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It's a big chapter, so I'm dividing it in two. I'll write the next bit
tomorrow. It's also a trick not to break from my patented
POV-switching style. xD
PM me, I bite ;)
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You don't want my death on your conscience, do you......*ominous laughter*
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This made me laugh
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Cause they're perfect for each other
/ 
Cause it's just awesome
/ 
Cause it's so cute even though I don't really like incest
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Of course not! ...
save the day with a good old fashioned mouth-to-mouth.
Was one of my own personal favorite quotes too. ;)
Anyways, part 2 of the chapter 9 is on the first post.
Is it just me or are the parts getting dangerously larger every time?
I think I'm gonna make a shorter one next. :3
Also I'd like to state that any resemblance between hobohodo and the witness is
purely coincidental. (And I was originally planning on giving him a beanie too...
It's just the image I kind of get from him. But he was looking too much of a cheap
copy so I cut that. xD)
TIME FOR SCIENTIFIC... illustration?
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Anyway, your formatting's getting a little better, but I honestly couldn't read the first chapter because of TEXTWALL. My eyesight's not good enough to handle that. :/ This kind of formatting isn't really a "stylistic" issue, it's more of a grammar issue.
Also, because you mentioned some confusion, PG stands for "Parental Guidance". This story would probably warrant PG-13 or PG-15 (PG-13 being "parental guidance suggested for children under the age of 13" and PG-15 not being an American rating, but this is the internet so whatever.)
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Lol, I honestly hope he didn't mean it that way. Try not to picture anything. xD
On a side note, the first post was getting a little big and also for
structural reasons I've decided to split the whole thing up into
(estimated) three acts. Also because there's such a sudden
change from a romance story to a courtroom drama.
Now I can also split the rating 'm stuff. I was originally going
to call act 2 'turnabout raep' but decided not to.
Actually, it is rocket science.
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Chapter 10's here! Yay. I added it to the first post as usual.
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^u^
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/ Cause they're perfect for each other/ Cause it's just awesome/ Cause it's so cute even though I don't really like incest
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Made
Of
Win.
Anyways, I'm liking where this story is heading. Keep up the good work.
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Damn you. :<
I'll have to check AFTER work tomorrow.... Urgh. Noes...
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BEST FANFIC EVER.
And I'm beginning to like Apollo/Trucy, but it's just SO WRONG. ^.^;
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Was it really necessary to inflate your ego a little more when you could've just said to start a new paragraph for every change in mood/dialogue? I don't intend to come off as rude but it really peeves me when writers pimp themselves out in such a way.
In other news...
I've been following this story since it started, and I must say that I'm impressed, especially by how smoothly the moods and situations change from lighthearted and fluffy to dark and sober. On the whole, it's a wellrounded story and I look forward to reading more.
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Was it really necessary to inflate your ego a little more when you could've just said to start a new paragraph for every change in mood/dialogue? I don't intend to come off as rude but it really peeves me when writers pimp themselves out in such a way.
I don't see how that suggestion is "pimping" myself. I was just offering a friendly suggestion. Don't flame me if you don't a agree. Instead, just politely state you don't agree, instead of going off at me. I apologize for his behavior, Greeny. The story is fantastic! I'm now a fan.
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Also you can probably understand it'd be kinda weird if I'd change writing style in the
middle of my story, wright? xD
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Was it really necessary to inflate your ego a little more when you could've just said to start a new paragraph for every change in mood/dialogue? I don't intend to come off as rude but it really peeves me when writers pimp themselves out in such a way.
I don't see how that suggestion is "pimping" myself. I was just offering a friendly suggestion. Don't flame me if you don't a agree. Instead, just politely state you don't agree, instead of going off at me. I apologize for his behavior, Greeny. The story is fantastic! I'm now a fan.
I wasn't flaming you, first of all. Did I personally insult you? Call you a loser or another derogatory term? It had no malicious intent. I said that I didn't intend to come off as rude, and what do you know, you interpret it as just that anyway.
Don't apologize for my behavior. I revoke nothing, and you are not responsible for my own actions.
I refuse to argue any further. I'm leaving.
If you want me to delete my posts, Greeny, I'll gladly do so.
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Also you can probably understand it'd be kinda weird if I'd change writing style in the
middle of my story, wright? xD
I apologize for that argument. No harm done? Anywho, I changed my format at chapter 4 (I think) and it didn't feel strange to me. You don't HAVE to change your style. It was just a friendly suggestion to make it look tider.
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What?! Why? What is this madness?
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If you look at his now locked sprite thread I think you'll know. D:
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I've changed the first post - it now links to the page at the Phoenix Wright Fanfic Archive. (Great place)
It simplifies things. The latest chapter is Act 2 Chapter 8, or Chapter 14 total.
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Hmm... the plot thickens.
Oh, BTW: Happy unbanning, Greenie. [hands over a mysterious pink envelope]
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What? Pink envelope?
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Here I am, trying my best to write something interesting for you guys,
and what do I get? No comments, no feedback, no reviews, no nothing. :(
Oh, before I forget, new chapter.
I guess there's just no place for somebody who writes really
long-going stories. *sob*
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... ... ...That old man's testimony was lol-worthy. Kinda reminds me of Kudo, but with less bird seeds. Is it bad that I'm noticing the contradictions pretty quickly, though?
It would be interesting to see how this turns out.
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and not let this die. Act 2, Turnabout Frame is with this new chapter... Over!
Now let's all pray I can manage to finish act 3.
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/ fan, and also as an eccentric nutcase, I say...GODDAMMIT EPIC WIN!
Both parts were awesome as hell, the best of any
/ fanfic EVAH, and of almost any fanfics EVAH. good job!
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I just hope, maybe, one day, I'll be able to write that third act I was supposed
to write one month ago. XD
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