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Title:Trapped
Pairings: MayaxEdgeworth
Rating: PG (Minor swearing)
author: Me of course

Summary: Right before a case with Phoenix, a tremor occurs that causes Edgeworth to be trapped in a elevator with Maya, the most least likely person. Can he keep his sanity while the scenario of his father’s death plays in his head or will he loose his cool and go crazy?

Chapter One

Day 1

Prosecutor Miles Edgeworth entered the large double doors of the court house. People busily were walking back and forth and talking among themselves. Most of them preparing their cases and ready to go into court no doubt. There was the occasional greeting from some of his fellow prosecutors that he passed along with others that weren’t, but knew who he was. There was no doubt that hardly anyone knew who he was. Of course, he would get the stares from other people and they would whisper back and forth to one another.

“That’s prosecutor Miles Edgeworth isn’t it...?”

“No way, it couldn’t be. They let him be a prosecutor again after what happened? ”

“Shh! He might hear you.”


A smirk formed on Edgeworth’s lips at the words. It hardly bothered him at all what others thought or said about him. Most of them were just rumors and the rest...well, the rest was history. His hand gripped the handle of his case, as the papers in the thick folder under his right arm shuffled back and forth. There was quite a lot of paperwork and research to do to put his case together. Of course, he was going up against with none other than his rival Phoenix Wright. Funny, he never could have seen him and Wright being rivals or even butting heads in court for that matter. Wright didn’t seem like the type that could defend anyone or even himself when they were growing up, but he guessed time can even change some people.

He stopped in front of the elevator that was at the end of the hallway where another hallway split into two paths going their opposite directions. His finger pressed the up button next to the elevator as it lit up. after two minutes, a bing sound was made before the elevators door would open. People would empty out of the elevator as they got off. Edgeworth would enter the vacant elevator as he’d hit the six button. Rapid footsteps steps would approach closer down the hallway followed by a loud panicking voice, as the elevator doors began to close.

“H-hey Hold the elevator!”

It wouldn’t take Edgeworth reflex’s to kick in as he pressed the open button as the doors slowly came to a halt and began to open again. A man would nearly stumble into the elevator out of breath as he hunched over trying to catch his breath.

“T-t-thanks...I didn’t...think...I’d make...huff...it....huff...” He said, as he looked up towards Edgeworth.

There was a long pause as the two eyes met each others. Neither would say anything before the out of breath man straightened his posture and finally broke the impregnable silence.

“Edgeworth.”

“Wright.”

Another long pause, at the two looked at each other with a hard stare. Though, this wouldn’t last long before a hand slapped the back of Phoenix’s head as he nearly stumbled against the elevator wall. Maya walked into the elevator as she put a hand on her hip.

“Geeze, Nick couldn’t you have at least wait on me?” She huffed, giving him an annoyed look.

“I...I’m sorry, but did you have to smack me upside my head ?” Phoenix rubbed the back of his head in the spot where she hit him.

“Yes, plus I think you need a hearing aid Nick..” She grinned, “You’re getting to old if you can’t hear that well.”

“Well, your old jokes about me is what’s getting old...” Phoenix would grumble, as the elevator doors slowly closed.

Maya turned her head, as she suddenly noticed Edgeworth’s presence, “Ah, ah! Mr. Edgeworth I didn’t notice you were here too. How are you today?”

“Fine.” He said simply, not looking at her.

It was hardly the time to be exchanging greetings to one another before they were about to go to court and face one another. Phoenix was just as quiet as Edgeworth during the elevator ride. Maya felt a little uncomfortable from the silence, so she reached into her pocket and took out a small pair of headphones Nick had bought her along with a mp3 player she begged him to get for her. Though she didn’t have the faintest idea how to use it until Phoenix set it up for her, plus she didn’t know what it was at first until he explained to her what it was. Yet, another dent made in Phoenix’s wallet. Maya began to hum the Steel Samurai theme song as it played in her ears.

“Wright I hope you’re prepared.” Edgeworth turned his head as he looked at him.

“Prepared?” He rose a brow. “For what?”

Edgeworth would shake his head back and forth as his bangs would brush along his cheek. A small chuckle made as he gave Phoenix a half smile.

