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a fairly main point in it, but there are other family style one-shots uploaded. Thank you to neoswordmaster for being the current beta-reader.
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Trials Of Law And Life - Not a rip off of General Luigi's "Tales Of Law And Love"
Following the events of Apollo Justice, the cast can now move on with future trials and romances. All while preparing to face a new enemy. Everything leading up to one life changing moment.
Credit goes to Vickinator for the Sigart you see above.
Rated "T", will most likely go up to "M" for one or two chapters, but that's way off from now.
PAIRINGS: Phoenix/Iris, Miles/Lana, Apollo/Vera
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5126626/1/Trials_Of_Law_And_Life
The Dark Road Ahead - Has no connection to TOLAL
Trucy is kidnapped, held hostage and raped for several days until Law Enforcement takes down some of her captors and rescues her. Then the long road to recovery can begin and the trial will eventually start
Rated "M", for sexual content and mature angst
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5360770/1/
One-Shots
Daddy's Sick Little Girl [COMPLETE]
10-Year Old Trucy comes down with a fever and stomach virus during the night, and Phoenix has to take care of her.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5193921/1/Daddys_Sick_Little_Girl
Serious Matter [COMPLETE]
Phoenix comforts Trucy after one of her friends is sexually abused by their teacher. When going to her vigil, Phoenix takes something else into account, he just has no idea how important it means at the time. Connects With Trials Of Law And Life.
Rated T: For mentioning of Sexual Abuse
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5216011/1/Serious_Matter
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Sisterly Savior [COMPLETE]
Pairing: Maya - Mia
Maya channels Mia during an attempted rape and Mia beats the crap out of the rapist.
Rated T: For Attempted Rape and language.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5231575/1/Sisterly_Savior
These Are So Unattractive [COMPLETE]
Pairing: Edgeworth - Lana
At the seven month of her pregnancy, Lana doesn't like her stretch marks that have formed on her baby "bump". So she asks her husband, Miles for his opinion. He replies with cute words and touches.
Rated K: I couldn't find anything that would rate it any higher
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5294007/1/These_Are_So_Unattractive
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. nice to still see the friction between 
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XDAnd of course the parts with
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Looking good so far . nice to still see the friction between and XD
And of course the parts with are win.
. nice to still see the friction between and XDAnd of course the parts with
are win. I appreciate the review. I didn't expect Klavier to suddenly stop annoying Ema so I kept the usual harassing going on.
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Wow, this fanfiction is awesome >0< And I support all these couples! *glomps*
I'm glad you've been hooked onto my story. You will not be dissapointed in the future.
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I'm really enjoying your fic so far. Your writing skills are impressive and your characterizations are dead on from what I've seen so far. The interactions between the characters are very believable, which is wonderful.
I like how you're going about developing the plot. It starts up quickly enough to get my attention at the start with Phoenix's dream and you still manage to hold my attention without rushing the story which can be quite tough. You continue to draw my further into the story a little at a time and it's quite effective.
Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter. ^_^
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Mia_Fey wrote:
So... I'm a bit later than I told you I would be. I do apologize. I ended up being busier this weekend then I thought that I would be and this is the first opportunity that I've had to give your fic my undivided attention. I hope that you can forgive me.
I'm really enjoying your fic so far. Your writing skills are impressive and your characterizations are dead on from what I've seen so far. The interactions between the characters are very believable, which is wonderful.
I like how you're going about developing the plot. It starts up quickly enough to get my attention at the start with Phoenix's dream and you still manage to hold my attention without rushing the story which can be quite tough. You continue to draw my further into the story a little at a time and it's quite effective.
Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter. ^_^
I'm really enjoying your fic so far. Your writing skills are impressive and your characterizations are dead on from what I've seen so far. The interactions between the characters are very believable, which is wonderful.
I like how you're going about developing the plot. It starts up quickly enough to get my attention at the start with Phoenix's dream and you still manage to hold my attention without rushing the story which can be quite tough. You continue to draw my further into the story a little at a time and it's quite effective.
Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter. ^_^
I'm not angry at you for reviewing a bit later than what you had told me. I'm glad your enjoying how I portray the characters as I go along with the story. You will not be dissapointed with the next chapter, (Which should be uploaded soon, I'm just on a road trip right now and don't have that much time to write.)
My concern at the beginning that some of the characters would seem OC. I'm glad that people don't see that.
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Phoenix woke up in a cold sweat in his bed, a awoke Iris noticed and consoled him. “Nightmare Feenie?” Iris asked as she wrapped her arms around Phoenix's waist. Phoenix stood up out of the bed at his girlfriend, “Yes a nightmare, let me take a long hot shower as I try to figure out what in the hell that was about.” Phoenix kissed Iris then went into their bathroom.
I thought this part was really sweet.
The defendant, Charlie remindes me of Terry Fawles for some reason.
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I liked this a lot. I thought all the chapters were good. The progress on the trail was really interesting. I thought you wrote it really well. =D
I thought this part was really sweet.
The defendant, Charlie remindes me of Terry Fawles for some reason.
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Phoenix woke up in a cold sweat in his bed, a awoke Iris noticed and consoled him. “Nightmare Feenie?” Iris asked as she wrapped her arms around Phoenix's waist. Phoenix stood up out of the bed at his girlfriend, “Yes a nightmare, let me take a long hot shower as I try to figure out what in the hell that was about.” Phoenix kissed Iris then went into their bathroom.
I thought this part was really sweet.
The defendant, Charlie remindes me of Terry Fawles for some reason.
I was concerned about my writing of the trial, don't know why exactly but glad you liked it. As well as the dream scene at the beginning of the story. Some things in that dream are very important as to what will happen later on, some of the little details and of course Apollo, a naked Trucy and Phoenix being shot by Eduardo is very important. I'm remaining silent on who Eduardo is.
In regards to the defendant Charlie, I consider him to have lost his trust in his defense because he understands what will happen if he is found guilty. I never made that comparison to Terry Fawles until you mentioned it and I agree. I'm glad you enjoy this so far.
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one-shot has been uploaded. Phoenix has to take care of 10-Year old Trucy who has come down with a fever and stomach virus during the night.http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5193921/1/Daddys_Sick_Little_Girl
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About Trials Of Law And Life, it was a bit confusing at first, but I got the hang of it. I really liked how the trials are formatted. It's like how it looks like in-game. I just wish to read more. lol
Sorry if my review was not great... I haven't reviewed a fan-fic before... ^^;
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Daddy's Sick Little Girl was one touching story. I always wanted to see more of Phoenix's and Trucy's father-daughter relationship. The thing that bothered was how old Trucy was. 10? I thought she should be a lot younger, but that's just me... I forgot how 10 year-olds are like.
About Trials Of Law And Life, it was a bit confusing at first, but I got the hang of it. I really liked how the trials are formatted. It's like how it looks like in-game. I just wish to read more. lol
Give it till sometime this week for the next chapter. The trials are fun to write, espically with my ideas.
Sorry if my review was not great... I haven't reviewed a fan-fic before... ^^;
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About Trials Of Law And Life, it was a bit confusing at first, but I got the hang of it. I really liked how the trials are formatted. It's like how it looks like in-game. I just wish to read more. lol
Give it till sometime this week for the next chapter. The trials are fun to write, espically with my ideas.
Sorry if my review was not great... I haven't reviewed a fan-fic before... ^^;
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- oneshot up. Titled Serious Matter.
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Chapter 3 of "Trials Of Law And Life"- A fun read. I felt bad for Apollo, particularly at the end. His client certainly isn't helping himself. Mouthing off to a judge is very bad. I'm can't wait for the next chapter. ^_^
There were a couple of grammar issues. Nothing horrific, but I still wanted to mention them because they disrupt the flow a bit (at least they did for me).
"'Opening statement ey (unless I'm simply misunderstanding what you intended here, which is certainly a possibility, this looks like it' just a minor typo, but it messes a bit with the flow of the sentence), the defense pleads Not Guilty.'"
