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My Apollo/Trucy fanfic! It's about how they start a relationship, and all
the moral and legal issues that inevitably follow.
It's devided in three acts, I'm currently writing on the second one.
(yeah, it's still ongoing, sue me) Also, beware the textwall. xD

I've changed it all to link to the page at the Phoenix Wright Fanfiction Archive
since I had to repost it at the old forums. It simplifies things.



Act 1: A Forbidden Relationship




Summary: Trucy and Apollo each discover the feelings they both share, and one
thing leads to another... Takes place after Apollo Justice. Spoilers for the entire game.
Note that they don't know their 'real' relation yet.
Rating: 15-16+ (Mild adult themes, a single offensable scene)
Genre: Romance
Pairing: Trucy/Apollo

Page at the Phoenix Wright fanfic archive



Act 2: Turnabout Frame




Summary: Apollo finds himself in a difficult situation as a result of his relationship
with Trucy. Will he be able to turn this case around? Spoilers for GS4 and GS2.
Rating: 16+ (Adult themes, sexual references, offensive scene)
Genres: Drama, Law/Court
Pairings: Trucy/Apollo, some mild Phoenix/Franziska

Page at the Phoenix Wright fanfic archive




Be sure to leave a review! <3

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Just a tip: You should make new paragraphs, or at least a line separation, every time a new person speaks. Example:

“Hey Apollo-”

“I AM FIIIINE!!!” I screamed, only moments later realizing that I’d nearly
deafened my assistant, Trucy.


Like that. Makes it easier to read and comprehend. :3 Tackling it from a grammatical standpoint since incest squicks me.
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Well this should be...interesting, the storylines good enough and your writing style is good, I'll keep an eye on this.

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I just wrote the second chapter. I added it to the first post.
There's something unusual about it though; the POV now
switches to Trucy.

Oh, and sorry pariah, but I couldn't change my writing style
just like that. Well, I at least divided it into three paraghraphs...

Now I'm not quite usure if this is any good... I mean, it's not
every day that I have to think like a girl. xD
In any case, I'd appreciate comments or constructive critisism.
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Why didn't he tell Trucy? lol still if he had the storyline would be less interesting...
I like this...and want the next chapter :meekins:

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Why didn't he tell Trucy?

Well, could you look a young girl like that in the eyes and break her heart?
Especially if she's your daughter?
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Yeahh i guess so but he's her brother! what if she listens to her heart and tells apollo and he admits he likes her too, THEN they find out they're related, surely better to tell her now before her feelings aren't too strong?

Mehh oh well, carry on with the story lol i wanna know what happens next...

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Spoiler: AJ/GS4, incase you didn't yet notice...
You know, it is that I have completed AJ, but maybe your topic title gives a little too much away...


but I liked it!
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You've got a point.
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Good!! btw, I like your avatar!
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Just finished chapter 3. It's from Apollo's POV again.
Things are going to get interesting real soon, I think.
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Well hurry up and post in then, I wanna know what happens next lol!

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I added i to the first post.
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OMG! They both like each other! Yes you're right now it's getting interesting!
Good chapter lol

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Well, it would be kinda weird if they didn't both like each other.
Presumably. Maybe. Eventually. What?

*ahem*

I wrote Chapter 4, and added it to the first post. (It's much easier that way IMO)
It's in Trucy's POV this time again. I thought it made an interesting
pattern, not sure what you all think~
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I really wish I could read this from more than a grammatical standpoint, but I cannot, SO!

Spelling is good. Still feels kind of 'wall of text' and hard to follow; see my tips from the first reply I made. Otherwise, looks decent.
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I wrote chapter 5, added it to the first post.
Despite the fact that hardly anyone even reads. :sadshoe:
Or they just don't want to comment. Either way it's bad. :sadshoe:
Well, at least there's still the joy of writing, wright?
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I read it! I'm a fan too, don't worry, this story is really good. I think it's a tad fast, but still, good. :will:
:hobohodo:/ :maya:Cause they're perfect for each other
:sassy:/ :kyouya:Cause it's just awesome
:odoroki:/ :minuki:Cause it's so cute even though I don't really like incest
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Aw, thanks! ^^
And yeah, I know it might be a bit fast. I'm always way faster than I like to be. xD
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I'm reading it too!! But I'll be leaving for 3 weeks soon, so I'll catch up after that...
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Yeahh, i've been following it from the begining, I kinda like that it's fast, that way you don't have to wait forever for something exciting to happen, + i like how you post the chapters so close to each other, i means you're not left wondering what'll happen next for weeks.

