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“Dahlia Hawthorne?” The guard rapped on the bars of her jail cell, probably trying to seem more important. “You have a visitor.”
Dahlia, who’d been sitting on her bed, facing away, staring out the small, dirt-covered window, watching a cat lazily trap a bird and consume it, turned to face the guard. No doubt it was her pathetic “mother” trying to concoct another fail-sure plan to place her mother’s “real child” as head of the Fey clan.
Still, company was company.
“Thank you, Mister Guard,” Dahlia said, using her most charming voice and smile. “Please, show my mother into my jail cell. I’m sure she’d love to see how they’re keeping her ‘darling daughter’ in a cage not fit for animals.”
The guard looked befuddled. “The guest seems too young for your mother, Miss Hawthorne, but I’ll let her in, anyway…”
As the dim fluorescent light of the jail’s hallway lit up the visitor, Dahlia Hawthorne stared back. The light was too dim to see things properly, but the black-tinted hair and hesitant smile instantly gave her identity away.
“…Iris?” Dahlia Hawthorne called, her voice commanding, yet hinting with trepidation, into the dark.
“Dahlia?” Iris Hawthorne’s voice reverberated around Dahlia’s cold, quiet room, and Dahlia winced. Couldn’t her sister not be so… loud?
“Come in, Twin Dear,” she called, sarcastic. “Come see the palace your twin’s living in, these days.” Unbridled frustration and anger towards her sister suddenly ripped through Dahlia, and it took her a moment to control her temper. She grabbed her sister’s arm and roughly yanked her further into the cell.
“The finest mattresses, from France,” she said, pointing at the rock-hard mattress on her steel-framed bed. “And, of course, only the finest of entertainment.” She gestured outside, to the tiny window. “I just watched a cat eat more in a few minutes than I’ve been eating all month.” She nearly shoved Iris towards her food tray, the remnants of a bruised apple and moldy turkey rotting over from her “lunch.”
Iris was silent, willingly submitting to her sister’s will. When it was apparent Dahlia was done, she sat on the bed, which was really as hard as Dahlia had made it out to be. Dahlia stayed standing, clearly proving who gave orders in this sibling relationship.
“…You seem angry, Dahlia.” The voice on the bed was quiet, resigned.
Another wave of anger. “You haven’t come to see me in three years, Iris. What, was your twin not good enough for you? Have more important things on that stupid, snow-covered mountain? Was your precious little Feenie more important to you than your own flesh and blood?”
Iris stayed quiet, her eyes trained on the floor. Dahlia went on: “You didn’t see me. You ran away, like the scared little child you were. Too scared to see me, Twin Dear?”
Silence from the black-haired twin. Dahlia grabbed her sister’s chin and roughly yanked it up, so the two were looking at each other. “Look at me when I’m talking to you, Iris! Look! At! Me!”
Iris jerked her chin away, casting her eyes on the floor. “I… didn’t want to…see you like this. I thought if I stayed away… let you be on your own… you might think things through a little more… calm down…”
“Calm down?” Dahlia actually laughed aloud at that one. “You leave me here, abandon me again, just like you did on the mountaintop, leave me here with my mother, who only seeks me dead so hear real child can finally get revenge, leave me here, alone, with nothing but my thoughts and memories of my life, leave me, here, in this dark, cramped room, and you… expect me… to… calm down?!”
Iris looked vaguely terrified, as if she expected her sister to hurt her. Seeing this look on Iris’s face, Dahlia sank slowly to the edge of the bed, suddenly tired. She wasn’t usually this noisy. She wasn’t sure if her room could handle the change, the emotion, that now permeated the cell like an odorous perfume.
“I’m sorry, Dahlia.” The three words were such a shock Dahlia had to stand up again. She wasn’t supposed to apologize.
“I always knew… you were better than this.” The dark curtain of hair muffled a few of Iris’s words, but Dahlia understood their meaning well enough. “I’ve always… believed in you. That deep down, you were a good person. With a heart. Who always just needed… love.”
