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OK, this is my first shot at writing a fanfic, so I apologize if it's bad. It's about Edgeworth and Franziska's daughter and the huge weight she feels from everyone's expectations. Please let me know what you think of it!

Spoiler: Chapter 1- Preparation
It was the start of something everyone had been waiting for - the start of Eva Edgeworth's prosecuting career. Like her parents, she was starting early, at thirteen. People were expecting something amazing. She would win with flying colours. But what would it be like if YOU were Eva herself? Well, it would be an understatement to say that Eva was nervous.
"Just do your best," her father had said. But Eva wasn't sure her best would be good enough. She was sat in the prosecution lobby, looking over her court record for what seemed like the thousandth time. The witnesses were prepared, she had spent ages making sure her case was contradiction-less, so surely nothing would go wrong, right? Eva's head began to fill with a million what-ifs and she was just about to run out of the lobby screaming when the bailiff said it was time to go in.
"Thanks," she choked out, before walking into the courtroom. It was now or never. She saw her parents sitting up in the gallery, and Eva saw her father smile and give a nod, which gave her some confidence. She stood behind the prosecutor's bench, checked the court record one last time, and before she knew it, it was ten o'clock and time for the trial to start.
"Order! ORDER!" the judge had to yell to make himself heard - there were a lot of people in the gallery today obviously. "Now, is the prosecution and defense ready?"
"The prosecuton is ready, Your Honor,"

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This should be interesting. :godot:
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Great start. I can't wait to see where this is headed.
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A god beginning. However it's too short! Waiting for more!
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Thank you! Chapter 2 and 3 up!

Spoiler: Chapter 2 - The trial begins
Eva managed to say she was ready without sounding too nervous, but the defense merely smirked.
"The defense is prepared... to babysit a thirteen year old!" the woman at the defense stand said mockingly.
"And you are?" Eva said coldly. She took an immediate dislike to the woman who had just tried to trash talk her.
"Kelsey De Villiers," she answered, and Eva saw that infuriating smirk was still on her face.
Fortunately, before anything nasty happened, the judge intervened.
"Ahem! Ms. von Karma, please give an outline of this case," the judge said.
"Your Honor, my surname is Edgeworth, not von Karma... please refer to me by my correct surname in future if you please. Now. The victim was Carter Newt, a scientist at the local laboratory. He was found dead outside the aforementioned laboratory at 1am on Tuesday morning. Cause of death was chemical poisoning. The suspect is his collegue Katy Murk. We know that the suspect was in the vicinity at the time of the murder and witnesses claim to have seen her knock the victim unconsious before injecting the poison into his body. Her fingerprints are all over the syringe that was used to inject the poison. A very open and shut case if you ask me Your Honor," Eva stated, smirking at De Villiers.
"Hmm, it does seem to be, Ms Edgeworth. Please call your first witness!" Eva nodded.
"The prosecution calls the security guard who witnessed the murder!"


Spoiler: Chapter 3 - The wicked witch of the witness stand
A woman wearing a space helmet walked to the stand, which Eva thought a little weird. She saw her father mouthing something frantically to her, but what Eva couldn't make out, and so she simply shrugged and turned to the witness.
"Witness, please state your name and occupation for the court," The lady took her helmet off to reveal a pinched face which resembled a lemon and a really strange hairstyle.
"Wendy Oldbag, security guard, whippersnapper!" Oldbag screeched. She paused. "EDGEY POO!"NO! NO! PLEASE NO! NOT THE WICKED WITCH OF THE WITNESS STAND! ARGH! Eva nearly cried out in exasperation at her bad luck. This was just not her day... at least if she had known about it beforehand, she would have been able to psyche herself up for what would surely be a very irritating and exasperating trial. Eva sighed, putting all her thoughts aside for a moment, she said "Witness, please testify as to what you saw for the court!"
"Don't worry Egey-poo, I'll do a good job for your litle girl!" Eva nearly face palmed, but decided not to, she wasn't about to show De Villiers she was getting frustrated.


