I actually considered calling this thread 'Mr.Trite: Author or AUTHOR, btw.

Haha, yes, I also write fanfiction outside of Gavins on a Hot Tin roof. I've been writing for a while now, and my fanfiction seems to have suddenly taken a turn into Phoenix Wright Land, seeing as I haven't written a fanfiction about anything other than such for quite some time. So, I decided to start posting it. Oh, and Soramimi_cake told me to or else. D:

Listed From Newest to Oldest:
Tea Bags - Fired. It was a word that the bellboy thought he'd never hear.
Statues: Complete
Chapters: Two
Characters (Major): The Bellboy, Miles Edgeworth
Characters (Mentioned): Damon Gant, Angel Starr, Manfred vonKarma.
Gene(s): Comedy AND Angst. It sounds like a horrible combination, but I say give it a try- It's worth it, I swear! xD
Pairings: N/A, but if you squint you can find Bell/Edgeworth

My Medicine All he ever wanted was his Kitten
Statues: Incomplete
Chapters: Six+
Characters (major): Godot, Mia Fey, Diego Armando.
Characters: (mentioned) N/A so far
Characters (OC): Dr. Kyung Shin
Gene(s): Romance, Angst
Pairings: Miego

The Plant Who knew such a little gift could go such a long way. (A gift for Soramimi_cake.)
Statues: Complete
Chapters: One
Characters (major): Mia Fey, Diego Armando
Characters (Mentioned): Phoenix Wright
Characters (OC): N/A
Genes(s): Humor
Pairings: Miego, I guess?


lacey Dresses and the very Odd Defense Attorney When a young woman gets herself into legal issues, she turns to Kristoph Gavin to get her out of them. However, she's in for quite the ride
when she instead meets somebody far more different then she expected...( An early birthday present for FdrlPrsctrTails)
Statues: Complete
Chapters: One
Characters (Major): Klavier gavin, Kristoph Gavin
Characters (Mentioned): N/A
Characters (OCs): The client, I guess?
Gene(s): Comedy
Pairings: N/A, but of course there's a flirty Klavier

Enjoy, and remember to keep checking for updates!

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Last edited by Mr.Trite on Sun Mar 23, 2008 5:46 pm, edited 4 times in total.

huh

^ Err, what's wrong? :/

Anyway, updated. :)

lacey Dresses and the very Odd Defense Attorney When a young woman gets herself into legal issues, she turns to Kristoph Gavin to get her out of them. However, she's in for quite the ride
when she instead meets somebody far more different then she expected...( An early birthday present for FdrlPrsctrTails)
Statues: Complete
Chapters: One
Characters (Major): Klavier gavin, Kristoph Gavin
Characters (Mentioned): N/A
Characters (OCs): The client, I guess?
Gene(s): Comedy
Pairings: N/A, but of course there's a flirty Klavier

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oh ok kool

Tee hee. You have some very interesting ideas.

The only thing that you might want to watch out for is some grammar/reading. I noticed that you have a lot of quotes in one paragraph - sometimes that makes it harder to read. All you really have to do is start a new paragraph every time a different character speaks, making it easier to read. So instead of

"Hello there." Said the first character. "Hi!" Said the second.

It'd be like

"Hello there." Said the first character.
"Hi!" Said the second.

Just makes it a tad easier to read. Also, just look out for some mild spelling/grammer that spellcheck won't catch up on, like using the right you're/your and other silly little things.

Content-wise, however, you have a lot of good things going. Your style is funny, you have a lot of wit, and you also have new ideas. The concept of Bellboy --> Edgey was pretty entertaining and at some points it was believable. You also nailed Klavi pretty well in Lacey Dresses.

Overall, pretty good :D

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Haha, thank you very much! I know, I tend to miss a few grammatical mistakes when I re-red- It's always been a bad habit of mine to never check as clearly as I should. (Actually, I've only started doing that recently.)
I'll take your advice on the new paragraphs thing as well- It's kind of a shame, when I first started writing, it was in roleplay, and my friends had it drilled into my head that paragraphs had to be lengthy, or else. Ha,ha.

Thanks for posting! The compliments and suggestions mean I lot to me, especially in terms of Lacey Dresses, as I don't actually know 100% about Klavier's overall personality.

Thanks again!

( On a side note, the sixth chapter of My Medicine is soon to be released- Keep your eyes peeled!)

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Sorry for the DP, but Chapter Six is up. :)

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