The bitter anger, which had vanished momentarily, reappeared. This is what Iris thought of her? That deep down, Dahlia Hawthorne was nothing more than some wilted plant, who just needed a little TLC, and she’d be all “better”? That if only she’d been surrounded by Bikini and snow-covered mountaintops, she’d be as innocent and perky as Iris?
Well. Well, well, well. Dahlia Hawthorne had to live every night in a waking nightmare, dreaming of blood and poisoned coffee and cross-examinations and hours spent in a frozen river and blood-stained coats and clever alibis. Maybe it was time for Iris Hawthorne to share in that reality, too.
After all, sisters shared everything, right?
“Iris, I am not supposed to be the object of your pity.”
“Dahlia, it’s not pit—“
“I killed Doug Swallow. I killed my stepsister, Valerie Hawthorne, when she tried to reveal my secret, our secret of the bridge kidnapping. I caused the suicide of Terry Fawles, when he was going to get all the information he needed to turn me in. I killed that defense attorney, when he tried to get more information on Terry’s suicide. Then I roped that Phoenix Wright oaf into it, then you, and then I killed Doug Swallow, because he came to close to knowing the truth.”
“…”
Finally, silence.
“I kill and lie and steal and manipulate everyone I know, Iris. Including you. I would have been willing to kill you, if necessary. My own sister. If it had really come to that.”
“…”
“Well?” Dahlia said, her frustration brimming. “Don’t you have to say anything? Come, now, look at your fallen twin sister, who stands on death row for a murder she tried to pin on your lover. Come now, Twin Dear. Where’s that passionate belief you have in the girl you think I am?”
“I know you did all those things, Dahlia.”
All the air flew out of Dahlia’s lungs, like someone had pressed a pin into her side and deflated her. For the second time, her sister’s words caused her to sink back onto her bed.
“You… know?”
“Yes,” Iris said simply. “But I know you’re still a good person, underneath all that. I know that. I believe that. It’s what ‘love’ means, Dahlia. I love yo—”
“Enough, Iris!”
Oh, that would just be the end of it. For good, sweet, innocent Iris to care about her, to believe in her, to… love her? No. She was Dahlia Hawthorne, and needed absolutely no one.
“Guard!” Dahlia Hawthorne called, rapping on the bars of her jail cell. “Our visit is over. Please escort this person out.”
Iris’s eyes were wide, and stunned. She didn’t seem to know what to do. Dahlia pointed at the door.
“What are you waiting for, Iris? Get out!”
Iris turned to walk away, got halfway to the door, then came back, and deposited a small box near where Dahlia was sitting.
“Merry Christmas, Dahlia,” she said, quietly. “I’ll come back and visit soon.”
And after that, Iris left, leaving Dahlia Hawthorne alone, in the peace she’d so desperately wanted.
Dahlia watched her sister go, trying not to betray any one of the flood of emotions threatening to take over. Above all, she must not loose control of herself. To otherwise occupy her time, she reached down and opened the box.
It was a music box, made of silver, and empty inside. On the cover, “DAHLIA HAWTHORNE” was engraved in cursive. As Dahlia opened the box, the opening melody to “Carol of the Bells,” Dahlia’s favorite Christmas carol, played.
Hark how the bells, sweet silver bells, all seem to say: “Throw cares away!”
Christmas is here, bringing good cheer, to young and old, meek and the bold…
Dahlia Hawthorne leaned back on the bed, wound the music box so it was playing, and listened to the haunting melody, trying as hard as she could not to think.
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I really liked that! It was very much in character, something that many fanfics are lacking. Not much plot, but I suppose that that's the point of a one-shot. Keep writing!
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You didn't had any problem with the personalities, one of the things that fails the most in fics of Iris and Dahlia.
Good work!
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Again good work!