“To lose face in the court room of course.” Phoenix would frown as he’d ball up his fist , “Not a chance Edgeworth, I can prove that my client is innocent and that they weren’t even present at the time of the murder.”

“I doubt that very much, but if you want to look like a fool in court, well then be my guest.”

Maya was hardly paying attention to the words being exchange back and forth between the men. She tinkered with her mp3 player a bit, as she was trying to figure out how to cycle through her songs. Her eyes would glance up at the ceiling of the elevator as she would notice the light would flicker back and forth a bit. The light would finally stop on it’s desired numbered floor as the elevator doors opened.

“I’ll see you in court then Edgeworth.” Phoenix added before he’d walk out of the elevator. Maya began to follow Phoenix out of the elevator, but as soon as she put one foot off the elevator the ground would suddenly shake throwing her off balance. Her hands would flail a bit as she tried to keep her footing.

“W-w-what was that?” She stuttered as she looked around. “You felt that too right?”

“I don’t think there was anyone that didn’t feel it.” Phoenix looked around, “I guess it was just a tremor but....whoa! ”

The ground, along with the building, would begin to shake once more, a bit violently. Maya would tumble back in the elevator and into Edgeworth, as they both fell to the floor. The doors to the elevator then slammed shut.

“Maya! Edgeworth!” Phoenix yelled, as he tried to keep his balance as the tremors got more violent. He hit the elevator doors with his fist while pressing the button, that didn’t seem to be working.

“Hey buddy! You can’t stay here there’s a bad earthquake going on. This place might collapse if you don’t evacuate the building immediately!” A security guard yelled to him as he was leading people down the emergency stairs.

“There’s two people stuck in the elevator here! We have to get them out! ” Phoenix cried out, as his fist hit the steel doors once more.

The security guard would run over to him as he grabbed Phoenix’s arm and dragged him off towards the emergency exit. “There’s nothing we can do about them. For right now you have to worry about yourself! ”

“B-but!”

Phoenix would look behind him as he was lead away from the elevator as the doors got smaller and smaller the further away he was from them.

I hope they’ll be all right....Maya...

Edgeworth...


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My...my head...

A painful groan was made under Edgeworth’s breath as he began to open his eyes. His eyes quickly shut from the light on the ceiling that momentarily blinded him. He slowly open his eyes again as he focused his vision. Where was he again? Fingers rubbed his right temple slowly, while his eyes scanned the inclosed elevator.

“That’s right..there was a tremor...an earthquake.” Edgeworth swallowed a bit as the words left his mouth. The thought sent shivers down his spine thinking about it. He’s been trying to get over this little fear of earthquakes, but it wasn’t going to go away just like that. Edgeworth would begin to sit himself up, but something weighed him down and that something was a someone. He looked down and saw Maya on top of him with her head against his chest.

She must have hit her head like me and was knocked out cold. How long have I’ve been out like this?

He put his hands on the young girl’s shoulder and began to gently shake her, “Hey are you all right? Say something if you are.”

A small moan would escape her lips, as her head would shift back and forth as he shook her, “M..mmn, Nick...”

“Hm?” He looked at her as she suddenly spoke.

“I’m too stuffed to have another hamburger....” She mumbled..

“...”

Edgeworth frowned as he sighed under his breath, “She’s just asleep.” His hand would then pat her cheek firmly, “Hey wake up.

“Huh....?”

Maya groggily opened her eyes, as she leaned up off of Edgeworth slowly. One hand rubed a sleepy eye as she looked around the elevator. “Mmn? Where...am I?”

“In the elevator.” Edgeworth stated as he got up off the floor. His hand dusting his suit off as he looked around. “Seems like we were caught in the elevator.”

“W-w-what ?” Maya’s mouth fell opened in shock. She got herself up and looked around. Indeed they were in the elevator and Nick was no where around either, “I can’t believe it. What does that mean?!”

Edgeworth walked over to the button panel as he would press the numbered button. It didn’t light up and the emergency call button wasn’t working either. The panel would spark a little, as Edgeworth quickly drew his hand away. He sighed before he turned his head looking at Maya.

“What it means is that we’re stuck here and I don’t know for how long. I don’t know when someone will find us here...”