@ justis76 My first review! Thank you! Yes, I it'll get interesting in the next chapter...
@Lida_Rose PANDEMONIUM! That's where it's headed! I hope you enjoy Chapters 2 and 3 too!
@ Indochine Ramera Yes, I'm sorry that the chapters are fairly short but as they say, quality not quantity, right?
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Funny things with Oldbag!^^

Still interesting but too short. You could have bring together chapter 2 and 3!^^
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Ooh, this is good! I like it! The chapters are short, but as you say, quality over quantity.
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LOL, Oldbag. For some reason, I hope for breaking, specifically of the 4th wall variety.
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Whooop, this is nice!
You should write some more, it's starting to be interesting :hotti:
Lol, Oldbag xD :redd:
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nice way to put in old bag.
BTW, when is this set?
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@ JasmineJustice Thanks! I'm glad you agree!
@ justis76 I'll do a one-off chapter for the breaking of the fourth wall for you, if you like.
@Indochine Ramera Yeah, I probably could have but I felt that the arrival of Oldbag needed to be a chapter by itself :edgy:
@Snackoo Thanks! Glad you like it!
@ Hahex Umm... I think probably a little bit before AJ. TY for reviewing!
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I may not like the pairing of :edgeworth: & :franny:, but I read these four chapters to see their daughter learn how to perform well in court and actually face off in court. After reading what has been posted so far, I must say I was rather let down.

A normal chapter is centered around either one major event or several small events that all relate to one thing as they occur in their proper order. I feel that up to Larry taking the stand, everything else could have fit into one chapter. A trial up to the first recess would normally all go into one chapter. In a earlier review response you said quality matters over quanity, when actually both are important as they should go together.

The chapters were not of quality. You have to space a line between different characters speaking and different paragraphs. Your fic is like one blob of text, which I find to be very lazy. I would have prefered to see Miles and Franziska teach their daughter how to prosecute and to go in depth into their expectations, rather than rush right into the first trial. I don't feel this story started off correctly.

I'm also bored to see Oldbag and Larry both appear at the start, I just wish for some more original characters considering this is a new era in the Edgeworth family of law. I also don't get Eva at age 13 in this fic. Let's say this takes place 1 year before Apollo Justice like you say it does. Franziska would be 25 at this time. That means she would have given birth at age 12 and become pregnant at age 11, which I don't see in her character to have sex at that age, and for Edgeworth to be in a sexual relationship at around 20. That appears to be a lazy oversight on your part.

I feel like your other reviewers aren't doing their job correctly. They only write less than a line and occasionally say the story is too short. They can't determine what is a good fic and what's not. Then again you are starting, but your reviewers should have said at the beginning that this wasn't a good start, maybe they were afraid you wouldn't like that kind of response. If so, they need a serious reality check. Or maybe your reviewers don't care about how good the story actually is.

Go read some good fanfictions and seriously consider how to improve and where this story is going.
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Yay! Miles and Franny! I like this story! :edgy:
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@Platinum Skye I did say I was new at this, and I have read lots of fanfictions, including yours, I might add. I was considering putting a OC in as a witness, but decided just to try and get the hang of keeping people in character. And the next chapter was going to be a flashback. However, when I read over the chapters, I do see your point. Let's say this is ten years after AJ, which would make Franziska 35 and Edgy 42, and so she would have been pregnant at 22, which is just about ok.

Spoiler: Better?
It was the start of something everyone had been waiting for - the start of Eva Edgeworth's prosecuting career. Like her parents, she was starting early, at thirteen. People were expecting something amazing. She would win with flying colours. But what would it be like if YOU were Eva herself? Well, it would be an understatement to say that Eva was nervous.

"Just do your best," her father had said. But Eva wasn't sure her best would be good enough. She was sat in the prosecution lobby, looking over her court record for what seemed like the thousandth time. The witnesses were prepared, she had spent ages making sure her case was contradiction-less, so surely nothing would go wrong, right? Eva's head began to fill with a million what-ifs and she was just about to run out of the lobby screaming when the bailiff said it was time to go in.
"Thanks," she choked out, before walking into the courtroom. It was now or never. She saw her parents sitting up in the gallery, and Eva saw her father smile and give a nod, which gave her some confidence. She stood behind the prosecutor's bench, checked the court record one last time, and before she knew it, it was ten o'clock and time for the trial to start.

