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I'll work on the rest very soon. Comments are welcome as always.
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I like this idea!Only thing is that the chapter is too short... so I look forward to longer chapters.
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So I don't have much time to edit it. But thanks for supporting it. 
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I hope you'll put it up soon :]
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I'll post the next few parts here if you need to see what happened next. 
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I'll post the next few parts here if you need to see what happened next. Of course I need to see what happens!
Maggey is a really nice character... probably one of my favourites.
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Chapter 1:Almost Ready
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Chapter 2: In the works
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XD Maggey is very experienced in murder cases... this is her 3rd trial, right?
Chapter is nice... just short. But you update quickly
So I guess it doesn't matter much.I wonder if the victim or murderer is someone we know...
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Sorry, if it's short or something. 
It's supposed to be intros. When it goes to the investigations. It will be quite longer because of the "bumps" that Phoenix will encounter throughout the entire case. And I update a bit quickly so I can draft my next few concepts for the future chapters. Oh and yes, this is her 3rd trial. I'm making a case representation of that in ace attorney online.
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And I can't wait for the surprise!I'm guessing there will be lots of surprises Phoenix faces? Sounds cool...
What's a case representation, and what's Ace Attorney Online?
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Yes, there will be a lot to expect from the next few chapters 
A case representation is where you make the fic into a real case. Ace attorney online is a case maker that has investigations, trials, psyche-locks to make your own case. Head to aceattorneyonline.sparklin.org if you want to know more.
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I'll go to that website and find out more... it sounds hard and confusing.Okay... May 22 is Saturday, right? I'll be on then!
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Tell me what ya think. If this is go, then I'll include it. If not, updating and revising might be needed.
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Now that's unpredictable... or maybe it's just a red herring. 
Maya getting kidnapped again? A De Killer? She has really bad luck...
and poor Pearly is dragged into this mess.However, I still like it.
I'm sure Nick will find a way to save the day... and Maya and Pearl.It's definitely go!
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This should help in my latter chapter creation 
Oh and Godot's position in the case is a surprise.
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I guess he's an accomplice... but I though he was in jail.
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Almost done with chapter 3.
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But other than that, it's good!
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The situation will be clearer once the body and evidences are found. For personalities, I'm still trying to fix that, though. Oh, and if you have the time, check my 1st fanfic here: http://forums.court-records.net/present-testimony/21st-century-turnabout-t19062.html I need some hype here.
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Chapter 4: Almost Ready
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I like the Chapter 4 title.I still think de Killer is the kidnapper...
Good luck with developing the plot and personalities
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I wish he re-appeared in AAI, or would re-appear in AJ2, though...
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But I don't get why Adrian and Lotta are abducted... but it'll all be revealed soon, right?
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And Dahlia is back!?
She makes everything crazy.
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Don't take it too hard. In this style of fanfiction, it is normal that there is no description, and only dialog, so I understand they to be short... and for some characters, you've done a decent characterization. But some aren't cutting it. It might be just my braging self, but there are parts where Phoenix is accepting things too fast as they come, and Shelly... stuttered? That doesn't sound right. Ok, that IS just my braging self. I like the way you made Jake and Godot, though, I guess it has potential. Good luck!
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When noone can help Phoenix is there!
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Gant...YOU PERVERT!! Man...who didn't he kidnap???
, and only she...Godot is...epic
...but I was suprised!!
Thanks to Panda Prinzessin for the signature and avatar!
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So they will help Phoenix rescue them. Yeah, surprising he is working with the kidnappers.
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