"'No (A comma should go after the "no" here. He's addressing his "failed lawyer".) my failed lawyer, your (you're) just prolonging my guilty verdict for a crime I didn't even commit.' Charlie challenged Apollo."
Anyway, very nice. :)
"Daddy's Sick Little Girl"- Very, very cute. You clearly know your audience. :P I love the father and daughter relationship these two characters have and I think that you captured it quite nicely here. I have nothing else to say really. I loved it.
"Serious Matter"- I've tried again and again to make myself read this one all the way through, but so far I've had little luck in this. I really like your writing and I'm all for family fics, but I find this subject matter really disturbing and I've tried to force myself through the fic, but I just can't seem to do so. Still, what I did manage to read through was good. The characters are well handled and the tone is right for subject matter from what I saw. I do apologize that I can't give a better review, but this kind of stuff upsets me too much, even in a fictional setting. Sorry. -_-
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Oh dear. I missed quite a lot. Well then, on to the review. :)
Chapter 3 of "Trials Of Law And Life"- A fun read. I felt bad for Apollo, particularly at the end. His client certainly isn't helping himself. Mouthing off to a judge is very bad. I'm can't wait for the next chapter. ^_^
There were a couple of grammar issues. Nothing horrific, but I still wanted to mention them because they disrupt the flow a bit (at least they did for me).
"'Opening statement ey (unless I'm simply misunderstanding what you intended here, which is certainly a possibility, this looks like it' just a minor typo, but it messes a bit with the flow of the sentence), the defense pleads Not Guilty.'"
"'No (A comma should go after the "no" here. He's addressing his "failed lawyer".) my failed lawyer, your (you're) just prolonging my guilty verdict for a crime I didn't even commit.' Charlie challenged Apollo."
Anyway, very nice. :)
"Daddy's Sick Little Girl"- Very, very cute. You clearly know your audience. :P I love the father and daughter relationship these two characters have and I think that you captured it quite nicely here. I have nothing else to say really. I loved it.
"Serious Matter"- I've tried again and again to make myself read this one all the way through, but so far I've had little luck in this. I really like your writing and I'm all for family fics, but I find this subject matter really disturbing and I've tried to force myself through the fic, but I just can't seem to do so. Still, what I did manage to read through was good. The characters are well handled and the tone is right for subject matter from what I saw. I do apologize that I can't give a better review, but this kind of stuff upsets me too much, even in a fictional setting. Sorry. -_-
Chapter 3 of "Trials Of Law And Life"- A fun read. I felt bad for Apollo, particularly at the end. His client certainly isn't helping himself. Mouthing off to a judge is very bad. I'm can't wait for the next chapter. ^_^
There were a couple of grammar issues. Nothing horrific, but I still wanted to mention them because they disrupt the flow a bit (at least they did for me).
"'Opening statement ey (unless I'm simply misunderstanding what you intended here, which is certainly a possibility, this looks like it' just a minor typo, but it messes a bit with the flow of the sentence), the defense pleads Not Guilty.'"
"'No (A comma should go after the "no" here. He's addressing his "failed lawyer".) my failed lawyer, your (you're) just prolonging my guilty verdict for a crime I didn't even commit.' Charlie challenged Apollo."
Anyway, very nice. :)
"Daddy's Sick Little Girl"- Very, very cute. You clearly know your audience. :P I love the father and daughter relationship these two characters have and I think that you captured it quite nicely here. I have nothing else to say really. I loved it.
"Serious Matter"- I've tried again and again to make myself read this one all the way through, but so far I've had little luck in this. I really like your writing and I'm all for family fics, but I find this subject matter really disturbing and I've tried to force myself through the fic, but I just can't seem to do so. Still, what I did manage to read through was good. The characters are well handled and the tone is right for subject matter from what I saw. I do apologize that I can't give a better review, but this kind of stuff upsets me too much, even in a fictional setting. Sorry. -_-
The first grammatical issue you adressed I think is up to personal opinion. The second one however I agree with. Commas have never been my strong point.