"Order! ORDER!" the judge had to yell to make himself heard - there were a lot of people in the gallery today obviously. "Now, is the prosecution and defense ready?"

"The prosecuton is ready, Your Honor,"Eva managed to say she was ready without sounding too nervous, but the defense merely smirked.

"The defense is prepared... to babysit a thirteen year old!" the woman at the defense stand said mockingly.

"And you are?" Eva said coldly. She took an immediate dislike to the woman who had just tried to trash talk her.

"Kelsey De Villiers," she answered, and Eva saw that infuriating smirk was still on her face.
Fortunately, before anything nasty happened, the judge intervened.

"Ahem! Ms. von Karma, please give an outline of this case," the judge said.

"Your Honor, my surname is Edgeworth, not von Karma... please refer to me by my correct surname in future if you please. Now. The victim was Carter Newt, a scientist at the local laboratory. He was found dead outside the aforementioned laboratory at 1am on Tuesday morning. Cause of death was chemical poisoning. The suspect is his collegue Katy Murk. We know that the suspect was in the vicinity at the time of the murder and witnesses claim to have seen her knock the victim unconsious before injecting the poison into his body. Her fingerprints are all over the syringe that was used to inject the poison. A very open and shut case if you ask me Your Honor," Eva stated, smirking at De Villiers.

"Hmm, it does seem to be, Ms Edgeworth. Please call your first witness!" Eva nodded.

"The prosecution calls the security guard who witnessed the murder!"A woman wearing a space helmet walked to the stand, which Eva thought a little weird. She saw her father mouthing something frantically to her, but what Eva couldn't make out, and so she simply shrugged and turned to the witness.

"Witness, please state your name and occupation for the court," The lady took her helmet off to reveal a pinched face which resembled a lemon and a really strange hairstyle.

"Wendy Oldbag, security guard, whippersnapper!" Oldbag screeched. She paused. "EDGEY POO!"NO! NO! PLEASE NO! NOT THE WICKED WITCH OF THE WITNESS STAND! ARGH! Eva nearly cried out in exasperation at her bad luck. This was just not her day... at least if she had known about it beforehand, she would have been able to psyche herself up for what would surely be a very irritating and exasperating trial. Eva sighed, putting all her thoughts aside for a moment, she said "Witness, please testify as to what you saw for the court!"

"Don't worry Egey-poo, I'll do a good job for your litle girl!" Eva nearly face palmed, but decided not to, she wasn't about to show De Villiers she was getting frustrated.
"So I was walking around the building, making sure no whippersnappers were loitering, when I heard a curious noise,"

"I decided to investigate in case there was trouble,"

"I then saw the defendant knock poor Mr Newt out and poison him!"

"I always knew that she was a whippersnapper all along!" Eva exhaled. The testimony was all right, De Villiers would have to work to get a contradiction.

De Villiers smirked and began her cross examination of Oldbag. She annoyingly pressed every statement and soon Eva began to tire of it.

"Your Honor, it appears the defense is unable to find any contradictions with this witness therefore her testimony can be considered credible, which indeed proves the defendant guilty. However, the prosecution wishes to call one more witness just to cement its case. Ms Oldbag, you may step down," Oldbag blew a kiss at Edgeworth before leaving, muttering to herself.

"The Prosecution calls Miss Lesley Harper, the receptionist at the laboratory!"


Spoiler: Next Chapter
The judge then declared a recess and then they would hear Miss Harper's testimony. Eva walked out into the lobby, deciding not to bother preparing Lesley as they had gone over her testimony several times already, and so Eva contented herself with just sitting on the couch in the lobby and trying to calm herself down. However, she couldn't keep back a memory from years before when she had first started to learn to prosecute, at the age of eight.

FLASHBACK

"Now, Eva. You understand that you do not have to become a prosecutor if you do not wish to," her father had said.