Or if they ever find us...

TBC

Like it? Trying to finish up my other stories and what not wanted to put this down before I forgot it.

Eh, my periods and exclanation points disappear when I copy and past my story here...it's weird so if I over looked one please tell me..oh and my spaces triple too it's not my grammar it's some weird glitch...
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I like it so far, I want to see how this can continue :)
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It good from what I'm reading so far. I noticed a few grammar mistakes but they weren't that too breaking. Probably just a few oversights.

Hope you update as frequently as possible :D This is definitely an interesting story.
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I like it and can't wait to read more of it, it has an interesting premise.. great job! :edgy:
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I like the story. It's an interesting concept, and I'd like to see how Maya's over exicted personality mixes with Edgy's emoness. One thing I did notice was a lot of punctuation mistakes. During the scene where Maya and Edgeworth fall into the elevator, I saw a lot of punctuation mistakes, and it broke the suspenseful mood you otherwise masterfully set.
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Chapter Two


This isn't happening...this isn't happening...

"Mr. Edgeworth?"

I...I...I just need to stay calm...

"Helllooo? Mr. Edgeworth?"

This is where all that high priced counseling and sessions I sat through for hours should pay off.

Edgeworth held his chin with his thumb and index finger as he looked down at the floor. He argued with himself silently in his mind, trying to figure out the best course of action, while trying to keep himself calm. Maya would only frown as she watched him pace back and forth in the elevator. They had been trapped for quite awhile, for how long she wasn't sure. Maya huffed a bit, as she didn't enjoy being ignored by her companion for the moment. Her chest would rise and her fists would clench tightly, as she took a deep breath before letting it all out in a loud manner.

MR. EDGEWOOOOOOOOORTHHH!!!!!

Her voice would echo through out the enclosed levator and it's shaft as it carried her voice. Miles Edgeworth nearly stumbled back from the young woman's outburst, as it sent him back into the reality he refers to aos hell right now.

W-What!? He snapped at her.

Maya looked at him as her arms folded across her chest, "Gee, you don't have to yell at me."

His eye would merely twitch in annoyance at her words.

You're the one who yelled at me first if we have to point it out.

"Can you just sit down or something? You're making me uncomfortable walking back and forth like that." She said.

Edgeworth exhaled slightly, "I don't think it could get more uncomfortable than being stuck in a elevator right now."

His back pressed against one of the walls opposite of Maya as his crossed his arms across his chest. He looked at Maya as she sat there on her knees on the floor against the wall. She smiled at him.

"Thank you."

Edgeworth said nothing, as he turned his head to the side. Looking at nothing in particular, as her reassuring smile made him uncomfortable for some reason.

"I don't see how you can be so calm at a time like this." He stated.

"What do you mean?" She asked.

"I mean look around. We're in a elevator. The call button doesn't work and the panel is shot. I don't believe this is a time to really be so calm." Edgeworth looked back at her.

Maya blinked as she tilted her head a bit, "Well, there isn't too much else we can do besides wait for help. Nick knows we're here and will get help. I know. He always comes through."

That's true...as unorganized and bumbling as he can be at times Wright does come through...

"I suppose you're right, but knowing him it's going to take awhile." Edgeworth sighed to himself.

"Well, Nick moves like a old man." She grinned. "Mr. Edgeworth do you know what time it is?"

"Hm?" He pushed his sleeve up off of his wrist slowly to reveal a gold watch that was securely wrapped around his wrist. "It's 3PM. We've been in here for perhaps two hours, since the case was suppose to start at one. Though, we were probably out cold for almost an hour before hand." Miles would shrug his shoulders a bit before pushing his sleeve back down, "The building might be unaccessable to get into due to debris, so it will probably take a team of people to come and save us."

"How long do you think?" Maya asked.

Miles looked up at the ceiling for a moment in thought. The light on the ceiling flickered a bit as it made a slight buzzing sound as it flickered on and off. "I wager five hours if we're lucky. It depends on how it looks outside."

Maya took note on his tone, as he wasn't too happy with his prediction. She had almost forgotten that Edgeworth wasn't fond of earthquakes at all, much less elevators. Though after all that has happened surely he still wasn't scared out of his mind in the situation that they were in. "O..oh, I see."