In regards to the two one-shots, the relationship between Phoenix & Trucy is too good to not write about. There are so many different scenairos and character development that can go on throughout the seven years and beyond if you take Post-AJ into consideration. Glad you loved "Daddy's Sick Little Girl".. That was just adorable now that I look at it.
When writing "Serious Matter" I should have known some people may have been not able to read the whole thing through. It's all based on people's tolerance for Child Sexual Abuse. This story is the result of what happens when the author watches America's Most Wanted and reads the case files on their website too often. I wonder how many people had the same reaction.
Considering you didn't read the ending, let me point out that some things in Serious Matter are going to play into Trials Of Law And Life. But that's not until much later.
Always nice to hear your opinion on things.
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The only problem I have with it is that Gyakuten Saiban originally took place in Japan, so all the characters were Asian, or at least intended to begin with. Perhaps you could remedy that by changing "Asian" to a nationality? Like "Chinese" or something?
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It's very interesting, and well written.
The only problem I have with it is that Gyakuten Saiban originally took place in Japan, so all the characters were Asian, or at least intended to begin with. Perhaps you could remedy that by changing "Asian" to a nationality? Like "Chinese" or something?
The only problem I have with it is that Gyakuten Saiban originally took place in Japan, so all the characters were Asian, or at least intended to begin with. Perhaps you could remedy that by changing "Asian" to a nationality? Like "Chinese" or something?
But they all look Caucasian except for Godot who is obviously Hispanic. My stories will be from a North American viewpoint, not from the original Japanese viewpoint. So the original characters are Caucasian. Charlie and Li are Asian. Eduardo and Rosa are hispanic. And Mr. Richardson is also Caucasian.
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Chapter 4- I don't really have too much to say here. It added some nice information to the case and you've written the court scene quite well (far better then I could ever dream of doing).
There are a few comma issues that I noticed, so you might want to look over those again (I recall you mentioning that commas weren't a strong point of yours, which is understandable. A few that stood out to me were (I added commas in bold) "“Oh, okay. So Mrs. Suarez, is there a problem with say the video tape.” "“Yes, there is someone that has been missed. I would like to testify regarding that. Can I begin.” "“Yes, by all means Mrs. Suarez do so.” Amusingly, those were all in a row.
Anyway, it's quite good. I look forward to more.
"Sisterly Savior"- This is quite good. I rather got a kick out of watching Mia beat up the would be rapist. Poor Maya though. She just can't catch a break, can she? :( I thought you handled the part with Phoenix comforting Maya perfectly. Very nice.
"Now You Fully Know"- I don't have too much to say here admittedly. It's very well written and the characters are nicely handled. Good work.
"Serious Matter" (attempt two)- Okay, I finally made it all the way through this one. It's very well written. This is a very emotional piece and you wrote the emotions so vividly that I really felt them instead of just reading them.
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Hi there. ^_^ Sorry that it's been so long since my last review. I actually don't have too much to say. Your stuff new stuff is well-written and the characters are portrayed nicely. Anyway...
Chapter 4- I don't really have too much to say here. It added some nice information to the case and you've written the court scene quite well (far better then I could ever dream of doing).
There are a few comma issues that I noticed, so you might want to look over those again (I recall you mentioning that commas weren't a strong point of yours, which is understandable. A few that stood out to me were (I added commas in bold) "“Oh, okay. So Mrs. Suarez, is there a problem with say the video tape.” "“Yes, there is someone that has been missed. I would like to testify regarding that. Can I begin.” "“Yes, by all means Mrs. Suarez do so.” Amusingly, those were all in a row.
Anyway, it's quite good. I look forward to more.
Chapter 4- I don't really have too much to say here. It added some nice information to the case and you've written the court scene quite well (far better then I could ever dream of doing).
There are a few comma issues that I noticed, so you might want to look over those again (I recall you mentioning that commas weren't a strong point of yours, which is understandable. A few that stood out to me were (I added commas in bold) "“Oh, okay. So Mrs. Suarez, is there a problem with say the video tape.” "“Yes, there is someone that has been missed. I would like to testify regarding that. Can I begin.” "“Yes, by all means Mrs. Suarez do so.” Amusingly, those were all in a row.
