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Well what do you think? As long as you don't flame, opinions are wanted. Flames break my heartin two, they really do. OH! I'm a poet, and I didn't know it! (sorry. couldn't resist) Here's the cast list too:
Excuse the lack of naming skills, or spirting to that matter. I am crap at both of them, so I decided to use premade characters. Hopefully you won't mind, right? Anybody who wants to help out with spiriting is free to do so, but if you're not what I'm looking for, then I'm really sorry. I don't like hurting people's feelings. D:
http://aceattorney.sparklin.org/jeu.php?id_proces=4284 Here's the introduction. Ignore the 'The End' bit. Of course it isn't the end yet. To view, you need Firefox or Opera, sorry, that's just how it is D:
But credit to the casemaker's maker (buh?) and hopefully I'll get some happy feedback. Crtique is wanted.
Remeber, ideas and critique are loved!
so happy critiquing :D
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Anyway, the intro was very good. It almost seemed movie-like. Despite a few mistakes.
However, I would suggest renaming the "Badge" to "Prosecutor's Badge" or "Defense Attorney's Badge" for clarification, and to make them sound more official.
Anway, those are all of the mistakes I've spotted.
Please, don't let it demoralize you. I'm making my own game currently, and I know how it gets sometimes. Don't let it get you down!
Again, please feel free to ask me any questions, and, by the way, the story is great.
-Sincerely,-
-Fandiago-
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Yeah, it was pretty good so far. Keep it up.
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Anyways if you need help...I can help too XD
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