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Okay here's how it starts. In the city of Schenectady there have been a string of serial murders and the police has been working day and night to get to the bottom of this. At one point a wo/man(can't decide on gender) is accused of being the serial killer and in an attempt to save themselves they call up an old friend who moved to become a detective in another city(We'll call him 'Javado'). Javado returns to help his old friend and wants to find the real killer knowing that his friend was not the one. The police force is reluctant at first until the chief realizes who Javado is. Javado's grandfather was also a detective who had worked with the chief on a case many years ago and he owes Javado's Grandfather a huge favor for what he did for him. (Explained later in the story). And so the chief decides to give Javado (x) amount of time to find the true killer or else his friend will be brought to court (and most likely convicted.) and so he the story progresses as he unwraps the mystery of this murderer to save his friend.

Rough Ending Spoilers below if you care.









As for the ending. I plan on it all being set up by the Chief of Police. On the case years ago which him and the Javado's Grandfather worked on, they were following a similar Serial Killer and Javado's grandfather caught him, but died in the process. Turns out that the Chief was actually tied with the Serial killer, but did nothing to stop the detective believing that the killer wouldn't be caught. Years later he's followed in his(the first killer's) footsteps with the creation of a new serial killer to not only continue the wishes of the last but to also get revenge on the man who framed the original serial killer by taking down his grandson(Still figuring out how that itself would work). This is why he framed the Main Character's friend so that the MC would come back to the city.


Questions, comments, concerns, suggestions? All is appreciated.

here are my 2 cents, A story like you described usually have the father killed, not grandfather, and main character is looking for the killer and believes that they where set up.

Now to try, in my opinion, you could make it so that javado does return to help his friend because those murders that are being described sound familiar to when his grandfather died/go killed and sees this as a chance to investigate as to why he died. As he unravels the mystery of the current killings he finds the suttle clues about his grandfather and the chief, say for example, one killing takes place where the grandpa and chief investigated before and finds that the person killed is holding an article about the murders from years ago.

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Wow...I actually like that a lot. It makes me think that maybe I should work the story around that the chief was using the killer(original) for his own purposes and Javado's father was getting to close so he had to have him killed, but there is still evidence tracing the original to the chief which is why he wants Javado to investigate and find this evidence eventually killing him to shut this away forever.


...or maybe I'm just rambling -_-;;

You could keep it as his grandfather. Javado could have been 6 and was living with his grandfather of 58 while his father was out of town on business or dead. That way you stick with the original character roles, iow, the grandfather

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Ah that may work thank you ^^.

Now I just have to figure how to make this whole investigation work.

I am out of Ideas for that now ^^;; But Good luck with that *nods* Investigations shouldn't be THAT hard to do, I mean, just Imagine the crime scene, how it would look like, then basically do what you think should be examined first. then work around that to find where the killer was standing, the distance, ect. ^^;;

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Ah okay, thank you so much for your help ^^

no problem, cant wait to read it

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