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Still, I like this one-shot very much, and it really made me think about these things.
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Very good, It really captured their relationship well and just how mean Dahlia is. Well writen and a good storyline. Keep it up!
Very good, It really captured their relationship well and just how mean Dahlia is. Well writen and a good storyline. Keep it up!
Aww. I didn't mean for Dahlia to seem so mean. xD. She's been locked alone in jail with nothing but herself for three years--I wanted her "cruelty" (if it is that) to be justified.
Glad you like it. ^_^.
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I really liked that! It was very much in character, something that many fanfics are lacking. Not much plot, but I suppose that that's the point of a one-shot. Keep writing!
I really liked that! It was very much in character, something that many fanfics are lacking. Not much plot, but I suppose that that's the point of a one-shot. Keep writing!
Thankyou. :D
Yeah, it's only supposed to be a little moment in time, so not much plot, but...
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Good one! i liked how the attitude of both sisters were captures in this fic.
You didn't had any problem with the personalities, one of the things that fails the most in fics of Iris and Dahlia.
Good work!
You didn't had any problem with the personalities, one of the things that fails the most in fics of Iris and Dahlia.
Good work!
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Good job, that was very well written. You captured very well our twins.
Again good work!
Again good work!
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Wow, this is really good. I like how you get both of their characters just right. I could never write someone as mean as Dahlia. I like the interaction between the two, though the story is kind of sad in its futility. I'm not sure how I feel about whether Dahlia deserves Iris' devotion or not. I'd say she did it if there was a decent chance it would actually make a difference. Even if it doesn't make a difference at all, she still deserves to be loved. But Iris herself deserves better, and other people who might actually respond to her are missing out because she is too focused on Dahlia.
Still, I like this one-shot very much, and it really made me think about these things.
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Wow, this is really good. I like how you get both of their characters just right. I could never write someone as mean as Dahlia. I like the interaction between the two, though the story is kind of sad in its futility. I'm not sure how I feel about whether Dahlia deserves Iris' devotion or not. I'd say she did it if there was a decent chance it would actually make a difference. Even if it doesn't make a difference at all, she still deserves to be loved. But Iris herself deserves better, and other people who might actually respond to her are missing out because she is too focused on Dahlia.
Still, I like this one-shot very much, and it really made me think about these things.
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Still, I like this one-shot very much, and it really made me think about these things.
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Wow, this is really good. I like how you get both of their characters just right. I could never write someone as mean as Dahlia. I like the interaction between the two, though the story is kind of sad in its futility. I'm not sure how I feel about whether Dahlia deserves Iris' devotion or not. I'd say she did it if there was a decent chance it would actually make a difference. Even if it doesn't make a difference at all, she still deserves to be loved. But Iris herself deserves better, and other people who might actually respond to her are missing out because she is too focused on Dahlia.
Still, I like this one-shot very much, and it really made me think about these things.
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Oh, wow.
I'm glad this story made you think, though.
I'm not sure if Dahlia really "deserves" Iris's devotion, but she certainly has it. :)
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It helped with Iris's hope and love for her sister. I could see the sort of desperate and helplessness Dahlia felt. It wasn't that she was trying to be mean; to me, it was as if Dahlia had given up any hope for forgiveness or repentance and has attempted to stop caring about her actions. She's done so many wrongs that it's just easier to slip back into her cruel, calculating ways so that when someone as sweet as Iris comes along and tells her that she still sees good, Dahlia doesn't know how to handle it.
It's easier to keep going down the slippery slope of wrongdoings than to climb up the slope towards repentence.
In any case, excellent job. Dahlia did not seem too inhumanely or stereotypically "evil" and Iris was not the stereotypical too-sweet, absolutely naive sister. Both were characterized very well, in my opinion. Both were human.
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DahliaXKristoph wrote:
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Oh, wow.
SHE'S NOT SUPPOSED TO BE MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAN.
I'm glad this story made you think, though.