"Not exactly sure what we can do for five hours, besides sit here and wait." He said.

"Oh! I know!" Maya perked up. "Let's play I spy!"

Edgeworth looked at her in silence across the room. His face would fall a bit, at her words as his shoulders would slump down a bit.

I...is this girl serious?

"I'll go first since I suggested it." She said, before she looked around the elevator. "Let's see I spy something....pink."

"..."

"Okay, now you try and think of what it is." She smiled widely.

She is serious...I don't believe this...

Edgeworth didn't even want to dignify that question with an answer. This game was pretty much pointless and there wasn't quite a lot of things to 'spy' within this room.

"I'm not answering that, also there isn't anything pink in this room." He said.

"Come on! It'll help pass the time!" Maya said, "...and there is too something pink in here."

"No there isn't." He frowned.

"There is too! It's your suit!" Maya pouted.

"It's not pink, it's maroon." Edgeworth pointed out.

"Fine. I spy something maroon then."

"It's my suit. Game over." Edgeworth looked at back at his watch, "That burned five minutes."

"Hey, wait I told you the answer. That doesn't count!" Maya protested.

Miles shrugged his shoulders, "You never stated any rules. You only said I had to answer and I did. So, game over."

Maya stuck out her bottom lip as she gave him a hard stare. "You totally cheated..."

"Call if what you want, but I still won." He rubbed in.

"Ohh, fine then. Do over! I spy something...purple..."

"...."

One hour later...

"Okay, now I spy something...umm...."

"That's enough already."

Miles Edgeworth could only take so much of this little game. He was pretty sure the girl was running out of colors, but she seemed to come up with something, which was pretty obvious since it was just the two of them there and not much of anything else here. He was on the floor with his back against the wall.

"Can we please do something else? Just anything will do."

"Fine spoil sport." Maya stretched her arms above her head. "What did you want to do now?"

"Well, right now I would like to eat something." He mumbled.

Edgeworth now regretted skipping breakfast this morning. He was too busy preparing his case for today he didn't think it would take long. The most he had was a cup of coffee and that only went so far.

She then slipped her light blue back pack off of her shoulders and opened it, as she began to rumage through it. Funny, he didn't notice it earlier. Well, he was too busy wonderingwhen someone would find them and was frustrated by Maya's inane "I spy" game.

"Tada!" Maya cried out, as she brandished a square box in his face quite closely.

The man would blink as he looked at box. The front of it had a picture than no other but the Steel Samurai on the front of it. In big yellow words on the box read, "Steel Samurai Cookies! Chop full of chocolate chip shaped samurai cookies with a mint topping! Nothing but the best source of a energy snack for Steel Samurai fans!" Edgeworth felt his stomach turn a little at the words. It certainly didn't sound appetizing, plus he didn't eat sweets that much. Maya opened the box as she pulled out one of the cookies as she offered it to him.

"No thanks." He said.

"...but weren't you just saying you were hungry?" Maya looked at him confused.

"Yes, but I'd rather eat my own shoe than put that in my mouth." He said flat out.

Maya wagged her finger, "Okay, but don't complain later about wanting one."

"I wouldn't worry about that..." He looked at her, "Is that the only thing you have?"

"Yep, wish I had saved some of those Samurai burgers Nick bought me earlier, but I ate them all." Maya sighed to herself a bit thinking of the delicious savory burger she had the pleasure of devouring.

Edgeworth grimanced, "Ugh, that doesn't sound any more appetizing..."

Maya popped the cookie into her mouth as she chewed it. He watched as she made satisfied squeals as she at the cookies like it was the best thing she has ever eaten in her life. Miles sighed to himself as he found himself looking back up at the ceiling again. Never would he thought he'd be in a situation like this ever again. Was this some punishment for him or maybe a test from a higher power? Well, whatever it was he was going to accept the consequences that came with it, if any.

I'm not that scared little boy from back then anymore...I can't live like this anymore.

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"Wahhhh! M-m-mystic Maya!!!"