Anyway, it's quite good. I look forward to more.
I admit I thought about how I would write the court scene for a little bit. Yes I found it amusing when the comma errors were all in a row, I should really work on that. I promise nothing however.
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"Sisterly Savior"- This is quite good. I rather got a kick out of watching Mia beat up the would be rapist. Poor Maya though. She just can't catch a break, can she? :( I thought you handled the part with Phoenix comforting Maya perfectly. Very nice.
I don't ship Phoenix/Maya. But I imagine Phoenix to be comforting and understanding to any friend he keeps close to his heart. Glad you liked it.
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"Now You Fully Know"- I don't have too much to say here admittedly. It's very well written and the characters are nicely handled. Good work.
Your female so I would pay more attention to your reviews on this story then male reviewers. I fear screwing some detail later on and then getting chewed out because of it. Moving on from that, I enjoyed writing Phoenix in the chapter. His concern for Trucy suffering would be understandable.
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"Serious Matter" (attempt two)- Okay, I finally made it all the way through this one. It's very well written. This is a very emotional piece and you wrote the emotions so vividly that I really felt them instead of just reading them.
If you felt the emotions then I know I've done my job. Glad to know I'm on the right track with my work.
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Really good!!!
Sisterly Savior - poor Maya... good on you Mia!! hah hah!!! He so deserved it!!!
Daddys Sick Little Girl is sweet. Poor Trucy!
These Are So Unattractive - aww that is just so cute.Miles is lovely! Poor Lana! At least Miles managed to make her feel better!
Your writing makes the reader feel sympathy etc. towards the characters.Its excellent!
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Its all really good!!!! I think you've managed the character relationships perfectly and got the story across without all the random statements, though you do seem to ocasionally miss commas.
Really good!!!
Sisterly Savior - poor Maya... good on you Mia!! hah hah!!! He so deserved it!!!
Daddys Sick Little Girl is sweet. Poor Trucy!
These Are So Unattractive - aww that is just so cute.Miles is lovely! Poor Lana! At least Miles managed to make her feel better!
Your writing makes the reader feel sympathy etc. towards the characters.Its excellent!
Really good!!!
Sisterly Savior - poor Maya... good on you Mia!! hah hah!!! He so deserved it!!!
Daddys Sick Little Girl is sweet. Poor Trucy!
These Are So Unattractive - aww that is just so cute.Miles is lovely! Poor Lana! At least Miles managed to make her feel better!
Your writing makes the reader feel sympathy etc. towards the characters.Its excellent!
I'm glad you like my work while also noticing the comma issues. The stories are fun to write.
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Good! - Some people really hate it if i critisize them!! Its good that you enjoy writing ,too!!
A writer only gets better through critique. Point out everything you liked and what could be improved on. I just wish all reviewers on this forum actually did that.
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So I will now.
1st... poor Trucy!!! That has got to be hell.
I like the unusualness of it - 1st fanfic I've read with a plot like that!
Its really good how there is some humor in it too lighten the mood, rather than have it as a complete drip. Its really well balanced.
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Hmm. I didn't put my comment on Now You Fully Know.
So I will now.
1st... poor Trucy!!! That has got to be hell.
I like the unusualness of it - 1st fanfic I've read with a plot like that!
Its really good how there is some humor in it too lighten the mood, rather than have it as a complete drip. Its really well balanced.
So I will now.
1st... poor Trucy!!! That has got to be hell.
I like the unusualness of it - 1st fanfic I've read with a plot like that!
Its really good how there is some humor in it too lighten the mood, rather than have it as a complete drip. Its really well balanced.
It was a request so the person who made the request must have thought outside the box. I could easily make something totally angsty but I like some humor in it. Glad you liked it.
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It really good, just like all the others. This is a kinda lame comment, but any errors or good points are consistent in your writing.
It was really well written - just like the othes!! meh.