I'm not sure if Dahlia really "deserves" Iris's devotion, but she certainly has it. :)
What do you mean she's not supposed to be mean!? This is Dahlia Hawthorne we are talking about! She is meant to be so far beyond mean that she becomes irredeemable!Oh, wow.
I'm glad this story made you think, though.
I'm not sure if Dahlia really "deserves" Iris's devotion, but she certainly has it. :)
I haven't played 3-4 in a while, but I don't think canon actually tells us enough about her Start Of Darkness to tell for sure whether Dahlia was predisposed to become evil or whether it was outside circumstances that led her down the road she has taken - the old Nature vs. Nurture argument. (To be honest, I don't find her situation when growing up sufficient to justify how she turns out - there are plenty of people with shitty childhoods who turn into very unhappy and troubled adults, but don't become amoral murdering, scheming bitches/bastards. The contrast between Iris and her is too stark for it to be believable that they started out the same.)
Anyway, I still like seeing that gentler side of Dahlia that could have been there explored. I think her being unable to understand affection or love could make for many a fun plot, and I would love to read an AU that somehow averts her starting down that path of evil and turns her into a person just like everyone else and a decent sister to Iris. Unfortunately, at the stage of 3-4, she's already too far gone down that path for her suddenly turning away from it being believable. I despise Dahlia as one of the most evil villains ever, but I still mourn for the person she could have been.
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This is the best Hawthorne sisters fic I've ever read. I'm suprised it hasn't any more reviews. *saved to favorites* Keep up the good work. <3
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Quizer wrote:
DahliaXKristoph wrote:
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Oh, wow.
SHE'S NOT SUPPOSED TO BE MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAN.
I'm glad this story made you think, though.
I'm not sure if Dahlia really "deserves" Iris's devotion, but she certainly has it. :)
What do you mean she's not supposed to be mean!? This is Dahlia Hawthorne we are talking about! She is meant to be so far beyond mean that she becomes irredeemable!Oh, wow.
I'm glad this story made you think, though.
I'm not sure if Dahlia really "deserves" Iris's devotion, but she certainly has it. :)
I haven't played 3-4 in a while, but I don't think canon actually tells us enough about her Start Of Darkness to tell for sure whether Dahlia was predisposed to become evil or whether it was outside circumstances that led her down the road she has taken - the old Nature vs. Nurture argument. (To be honest, I don't find her situation when growing up sufficient to justify how she turns out - there are plenty of people with shitty childhoods who turn into very unhappy and troubled adults, but don't become amoral murdering, scheming bitches/bastards. The contrast between Iris and her is too stark for it to be believable that they started out the same.)
Anyway, I still like seeing that gentler side of Dahlia that could have been there explored. I think her being unable to understand affection or love could make for many a fun plot, and I would love to read an AU that somehow averts her starting down that path of evil and turns her into a person just like everyone else and a decent sister to Iris. Unfortunately, at the stage of 3-4, she's already too far gone down that path for her suddenly turning away from it being believable. I despise Dahlia as one of the most evil villains ever, but I still mourn for the person she could have been.
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It's an interesting nature/nurture debate--How much of Dahlia was because of her "genes," and how much of it was because she was raised in the environment she was in?
I've been meaning to do a story on Dollie's childhood, maybe I'll get around to it when I'm not so lazy. :B
I think when we're fourteen, we all do silly things--obviously not to the degree Dahlia did, but I think she was scared as a fourteen-y-o, all on her own, and that things stemmed from there. Since all her crimes really did come from that event, no, I don't think there was a way to "reverse" her behavior.
Like dominoes. :/
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This is the best Hawthorne sisters fic I've ever read. I'm suprised it hasn't any more reviews. *saved to favorites* Keep up the good work. <3
This is the best Hawthorne sisters fic I've ever read. I'm suprised it hasn't any more reviews. *saved to favorites* Keep up the good work. <3
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