"No, father, I want to hold the family's good name. I want to be a prosecutor, I was born to prosecute,"

"Very well, as you wish. The first thing you must know is that prosecuting is about finding the truth. More often than not the defendant is guilty, but keep an open mind at all times. Things are often bathed in new light in court. If the defendant is innocent, accept it and guide the defense attorney to the not guilty verdict. Prosecuting is NOT about winning or attaining a perfect record, do you understand?"

"Yes, father. But.... Grandfather Manfred...he had a perfect record, did he not?"

"Your grandfather was not an honest man, Eva. Please do not use him as a role model - in fact, I forbid you to think of him. He brought many people pain and suffering and you will not do the same, is that clear?!"

END OF FLASHBACK

Eva sat and thought of her long dead grandfather. What I didn't know at the time is that Manfred murdered Grandfather Gregory... I understand my father's bitterness towards him. He then tried to pin a murder on my father which he committed.... Eva felt anger rise up in her for the first time in a long while and she vowed to never be a prosecutor like Manfred von Karma, who had caused both of her parents so much agony.

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I actually think you improved with the re-write and the new chapter. Your writing style is getting better. The flashback while short, gave me what I wanted to see. I feel as it showed something different in your style than most authors, that is a good thing.
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Ahhh the chapter is longggggggggggggggggggggg!! Great!!
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This is pretty good. You did improve well, but perhaps a bit more of Eva's mother should be put in? Otherwise, you did a decent job. :nick:
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Okaaaay! Finally read this! Sorry it took so long.

Anyway, I love it. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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'Don't think ANYONE can wait, really.

Just keep trying to improve. :uramidn:
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Next chappie! At last a MilesxFran chapter!

Spoiler: The parent's opinion
Meanwhile up in the gallery, Miles and Franziska were discussing their daughter’s performance in the trial so far.

“She’s doing well, and definitely not taking any nonsense from the defense attorney!” Miles commented.

“Yes, I agree,”

“She works so hard to please us, perhaps too hard,”

“You’re right, I once found her collapsed in the library at about 4am with a pile of law books spread out in front of her. Sound familiar, Miles Edgeworth?” Franziska smirked, recalling the endless nights of their teens, studying to all hours of the night if necessary, and working for their insane control freak of a father. Franziska felt pure rage seep through her. How could she have ever seen that man as a role model?

"I hope you repimanded her, Franziska, I don't want her getting into a habit off doing it like we did," Miles said worriedly.

"Do not trouble yourself, Miles. I woke her up immediately and sent her straight to bed, after telling her she was not to do it again," Franziska soothed.

“So, I thought you looked a little worried when the security woman took to the stand,” she said, effectively changing the subject.

“You’re right; I was concerned as she is a difficult witness...” Miles trailed off.

“And has a little crush on you, no? Don’t worry, you’re MARRIED. She cannot do a THING about that. However, I will take the precaution of giving her a good whipping, just so she gets the message,” Miles smirked. He did love his wife when she said things like that, even though whipping was violent and many people, including the judge’s brother and Lotta Hart, had tried to sue her for assault and battery as a consequence of this.

“Oh, it appears recess is over,” Franziska mused, snapping Miles out of his reverie. They both turned to face the court as their daughter and the defense attorney took their places once more...

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Sweet, a new chapter! I feel bad for Oldbag. XD
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Hehe! I love MilesxFran! Yeah, poor Oldbag!! Though your chapter is a bit short!!^^
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May have been short but went into a key point. Their discussion I felt was fleshed out quite well and nice to read.
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*random tacklage of Franini* Mooooooorrreeeee!!!!
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@Lida_Rose - Thanks! PW events is great too!
@Katherin Crae Dahl - Lol. I'll try to update in the next few days.
@JasmineJustice - Yeah, but Oldbag deserves it. Thanks for reviewing!
@Indochine Ramera - Yes, as I did two fairly long chapters last time, this one WAS a b it shorter. I tried to prolong for as long as I could, but any further I felt would just be unnecessary, and I wanted the chapter to be all about Miles and Franziska as they hadn't appeared much yet.
@Platinum Skye - Thanks, I thought this was a key point so I had it in one chapter as you mentioned in your first review.
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I'm not the biggest fan of :franny: / :edgy: but it quite works in this case... I found it really good.
I really like :franny: / :phoenix: but when a good job is done I must admit the other one works out just fine.

