, keep that in mind. If someone says i'm wrong about something, listen to what they have to say as well. In the end, you have to form your own opinions, right?


Read chapter 2 now. It's interesting. If you stop to think about it, we're bombarded by these commercials every day... via radio, television, even billboards. Though I'm not a fan of the sexual/sexual orientated ads myself. So it does remind me of my distaste for most commercials.
I like it, I guess.
Just remember that the ads aren't everything, I suppose.
I like this, i suppose, because Phoenix Wright is kinda off in his own world that we barely know about, yet assume is much like our own. He doesn't have to deal with much more than the "Steel Samurai" shows, etc.
I like your boldness in trying to combine both this world and the PW world.
I'll have to keep reading to see what direction your stories take.

Personal advice? I find once I get started, the story begins to have a mind of its own. I don't know if that works for you, but it does for me. But here's a few things to consider.

Revision: though it may seem daunting, you're writing this chapter by chapter. i would always search for spelling errors as well as some more grammatical errors. Also, I would re-read your own thing a few times, and then wonder if there's a better way to say this sentence, or a better word for this-and-that.. etc.

Also, second, third, and even fourth opinions can offer new insight into this. Criticism tends to help more than simple praise, at times, even, so even if someone is saying "you suck", take that as a way to go "I wonder how I can make this better... not to impress this guy, but to better the story overall." they may point taht something that needs changing, after all.

But some of this is what i've learned, what I've heard. I'm sure there are better advice-givers out there than I.

So keep it up! Write what you want, and don't be pressured into writing something you don't want.
In the end, you are the one writing the story. And if you're writing for your own personal enjoyment, so much the better!
That's what i do it for, anyway.


Edit: And if you plot is to have no plot and make people laugh, well, then go for it. :D
You are in control, after all. And yes, I am enjoying the funny commercials, too. It reminds me how ridiculous we can be as a society.

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Chapter 3 is up.

Yeah, I've got a plot now.

I even have a message!

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Sorry I haven't responded yet I was going to, then I didn't, then I forgot, and now I'm here.

This... is exactly what the title says. The snippets of satire are very funny (and sadly very true) and the characters, while slightly over-the-top, are exactly how they should act.

I really can't wait to see the trial. Poor Gumshoe...

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