The young girl's cries filled the police station. Officers would wince at the girl's loud cries, as Phoenix would try his best to calm her down. Why did he have to tell Pearl the truth? He should have just lied and told her that her cousin was out shopping or something, but nooo...he had to tell her she was stuck in a elevator. Plus, he had to explain to her what exactly an elevator was.

"Pearls calm down! It'll be okay." He tried to consol her. "I'm sure Maya is...."

"Wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!! Mystic Maya!!!!" The girl rubbed her hands against her eyes as she cried harder at the sound of her relatives name.

Now I've done it....

"Hey, pal! What's the's big idea of making little girl's cry?" Detective Gumshoe snapped at him. "Don't you have any heart?"

Why am I always the bad guy...? Phoenix grimanced.

Detective Gumshoe kneeled down to Pearl, "Hey, hey, calm down. Don't worry we'll get your cousin and Mr. Edgeworth out of there. You have my honor as a detective!"

The girl sniffled a bit, as she rubbed one hand underneath her eye slowly, "R-really, Mr. Scruffy detective?"

"Really! It's my word and no word is better than a detectives." He gave her a reassuring big grin that she returned with her own smile.

"So, Detective when can we send a team over to get them out?" Phoenix asked.

Detective Gumshoe put a hand behind his head and rubbed the back of his neck, "Well, um that's the thing pal. I don't know. Well, you can see it's pretty crazy here with the earthquake. We have our whole staff running around the city making sure people are all right and digging people out from debris that fell on them. The court house doesn't look like it's in good condition either for them to go into. We'll need some heavy equipment. Honestly, we probably won't be able to get to them til tomorrow or the middle of the night if we're lucky."

"T-t-tomorrow!? We can't leave them in there that long! Especially without any kind of food!" Phoenix held his head shaking it back and forth. "Edgeworth and Maya..."

"Mystic Ma-ma-yaaaaaaahhhhhhh!!!"

Pearl busted out crying at the mention of her name once more, as her head lowered. Well, around this time Phoenix felt like crying himself and screaming too. He could only pray that they were all right and they could hold on for awhile.

"Look pal, there isn't much we can do for right now. Why don't you take the half-pint home and I'll call you when we're able to do something, okay?" Gumshoe slapped Phoenix on the shoulder and looked at him.

"Y-yeah, I guess you're right. Thank you Detective. Come on pearl. Let's go to the office and make sure the building is still intact." He said, leading the tearful girl towards the doors.

There really wasn't anything Phoenix could do for right now. He would just have to trust Detective Gumshoe and hope for the best. He was worried, but he didn't want Pearl to see that. If he started looking weak in front of her then she would surely be more upset than she already was.

I guess I should be thankful neither one of them is alone by themself. Phoenix thought to himself.

Two hours later...

"Okay, I can't stand it anymore. Give me one." Edgeworth broke the silence.

"Mmf?" Maya looked up at him with a mouth full of cookies.

They haven't been talking for the past two hours and it was pretty silent, with the exception of Maya's constant cookie crunching and chewing. His stomach had been barking at him the whole time and desperately telling him that he needed something...no, anything in his stomach. Finally hunger had won the battle over his stubborness to eat something sugary and full of, god knows how many, calories in each serving. Maya raised a brow, before she swallowed the cookies.

"I thought you said you'd rather eat your own shoe before eating one of these." Maya would repeat his earlier statement with a cat like grin.

"Yes, but unlike those cookies my shoes are rather expensive. So, if you don't mind please hand me one." He asked holding his hand out.

"Fine fine." She said, before she turned the box upside down and shook it.

Finally, one cookie along with a few crumbs fell out into her hand. Edgeworth started at the lonesome pathetic cookie in her hand before slowly looking up at her.

His mouth opened as he managed to find the words, "Y...you ate the whole box..."

Maya laughed nervously as she closed her eyes, "Um, well....yeah, I guess I kinda did...."

Edgeworth sighed under his breath, "Well, it's better than nothing I suppose. Give it here."

"What...? You still want it? I mean, you don't like sweets anyway. So...I should eat it then." Maya held the cookie defensively.

"I'm hungry here and soon to starve if I don't eat something. I know you can't still be hungry after eating cookies and just burgers before coming here in the first place." He said.

"I'm a growing girl. I need my fiber and sugars." Maya stated, "Besides...it's the last cookie..." She whined.