Keep going on with this... I'm sure it'll be awesome. :franny:
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Okaaay, got away from my RPs long enough to read this. And I'm glad I did. :D I enjoyed reading the conversation.
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Right, I'm going to start updating this again soon but first just the story so far. The next chapter will be called 'Harping on, Ms De Villiers?' and should be up soon!

Spoiler: The story so far
It was the start of something everyone had been waiting for - the start of Eva Edgeworth's prosecuting career. Like her parents, she was starting early, at thirteen. People were expecting something amazing. She would win with flying colours. But what would it be like if YOU were Eva herself? Well, it would be an understatement to say that Eva was nervous.

"Just do your best," her father had said. But Eva wasn't sure her best would be good enough. She was sat in the prosecution lobby, looking over her court record for what seemed like the thousandth time. The witnesses were prepared, she had spent ages making sure her case was contradiction-less, so surely nothing would go wrong, right? Eva's head began to fill with a million what-ifs and she was just about to run out of the lobby screaming when the bailiff said it was time to go in.
"Thanks," she choked out, before walking into the courtroom. It was now or never. She saw her parents sitting up in the gallery, and Eva saw her father smile and give a nod, which gave her some confidence. She stood behind the prosecutor's bench, checked the court record one last time, and before she knew it, it was ten o'clock and time for the trial to start.

"Order! ORDER!" the judge had to yell to make himself heard - there were a lot of people in the gallery today obviously. "Now, is the prosecution and defense ready?"

"The prosecuton is ready, Your Honor,"Eva managed to say she was ready without sounding too nervous, but the defense merely smirked.

"The defense is prepared... to babysit a thirteen year old!" the woman at the defense stand said mockingly.

"And you are?" Eva said coldly. She took an immediate dislike to the woman who had just tried to trash talk her.

"Kelsey De Villiers," she answered, and Eva saw that infuriating smirk was still on her face.
Fortunately, before anything nasty happened, the judge intervened.

"Ahem! Ms. von Karma, please give an outline of this case," the judge said.

"Your Honor, my surname is Edgeworth, not von Karma... please refer to me by my correct surname in future if you please. Now. The victim was Carter Newt, a scientist at the local laboratory. He was found dead outside the aforementioned laboratory at 1am on Tuesday morning. Cause of death was chemical poisoning. The suspect is his collegue Katy Murk. We know that the suspect was in the vicinity at the time of the murder and witnesses claim to have seen her knock the victim unconsious before injecting the poison into his body. Her fingerprints are all over the syringe that was used to inject the poison. A very open and shut case if you ask me Your Honor," Eva stated, smirking at De Villiers.

"Hmm, it does seem to be, Ms Edgeworth. Please call your first witness!" Eva nodded.

"The prosecution calls the security guard who witnessed the murder!"A woman wearing a space helmet walked to the stand, which Eva thought a little weird. She saw her father mouthing something frantically to her, but what Eva couldn't make out, and so she simply shrugged and turned to the witness.

"Witness, please state your name and occupation for the court," The lady took her helmet off to reveal a pinched face which resembled a lemon and a really strange hairstyle.

"Wendy Oldbag, security guard, whippersnapper!" Oldbag screeched. She paused. "EDGEY POO!"NO! NO! PLEASE NO! NOT THE WICKED WITCH OF THE WITNESS STAND! ARGH! Eva nearly cried out in exasperation at her bad luck. This was just not her day... at least if she had known about it beforehand, she would have been able to psyche herself up for what would surely be a very irritating and exasperating trial. Eva sighed, putting all her thoughts aside for a moment, she said "Witness, please testify as to what you saw for the court!"

"Don't worry Egey-poo, I'll do a good job for your litle girl!" Eva nearly face palmed, but decided not to, she wasn't about to show De Villiers she was getting frustrated.
"So I was walking around the building, making sure no whippersnappers were loitering, when I heard a curious noise,"

"I decided to investigate in case there was trouble,"

"I then saw the defendant knock poor Mr Newt out and poison him!"