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"Now You Fully Know" Chapter 2- Alright, now that I've finally set my discomfort with this pairing aside for a short while, I can review this. I actually liked it. Poor Apollo and poor Trucy (after all, she has to live with it). Anyway, other then a few grammar errors, this was quite well-written. The characters seemed quite well done, although at one point Apollo calls Phoenix "Phoenix" which is unlike him. In the game, he always calls him "Mr. Wright" and, particularly while he's in pain, I'd imagine that he'd call him what he was most used to calling him. Not too much thinking happens when you're in a lot of pain and it would be something new for Apollo to call him "Phoenix" which means that he'd likely have to do so consciously until it became ingrained. Anyway, very nice.
"These Are So Unattractive"- This is just cute. It's a very sweet and believable scene. It's well-written excluding the grammar errors that I noticed. Anyway, I enjoyed this. :) Nice work.
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The characters seemed quite well done, although at one point Apollo calls Phoenix "Phoenix" which is unlike him. In the game, he always calls him "Mr. Wright" and, particularly while he's in pain, I'd imagine that he'd call him what he was most used to calling him. Not too much thinking happens when you're in a lot of pain and it would be something new for Apollo to call him "Phoenix" which means that he'd likely have to do so consciously until it became ingrained.
Well that was a stupid mistake on my part I admit and you appear to be correct. I will pull out a dictionary and look up the defination of comma to properly use them for once in the future, because I am getting tired of messing them up. Glad you liked the
/ one-shot I made. I like cute fics.Okay now for me to finally work on the next chapter of Trials Of Law And Life and put the Kink Meme aside for awhile. Once again I apologize for all these comma errors and anything else you noticed. Some readers are turned off a bit or alot by such mistakes and I don't want you or anyone else turned off.
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Well that was a stupid mistake on my part I admit and you appear to be correct. I will pull out a dictionary and look up the defination of comma to properly use them for once in the future, because I am getting tired of messing them up. Glad you liked the / one-shot I made. I like cute fics.
Okay now for me to finally work on the next chapter of Trials Of Law And Life and put the Kink Meme aside for awhile. Once again I apologize for all these comma errors and anything else you noticed. Some readers are turned off a bit or alot by such mistakes and I don't want you or anyone else turned off.
/ one-shot I made. I like cute fics.Okay now for me to finally work on the next chapter of Trials Of Law And Life and put the Kink Meme aside for awhile. Once again I apologize for all these comma errors and anything else you noticed. Some readers are turned off a bit or alot by such mistakes and I don't want you or anyone else turned off.
We all make grammar mistakes while learning, so I certainly don't hold that against you or your writing and I'll leave that aspect alone for a while now. I just realized how annoying I must sound. It's not a bad idea to look up some of those grammar rules though, particularly in commas and apostrophes, or asking a friend to beta for you or both. ^_^
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Platinum Skye wrote:
Well that was a stupid mistake on my part I admit and you appear to be correct. I will pull out a dictionary and look up the defination of comma to properly use them for once in the future, because I am getting tired of messing them up. Glad you liked the / one-shot I made. I like cute fics.
Okay now for me to finally work on the next chapter of Trials Of Law And Life and put the Kink Meme aside for awhile. Once again I apologize for all these comma errors and anything else you noticed. Some readers are turned off a bit or alot by such mistakes and I don't want you or anyone else turned off.
/ one-shot I made. I like cute fics.Okay now for me to finally work on the next chapter of Trials Of Law And Life and put the Kink Meme aside for awhile. Once again I apologize for all these comma errors and anything else you noticed. Some readers are turned off a bit or alot by such mistakes and I don't want you or anyone else turned off.
We all make grammar mistakes while learning, so I certainly don't hold that against you or your writing and I'll leave that aspect alone for a while now. I just realized how annoying I must sound. It's not a bad idea to look up some of those grammar rules though, particularly in commas and apostrophes, or asking a friend to beta for you or both. ^_^
No continue to have that aspect in your reviews for my work. Your probably my best reviewer, for being the most detailed and explaining what you liked and what needs work. I don't consider you to be annoying.
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