Edgeworth felt his mouth drop open at her words.

T...this girl's stomach is like a endless void...a black hole even....where is it all going...?

"Will you quit being a little pig and just give it here." He said sharply.

Maya huffed, as she looked at him. No doubt offended by his little 'pig' comment.

"How rude. Well, let's see if you still want it then." She said boldly, as she parted her lips slowly and put the cookie up to them in a taunt.

"You wouldn't..." Edgeworth stared at her.

The girl would give a smile as she edged it closer to her lips as she breathed on it.

His eyes narrowed, "I dare you to."

Her lips would then pressed down on the cookie as she held it between her lips. She grinned at the man who stared daggers at her. Her fingers wiggling a bit, as she made a "nyah nyah nah" motion with them in a taunt towards him.

"Can't have it now, can you?" She murmured with the cookie between her lips.

Edgeworth found her little childish antics annoying, though if she wants to play games he could too. A sly smirk would play on his lips as he looked at her. Maya looked at him in confusion not really seeing what was so amusing to him.

Edgeworth smiled at her, "Who said I didn't want it....?"

His hand would reach out to her slowly, as his fingers cupped her chin. Her head would lean up slightly, as he lifted her chin up so she would be facing him. Edgeworth would slowly lean forward towards her, as he fingers caressed her soft chin. Maya's eyes grew large as the man had stopped so close to her face their noses almost touched. Much to her surprise his lips parted and would grab a hold of the cookie between her lips. He pulled back slowly, as the cookie broke in two pieces. Edgeworth would lean himself back against his original position against the wall and let his fingers slide away from the girl's chin. He chewed the cookie slowly before he swallowed it.

"Mm....as I thought too sweet." He said nonchalantly.

Maya was at a loss for words, not to mention a cookie. The young woman was left with a small piece of the cookie between her lips along with a red face. This would probably keep her quite for a couple of hours or if he was lucky the rest of the time that they were in here or maybe she'll behave a little better for now.

TBC

Enjoyed it? It's almost 2:30 in the morning and I wanted to put this up while it was still fresh. Hopefully the next chapter will be a bit longer.
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I can't wait for more~ MayaEdgey is one of my fav pairings and this fic is great! <3 Keep up the good work.
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I can't wait for more~ MayaEdgey is one of my fav pairings and this fic is great! <3 Keep up the good work.


Glad you like it. Trying to catch up on my other fanfics. Just wanted to update this one. Heh.
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I like it so far, I want to see how this can continue :)


Glad you like it. Chapter Two is up now, so enjoy. =x
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It good from what I'm reading so far. I noticed a few grammar mistakes but they weren't that too breaking. Probably just a few oversights.

Hope you update as frequently as possible :D This is definitely an interesting story.



Much thanks. I fixed a few errors, from what I could see, but feel free to tell me if there's anymore mistakes so I can correct them. <3
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Good job. I liked how you were able to mix up Maya and Edgeworth, and it worked out really well. One question. Would it really take Maya 2 hours to eat a box of cookies?
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Good job. I liked how you were able to mix up Maya and Edgeworth, and it worked out really well. One question. Would it really take Maya 2 hours to eat a box of cookies?


True. Knowing Maya stomach, but like any Steel Samurai fan you must savor the delicious taste of thei rmerchandise. Nyahh.
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-squeals- My OTP. =D Please update more, I love the story.
It just personally annoys me that you keep... switching tences? (Is that rhe phrase?) Like it goes from 3rd person (He sat up and looked around) to... I dunno. 'He would.' (He would sit up and look around) I don't mind it too much and I love the story, just something you should keep in mind. ^^;
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I don't want to rush you but I honestly can't wait to read more. *bounces around in anticipation*
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Sabra wrote:
I don't want to rush you but I honestly can't wait to read more. *bounces around in anticipation*


me too XD
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You only get what you give.

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n0wM3 wrote:
Sabra wrote:
I don't want to rush you but I honestly can't wait to read more. *bounces around in anticipation*


me too XD


Me three. =3 -rolls around- MayaEdgey is win.
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Tee Hee Hee...Boom!

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this is good stuff...
more please!!! :accordion-head:
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