"I always knew that she was a whippersnapper all along!" Eva exhaled. The testimony was all right, De Villiers would have to work to get a contradiction.

De Villiers smirked and began her cross examination of Oldbag. She annoyingly pressed every statement and soon Eva began to tire of it.

"Your Honor, it appears the defense is unable to find any contradictions with this witness therefore her testimony can be considered credible, which indeed proves the defendant guilty. However, the prosecution wishes to call one more witness just to cement its case. Ms Oldbag, you may step down," Oldbag blew a kiss at Edgeworth before leaving, muttering to herself.

"The Prosecution calls Miss Lesley Harper, the receptionist at the laboratory!"


The judge then declared a recess and then they would hear Miss Harper's testimony. Eva walked out into the lobby, deciding not to bother preparing Lesley as they had gone over her testimony several times already, and so Eva contented herself with just sitting on the couch in the lobby and trying to calm herself down. However, she couldn't keep back a memory from years before when she had first started to learn to prosecute, at the age of eight.

FLASHBACK

"Now, Eva. You understand that you do not have to become a prosecutor if you do not wish to," her father had said.

"No, father, I want to hold the family's good name. I want to be a prosecutor, I was born to prosecute,"

"Very well, as you wish. The first thing you must know is that prosecuting is about finding the truth. More often than not the defendant is guilty, but keep an open mind at all times. Things are often bathed in new light in court. If the defendant is innocent, accept it and guide the defense attorney to the not guilty verdict. Prosecuting is NOT about winning or attaining a perfect record, do you understand?"

"Yes, father. But.... Grandfather Manfred...he had a perfect record, did he not?"

"Your grandfather was not an honest man, Eva. Please do not use him as a role model - in fact, I forbid you to think of him. He brought many people pain and suffering and you will not do the same, is that clear?!"

END OF FLASHBACK

Eva sat and thought of her long dead grandfather. What I didn't know at the time is that Manfred murdered Grandfather Gregory... I understand my father's bitterness towards him. He then tried to pin a murder on my father which he committed.... Eva felt anger rise up in her for the first time in a long while and she vowed to never be a prosecutor like Manfred von Karma, who had caused both of her parents so much agony.


Meanwhile up in the gallery, Miles and Franziska were discussing their daughter’s performance in the trial so far.

“She’s doing well, and definitely not taking any nonsense from the defense attorney!” Miles commented.

“Yes, I agree,”

“She works so hard to please us, perhaps too hard,”

“You’re right, I once found her collapsed in the library at about 4am with a pile of law books spread out in front of her. Sound familiar, Miles Edgeworth?” Franziska smirked, recalling the endless nights of their teens, studying to all hours of the night if necessary, and working for their insane control freak of a father. Franziska felt pure rage seep through her. How could she have ever seen that man as a role model?

"I hope you repimanded her, Franziska, I don't want her getting into a habit off doing it like we did," Miles said worriedly.

"Do not trouble yourself, Miles. I woke her up immediately and sent her straight to bed, after telling her she was not to do it again," Franziska soothed.

“So, I thought you looked a little worried when the security woman took to the stand,” she said, effectively changing the subject.

“You’re right; I was concerned as she is a difficult witness...” Miles trailed off.

“And has a little crush on you, no? Don’t worry, you’re MARRIED. She cannot do a THING about that. However, I will take the precaution of giving her a good whipping, just so she gets the message,” Miles smirked. He did love his wife when she said things like that, even though whipping was violent and many people, including the judge’s brother and Lotta Hart, had tried to sue her for assault and battery as a consequence of this.

“Oh, it appears recess is over,” Franziska mused, snapping Miles out of his reverie. They both turned to face the court as their daughter and the defense attorney took their places once more...

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This is a good story so far. Seeing things through the prosecutors eyes is a different and great idea! You also portrayed the characters quite well, and I love how Franziska wants to whip the Oldbag. :keiko:

I can't wait for the next chapters to come out! :godot:
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