The links are displayed in chronological order. Since the Capcom boards are out of commission, the policy is that you may request a "mature" fanfic via e-mail at bowiefan@gmail.com if you are underage or don't wish to join DeviantARt. The only reason I say this, is that as stated in the fanfics they are only PG rated. Since the only hard copies I have of the two fanfics have errors, I will note the corrections that would be there were it to be viewed online. Warning: The following fanfic contains extremely tame Yuri (a girl romantically involved with a girl) (anyone could read any part) and "adult humor" and mature themes, but I restate they are not bad enough to be considered not able to be viewed by minors. Anyways, here are the links.

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... e-70766989

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... o-70767385

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... e-70768552

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... r-70769207

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... e-70769385

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... e-71241696

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... o-71241924

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... 2-73621998

(mature, available upon request if needed)

http://ziggy47.deviantart.com/art/PW-Fa ... d-73623052

(mature, available upon request if needed)

Tell me what you think! I have ideas for a continuation and reasons why Godot and Mia aren't in the narrative version of the fanfic, and if enough interest is shown I might continue. Anyways, enjoy! :)

Also, I'd like to request that this be put in the fanfics section of this site. The "mature" fics can be re-rated if you want, cause they're not really all that bad content wise.

PhoenixWrightFangirl a. k. a. Leah

Last edited by PhoenixWrightFangirl on Fri Mar 07, 2008 4:03 am, edited 2 times in total.

Can I get some critiques on these? I was wondering, if somebody could actually read them and give helpful criticism. Nobody on DeviantARt will tell me any criticisms or even tell me if they like it. The only people who commented, were extremely unhelpful. Once I used HTML to fix it, there were no further comments to give me any advice or anything. Any critique would be helpful. Please don't come to it to leave flames, and if you like it but don't want to critique it I like knowing that instead of being in the dark. I'll help anyone with their writing if they want it in return. I am always willing to help out fellow fanfic writers. I'm very good with writing. It is an odd pairing, and the fanfic is truly intended to be humorous and interesting. Thanks!

PhoenixWrightFangirl a. k. a. Leah

Hey, this is the same thing thats was on the Capcom Phoenix Wright site!!!

Anywho Ill try and start reading them all, since there seems to be a LOT of them.

Ill critique it after im done, though itll take a while...

EDIT: Okies, read the first three (stopped at the fourth since i like Franziska...)Now heres some criticism:

Watch the run on sentences, wich were in the dialouge alot
Try and keep the charcters more in, well, character! Maya was good, but Edgeworth was not too Edgeworth-ish.
Also, It seems like some characters use bigger words than they would in real life.
A lot of times the characters would kind of point out the obvious. Dialouge was kinda overused.
And finally, whatchu gots against my hommie Franny?! I like Franziska...

Good Stuff:
It was pretty funny at a lot of parts, especially the begining!

And its cute...

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Last edited by acewriter on Fri Mar 07, 2008 3:35 am, edited 2 times in total.

That's fine by me. I just can't stand it that the only people who left comments on it on DeviantARt weren't even trying to be helpful. The reason there's a link to the DeviantARt account on there is because there's a couple of not so small errors on the ones on the Phoenix Wright Message boards. When I have a lot of time to spare, I'm going to download them off of DA and save them with the edits. Dratted Windows 98 PC made it impossible for me to tell if I made an error. Besides that, I kept having trouble formatting them with HTML, but now they all look pretty good. :)

Yeah, I read first 3! (see edited post)

BTW: you may wanna change the topic title from Phoenix Wright fanfic. to something else to attract more readers.

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Yeah, I changed the title of the thread now. Miles Edgeworth is mainly just the personality he was, after Trials And Tribulations ended. He plays a much darker role in the sequel of the fanfic for some parts, which had come before the alternate ending. Both endings (before the extension) show him playing a usual dark role, and I think after the cameo in the first part he appears more in character. If the other characters are stating the obvious, they most likely picked it up from hanging around the main character as their co-worker. This could also be the reason why people are using "big vocabulary words." She could have taught them to them, but whether or not the characters are actually going to remember them and their meaning to use them a second time is the real question. I'm not entirely sure they knew what they meant, or were just re-iterating words they learned from Leah. They could have known them, but I highly doubt it. Also it only occurs for the first part of the fanfic. In the rest of the fanfic, there are no unusually big words used by canon characters. The final part of the fanfic (Which requires being patient enough to read through all of the ones at the current time) explains the main character's past and what she's up to now. A significant amount of time has passed since the ending of the first fanfic part before the sequel, (the last part is based on the alternate ending and an idea I'd had previously) but that doesn't change the personalities of the characters.

I'm glad you like it. I think the reason the sentences are that way, is because of the way DeviantARt formats for italics and things like that. There are some commas and semicolons, but the text is so dark it's hard to see them. Anyways, it's nice to have some critique. :) When writing fanfics the canons tend to pick up stuff from the original characters, if there are any. I guess it just happens because it's the style I write in. I think I also wrote those in Windows98 wordpad, but they seem to look okay, I think I just write long sentences that tend to look like they run on. Anyways, I'm happy that people are reading it.

What happens to Franziska isn't too bad. I had to keep it non-violent as the fanfic is rated PG. It makes for an interesting twist on things, I think. I just didn't like her whipping everyone. But it's not like I had someone brutally assault Franziska, it's tame and was meant to be a tame way of what would happen in the instance that occurs in part four.

PhoenixWrightFangirl a. k. a. Leah

Read the first two just now. I love them so far! Must keep reading later...

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