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And yeahh i guess it would be a kinda strange fanfiction if one didn't like the other...
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Miyuki-chan wrote:
I read it! I'm a fan too, don't worry, this story is really good. I think it's a tad fast, but still, good. :will:


Oh I can't quote your sig, but I think it contains a serious AJ spoiler:
Spoiler: AJ big spoiler!
Namely that :odoroki: and :minuki: are siblings...
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Thanks for all the positive feedback guys. It really means a lot to me. *sniffle*

*ahem* Anyways, I'm going to have to have to think the next chapter over a bit
more, I think.
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Ok, well unless you post it within the next 12 hours or sth, I'll read it in 3 weeks time...
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Oh dear. Well, look at it this way; at least you don't have to leave with
some sort of cliffhanger or anything.... xD
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~Sorry for double post if it offends anyone~

Anyways, chapter 6 is written and up in the first post.
I believe the last scene might- uh, how do I put this,
offend (?) some people, but I don't know anything about
ratings so I could use a little help there.
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Whoa! I was definitely not expecting that! I thought Lamiroir was gonna show up all of a sudden.
:hobohodo:/ :maya:Cause they're perfect for each other
:sassy:/ :kyouya:Cause it's just awesome
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Greeny wrote:
~Sorry for double post if it offends anyone~

Anyways, chapter 6 is written and up in the first post.
I believe the last scene might- uh, how do I put this,
offend (?) some people, but I don't know anything about
ratings so I could use a little help there.


It's not too offensive, PG should be fine.

In anycase, I like it.
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Whoo! An ApolloxTrucy fic! I've been waitong for one of those... Anyways, the only advice I can give is to space out the speaking parts like pariah.

Anyways, as for the story, it was really good. I liked, was entertained, though the end of chapter six was kinda a moment of, "reading, reading, reading, readingHOLY CRAP WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT!" And I don't mean that in a bad way.
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Yeah when i said i didnt expect it, i meant it in a good way, sorry for not saying so earlier.
:hobohodo:/ :maya:Cause they're perfect for each other
:sassy:/ :kyouya:Cause it's just awesome
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Posted Chapter 7 to the first post!
I think I just boosted up the PG rating again. xD
Well, there's many big surprizes in this chapter!
We see a familiar face - and an all too familiar
location.
Also I spent a lot of time doing research on
wikipedia for this. xD
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I love it~! Your writing style is amazing! XD
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O noes! Polly got in trouble for something he didn't do! That was pretty cool though, I must say. I await the next chapter. :will:
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Sweet crispy fried crap. This whole thing is... wow. And I mean that in a minorly bad way. And yes, all due respect, you did end up breaking the PG boundry.

Not that I'm complaining. I just didn't expect this to go from cute romance story to Apollo in court for statutory rape.

On the upside, it is an interesting twist, and a good story. One thing I gotta say though, always plan ahead when you rate these things. For example, in the trilogy that I was writing and never finished for I had backed myself into a hole that I hadn't planned ahead to dig myself out of, I had it planned on a first storyPG three curse words, extremely minor romance and undescriptive violence, second story PG, maybe PG-13 for more cursing, more somewhat stronger romance, and more violence with better descriptions, and the third story PG-13, probably R for tons of descriptive violence, mass amounts of drinking, tons of cursing, and one scene of sexual harassment. See, I planned ahead, and was therefore rewarded by not feeling bad about the rating.
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Well, I know but I couldn't properly give an accurate rating
even if I wanted to; here in Europe we have an entirely diffirent
system and I don't get all the PG stuff. (What's it stand for anyways?)
But I did mention it had 'Adult Themes'. Wel, I'd say it's going to
be about PG 15 (?) tops... Or something. But I don't know much people
who've ever stopped at ratings. xD
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Tha last chapter was WIN!!!!
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*blush*

You really think so? :3

So, I've just finished chapter 8 (wow, already?) and added it to the
first post. (which is getting impossibly big right now xD)
And we get a surprize: This one's from Phoenix's POV! *cue melodramatic gasping*

I really enjoyed writing from his point of view. He is one
lucky man to have recieved the gift of such a beautiful daughter. *sniffle*
I'm getting all emotional because of it. It's just so moving. :3
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OOh, the drama! Can't wait 'till chapter 9!!!!!
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Whodunnit?! WHO FRAMED MR. POLLY. ;^; But it was really good. :edgy:
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:sassy:/ :kyouya:Cause it's just awesome
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Wow, just listening to Phoenix talk about his emotions always brought a tear to my eye. Keep up the good work.
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